I probably wasn't looking as intently as I could, but I found two typos in Part 5:
"Eirin kept her bow at the ready, but she didn?t draw the
strong."
"The arrow disappeared into the mob, but not entirely. The arrowhead kept
is effect."
It'd take me a while to say everything I LIKED about this story, so it might be faster to focus on the one thing that irked me a little.
I know that it's different because it's an origin story, but it was somewhat offputting to see Reisen think back to the whole Tsukito attack almost every five seconds. It's a valid point, yes, and perfectly logical, but sometimes it felt like it was happening a little too often.
That's not to say I didn't enjoy it - hell, I'll admit my pulse was probably racing during the
- but as a reader I did slightly start saying 'alright, I get it, she's scarred after everyone she knew died and she ended up
, I don't need to keep seeing her break down in tears whenever she's alone'.
Besides that little complaint, it's your usual great work. In particular I actually really like the way you write Eirin, which means something since I normally don't care for her much as a character.
All in all, looking forward to seeing the continua-
This newest story will be the first of two that act as preludes to Ibunshu's final installment.
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