Decided to throw my hat in the ring.
Pretty cool you did one of your teacher! Did you tell him? I'd think he'd like it.
For a first script, it isn't bad. Lots of things I appreciate and some of the structure works. But the first script is never pretty :V
reminds me of my Rumia script that never saw the light of daySo here I go:
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I played as Ultima's Reimu.
NS1: Personally, while random bullets work in cases (heck, Sakuya has this as a spellcard), on its own it's rather simple. For a nonspell, I'll let it pass. Though the arrows, despite being the main theme, looks kinda weird in this.
S1: I like it! The parametrics work nicely and the lasers later on aren't awkward. A bit on the hard side, but that's on me for being a noob. Definitely my favorite.
NS2: (I'm going to collectively put both phases here.)Personally better than the first one, imo. I like the first wave more, but I see what you were doing with the second wave. The transition is... awkward. Is there supposed to be a bit of a wait in between?
S2: Hmm. I like the concept, but it was executed kinda weird. The spiral caught me very off guard, and I'm not exactly sure how you're supposed to approach it. I ended up finding a way by moving left and right in the center of the spiral, hoping that I wouldn't be sniped by oncoming fire. If I'm right, that spiral definitely needs more of a warning.
NS3: Same as NS1.
NS3.5: ...I'm gonna be blunt here. It's super chaotic, appearance and attack-wise. There are around 4 different bullet styles, and they're radically different. Lasers, stars, and knives all doing different things in an unorderly fashion is a bit much. Probably my least favorite nonspell.
S3: It's an alright spell. The burst at the end of each wave is a bit sudden, so a bit of a warning would be nice.
S4: I'm mixed. The laser grids I like, and the laser star section is cool and fits the theme nicely. Though, I'm curious on why you let the stars fire on their own for a bit once the laser part is over before the spell restarts.
My problem is the pinwheel. Sudden is one thing: I can learn sudden. However the pinwheel is
very wide, and *Reimu just isn't fast enough to swoop around to safety. There's also that the spell lasts for over 99 seconds. That's extremely long for a survival card. Considering the two phases, I think 45~60 seconds is a bit more feasible.
*I later went and tested this with a Marisa player. Definitely better for the pinwheel, but still very annoying.
S5: Organised chaos: In a good way. My second favorite spell. The spiral, like JDude mentioned, is pretty weird. It tends to suddenly push you into stuff: maybe that's the whole point. It's a really nice spell to look at, though the orange and green is a weird combo. I blame the bullet coloring though.
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Overall, for a first script? You did a really good job despite some glaring issues. Definitely love the first spell and the last one will stick around in my mind.
I think after some practice, you'll be making some super cool scripts in the future. I wonder, if you decide to go for it, which Touhou girl you'll try first...
The main thing is a bit of spell choreographing, and making sure your spell doesn't surprise people (too much at least). Since I kinda lack experience, all I can really say is to watch and study other people's scripts: good and bad. If they're on here, check their reviews if they have any.
I hope I didn't hit a nerve since I got a bit ranty at some parts. Funnily enough, this is also my first review.