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the old guy:

--- Quote from: Abby on May 27, 2016, 07:34:50 AM ---Cons: Meira, being about 7, probably knows not to trust random ghosts in the woods at night, which would lead to being taken by force (Actually now that I think about this that's not that bad-), her wanting to leave maybe implies bad homelife more than her disregard for 'fate', which is false

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Why can't it be both? Maybe her mother was overly baring, and pushed the pressure of being the next hakurei maiden down her throat so hard that Meira got too stressed out about it, and decided to rebel against her mother.

That said, i think you should go with 4. Would be more interesting.

MetalStudios:
First time posting here since I'm kinda new to being an active forum member.
Does anyone ever have issues coming up with last names for characters? I've given full names to pretty much every single character and now I'm down to the last two that I'm wanting to draft out. They're brothers, the elder is named Klein while the younger is named Gaffgarion. Every time I come up with with a name for one, it just doesn't feel right for the other one if that makes any sense. I've had a friend tell me to just change one of their first names to one I feel works or change their background so they're not brothers so they can have different last names, however I've held onto these two characters since I was in grade schools so there's a sort of sentimental value to how they are now and I just can't bring myself to change them.
As a followup I guess, does anyone else have any original characters that they've held onto for a prolonged period of time?

Hello Purvis:
I believe Gaffgarion's surname was Goffard? Or Gaff, if you got with the old translation.

And oh yeah, I have some that are older than the war on terror.

Zelinko:
So after finally getting more feedback on Double Exposure I'm having to do a major rewrite, if addendum to the title of that thread didn't make it clear.

I'm trying to salvage what I can from the first half and kind of begun working on a kinda retroactive outline of the rebuild as I've already got entire scenes to remove early on but I'm not sure how to fit what's left into there or if I'm cutting too deeply.

Still here is the newly built outline.

- Hatate overflight of SDM
- Checks camera for early deciding subject to write about afterwards
- Realization about photobombing Koishi
- Bank and change course
- Acceleration
- Diving to Geyser Center
- Most of rest of story / Koishi encounter, chase, etc

I'm pretty much as a given removing anything related to things happening in the fortress outside ideas related to Hatate's starting to preplan her story (noting about the festival, looking through the pictures, etc). The bigger problem is the salvaging without those recovered bits looking like they just don't fit.

Komeko:
Hey guys, just made an account for this. I saw a lot of really angsty stories on fanfiction.net and wanted to write a more fun one. Basically the plot is that in Phantasmagoria of Dim. Dream, Rikako Asakura beat Yumemi Okazaki and got her fifth grade science textbook. She promptly decides to study it and attempt to educate the whole of Gensokyo. Throughout her somewhat lonely endeavour(she's a heretic!) she opens up to new friends and gets into some arguments with some folks over her science-ing or lack thereof. As a note, the timeframe of this fic is set in PC-98 right after Phantasmagoria of Dim. Dream, but the other areas exist and so do their characters. I'm going to make sure there's nobody meeting someone before they should, but since Rikako and Rika aren't heard from again, it's assumed that they can interact with newer characters within reason.

Intro: (eh who needs spoilers it's legit the intro)
Rikako reads the very first passage in her science textbook which talks about what science is and why it matters. She's pretty inspired but soon realizes that maybe in Okazaki's world this might be a noble and lauded endeavour, but in Gensokyo she's going to be quite lonely. She decides that this was the dream she had and realizes just how unlikely beating Okazaki was in the first place, and so doubles down on her goal. In these first chapters she learns about the scientific method and is mind boggled by what a microscope is, and just how she's supposed to get one. Rika begins poking around her house.

First Arc: Biology, Classification, Plants, Animals, and Ecology
Spoiler: The first unit of the book, biology, might look easy, but the overwhelming amount of terms Rikako has to sort through is ridiculous. Even though it's a fifth grade book, many of the things being said are completely out of this world, and so Rikako very carefully goes through every experiment. There are a couple of issues with this, the aforementioned microscope issue, the issue about how she's supposed to get her cells on a 'slide', and the numerous issues with naming wondrous creatures in Gensokyo. To top it all off, after learning the material Rikako remembers her duty as a scientist and has to try to prove her book correctly by creating a public show of science. The local population of a spiritual wonderland is about as excited as you'd expect, and Rikako is devastated. However, she begins meeting some new friends, such as Rika and unexpectedly, Keine, who values learning for the sake of the children in the village as opposed to shutting out the two girls. Together they convince the town(and the powers that be) to let them demonstrate their scientific reports and experiments. The question is, will they get it right?
Second Arc: Geology and Cycles
Spoiler: Oh wow. A rock pit. Turns out there's only one good rockpit that Rikako and Rika don't need heavy duty stuff for is the playground of the Human Village's schoolhouse. After being teased a bit by the kids, the group help out the scientists learn about the rock cycle and geology, along with a field trip to Youkai Mountain to observe how rocks change over time. They then go to the Misty Lake to observe the water cycle with the help of Cirno(some shenanigans ensue) and finally go to the Hakurei Shrine to look at the Moon and stars as they're terrified to climb to the top of Youkai Mountain. Weird things begin to move afoot as their books are seemingly supplemented with more detailed papers and explanations. Who wrote those?
Final Arc: Matter, Energy, and Motion
Spoiler: Rikako and Rika have figured out most of the scientific grimoire thanks to both their new friends and some trust teamwork, not to mention those weird papers, however this part of the book is the last, and subsequently the hardest. The two scientists struggle to understand the fundamental reasoning behind any of the things they're learning, and are about to give up when they realize that even if they can observe or theoretically say a certain piece of their simplified physics, they'd never be able to prove it. Everyone's at a loss to what they need to do to prove it, until someone shows up. Is this who's been putting in the letters? How does she know so much science, and why hasn't she taken the glory? Enter Yumemi Okazaki and Chiyuri Kitashirakawa. With her guidance Rikako and Rika can't prove the physics on their own, but what they can do is keep studying. They realize that if they figure out the laws of physics they'll be known as the greatest scientists in Gensokyo, and Chiyuri offers to teach them, but they learn that they'll have to leave their home in the Human Village, and live with Yumemi and Chiyuri in the Forest of Magic. They both realize that the friends they've made and the contributions they've done for the community's well being are better than a title, and so they ask Chiyuri to still send them books, and when they're ready perhaps they'll take her up on the offer. Yumemi and Chiyuri accept this deal as they hand the girls their newest book, a sixth grade science textbook.
Along with around six math textbooks and a litany of workbooks and lab notebooks. Oh joy.
Again this is meant to be more of a heartwarming fanfic with themes of friendship and never giving up as opposed to something edgy, plus it's my first fic so I'd love to hear your feedback on it. Thanks a lot guys!

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