~Hakurei Shrine~ > Kosuzu's Grand Bookstore
Hanged Maid XII
Alfred F. Jones:
Dude, I read this last year on the imageboard, and I distinctly remember telling you that the original version of this was good, but needed to be a bit longer, drawing out Ruukoto's suffering and making the reader really feel for her.
And now, you have posted the revised version, and it shows great improvement. It's been said that things that are beautiful are rarely pretty, and your style really emphasizes that. I really felt for Ruukoto; she was way more human than the human around her. This was a great (re)read, Erebus!