~Hakurei Shrine~ > Kosuzu's Grand Bookstore
Guest of the Moon Princess: CYOA Story - FIXED!
Suikama:
To clarify on the outline, here a good example: http://ks.renai.us/download/file.php?id=957
Tengukami:
I love flow charts!
Suikama:
--- Quote from: Tengu-天照-kami on April 04, 2010, 02:45:09 AM ---I love flow charts!
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hi5 :D
Alright now for some actual thoughts on the work itself. What struck me immediately as a bit odd is that you're supposedly some random guy and yet somehow you already know everyone's names before they have introduced themselves.
One more thing is that you may have to reword some areas for the visual novel. For example instances of "she said" aren't really necessary. Anyways we'll see how it turns out.
Tengukami:
Ah, yeah, the guy already totally familiar with Gensokyo and its residents is my having a tongue-in-cheek approach to breaking the fourth wall. i.e., you, just your average Touhou fan, gapped. That could easily be changed, though. A total stranger to the world is just as fine.
Suikama:
So how's it coming along? :V