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| nintendonut888:
Posting close to the deadlines? Two sentence-long WWC entries? Sure, why not? 8D Ahem. Credit to Rou for his half of the story, slightly edited for the contest. NSFW warning! --- <Sakana> No. You are NOT posting NSFW stuff out in the open, warning or not. Even moreso stuff that's half by another person when that person has seemingly not agreed to it. Go back and read the Library-rules. Here, this is how you do it: [nsfw]http://pastebin.com/wDrfcMBv[/nsfw] --- Thank you, and good night. |
| PX:
I... finally did it. The girl lied in the ruins of the city, spent of all her energy. The sky held no vision of hope, only the clouds of despair. The tears she had held for eternity finally fell from the heavens as she finally tasted victory. Her thoughts wandered to the beginning of her journey. She remembered the six months she had spent in the hospital. Her first conversation with her. "You have a great name, so you should act cool to match it!" Back to the first time she was attacked. She had looked so cool when she saved her. Her first friend. When she had looked at her corpse, she brought this curse upon herself to help her out however she could. She remembered when she had made the promise that gave her a direction, and when she had to kill her best friend. "..ra-chan!" Her mind was brought back into the present as she saw a pink haired girl running towards her. Along side her was a strange white animal running on four legs. "Ma...doka...." "Homura-chan! Amazing! You defeated the Walpurgisnacht all by yourself! Homura-chan? Are you all right?!" "I'm fine.... Mado-!" Homura started writhing in pain. "Homura-chan! Kyubey, what's happening to her!" The strange animal started speaking. "She spent up all her power on defeating the witch. All that's left is for her to turn into a witch more powerful than the one she defeated." "No! Homura-chan! Kyubey, isn't there anything we can do?" "You can become a magical girl and use your wish to replenish her soul gem. All you have to do is make the contract." "No! Madoka! You can't! That'll be wasting all of my effort to stop you from becoming a magical girl. Ugh." "Homura-chan! Stop talking. I'll start looking for the grief seed rig-" "It's too late Madoka. Madoka.... I have one last wish. And only you can help me fulfill it." "What is it Homura-chan?" "I'm tired of fighting.... I've been fighting for as long as I can remember. I don't want to turn into a witch and fight anymore. So please, Madoka, destroy my soul gem." "But Homura-chan!" Homura reached into her shield and pulled out a pistol. The same pistol that she had once used to destroy Madoka's soul gem. "Please... do this for me. As my best friend...." "Homura-chan...." As a circle of blue opened up in the center of the sea of black clouds, a single gunshot could be heard along with the sound of a girl crying. Bonus: Kawashite yo kusoku wasure naiyo ne...~ |
| Iced Fairy:
Hammered Judging will commence now. But wait! A new thread is approaching fast! Tomorrow the final champion of this thread shall be chosen, and they shall hold their title for all of June! But there are new battles in the future. Fight on writers, for everlasting glory! |
| Iced Fairy:
Alright, it took the judges a bit of time but I think we've reached something of a consensus. Sect, I thought you did passingly well with small space. Similarly Donut's work was coherent, if not entirely properly placed. Capth, Your story was solid, but also a bit short and not quite fitting with the theme. Still I laughed. As for our longer entrants, Logos I'm afraid your story just got lost in itself. There was nothing solid to end. PX, I was interested in seeing a Madoka entry, but you didn't really do much with it. I think some body would have improved it a lot, or at least a Everyone else I can say had solid ideas, but unfortunately all of you lost flow at some point. Santora, you needed to bridge the gap between the old and new parties a little better, and could have used a little more body. Affinity, your wordiness worked against you. Long entrances and paragraphs for dreams and hallucination, shorter sentences for everyday impact. Zent, you were a little to clinical when you reached the twist in your story. If you'd had strong emotion there I think you'd have won. Which leads us to.... Nobu : While the connections between the two deities could have been described a little better, and you should avoid explanatory authors notes like the plague, your story did what it set out to do in a neat manner, and your ending was an interesting one. So congratulations Nobu, you are the winner. |
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