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| Sen:
Awww, thank you, guys. ;_; Just to clarify, when you talk about the formatting errors, you're speaking about the lines where I give like, a four-word sentence its own line, right? I'll keep that in mind next time I write. I really only do that formatting thing when I write in present-tense. I've always felt like past-tense is someone writing down their actions and feelings at a later date, so they can be more articulate and more structured (more paragraphs and such). With present-tense, I feel that it's basically just the person's thoughts or emotions put to words. They don't conciously think these things, I just write what I think they would feel, hence why a lot of it is fragments, separate lines, etc. I'll definitely keep these in mind though, if it makes the story hard to read, I shouldn't be doing it. And again, it does look better in Word, what with 1.5-spacing and indents and such. I'll have to keep in mind that forums don't have those. To be honest, I wrote this on a whim after seeing this picture, which made me think what would have happened if Koishi had cut away her third eye, rather than just closing it. It's kinda AU I guess, although AU has such a bad connotation most of the time >: |
| Gpop:
--- Quote from: SenSageUn on January 31, 2010, 08:51:38 PM ---To be honest, I wrote this on a whim after seeing this picture, which made me think what would have happened if Koishi had cut away her third eye, rather than just closing it. It's kinda AU I guess, although AU has such a bad connotation most of the time >: --- End quote --- I thought it would be after seeing this image ;_;. |
| Esifex:
OH GOD WHY ARE WE ALL LOOKING AT SUCH THINGS :C I refuse to think that Koishi sliced off her Third Eye - forever in my mind she just closed it, or maybe put some sunglasses on it or somethin. She's really not a favorite character of mine (although the Komeiji's are getting shoved down my throat enough to start to change that... GPOPONTHEIMAGETHREADYOUKNOWWHATI'MTALKINGABOUT) for me to be tooooooo concerned about it, but... Christ. Self-mutiliation? In my Touhou? Let's not. |
| Gpop:
--- Quote from: Esifex on February 01, 2010, 02:23:01 AM ---(although the Komeiji's are getting shoved down my throat enough to start to change that... GPOPONTHEIMAGETHREADYOUKNOWWHATI'MTALKINGABOUT) --- End quote --- :suwakodwi: |
| Slaves:
this is more or less how i imagined Koishi's 3rd eye closing. although i refuse to believe that Yuugi is a bad guy. that better have been her mom or something. >:( also, i didn't think this was bad, you're definitely better than me. but i can't write for shit, so i'm not sure how much of a compliment that is. |
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