~Hakurei Shrine~ > Kosuzu's Grand Bookstore
Third Eye In Pure Waters
Kiro:
As a former swim instructor for the city pool, I was touched by this.
Especially with:
--- Quote from: Roukanken on August 25, 2009, 09:03:48 PM ---"Of course it is! I've never had a pupil drown on me yet!"
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Dizzy H. "Muffin" Muffin:
Nah, make the kind of Bad Ending that you'd find in a Touhou game, more of a "dammit, we lost a danmaku duel" than "Kanako, what's going on there? KANAKOOOOO! *but the future refused to change*"
FinnKaenbyou:
--- Quote from: CAPTAIN MURASA MINADRAKE on August 26, 2009, 01:28:21 AM ---Also, you've obviously been playing Tales again.
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As in 'Koishi sounds a hell of a lot like Yuri'? Or Karol-style 'I'll protect my friends no matter what the cost'?
...Ohgodnowihavekoishiasyuriinmyheadanditsjustexpandingfromtheremakeitgoaway
--- Quote from: Nwbi on August 26, 2009, 02:41:04 AM ---Spoiler: Good Ending #1? Are you planning on multiple endings/installments?
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Not really, it was mostly for the sake of writing this.
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This is bad...
"Blub-blub..."
Satori held a hand over her mouth to try and stop the air from escaping. She was slowly becoming aware that this whole swimming thing was one of the worst ideas she'd had in recent times. The dolphin's eyes followed each bubble as it rose upwards.
...Is it going to help me?
The dolphin looked her in the eye for a single instant. Maybe she'd let her grab on and carry her to the surface-
"I'M FASTER THAN YOU MOTHERFUCKER LOL"
Taking the opportunity to show off, the dolphin zoomed across to the other side of the lake, taking no interest in Satori's plight.
"Glug glug..."
Satori hit the bottom of the lake, her lungs empty. She felt her consciousness fading. This was it.
Only one thing worth doing...
With the last of her strength, she extended the middle finger in her left hand and held it up for the dolphin to see.
Jerk.
THIRD EYE IN PURE WATERS
BAD ENDING #1
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Koishi-chan's Bad End Corner
*Koishi walks out wearing a pair of glasses, holding a small blackboard and pointer stick*
Hi, everybody!
The time has come to teach Nee-chan, who has walked into her first Dead End.
It's time for Koishi-chan's Bad End Corner!
Oh, this is a sad one.
You're sitting there, floundering around, and Sango-chan just leaves you there.
Actually, this one isn't really your fault, Nee-chan.
Sango-chaaaaaan!
*Sango appears from offscreen in youkai form*
"Hm? Yeah, what is it?"
Why'd you let Nee-chan drown like that?
"...She was drowning? I thought those bubbles were coming out of an engine or something. ...She wasn't challenging me to a race?"
...Well, that pretty much says it all.
This is the kind of person who you need to save you, Nee-chan.
It'll help if you make things as obvious as possible around Sango-chan.
If you don't, things like this end up happening.
"Huh? Who are you talking to, Koishi-chan?"
No-one at all~
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Why yes, Tsukihime was the first VN I ever played. What makes you think that?
After some thought, I might be able to produce a follow-up where she teaches Orin and Okuu...
Kuma:
But how will Okuu swim with an NUCLEAR CONTROL RAD FOR AN ARM and a FREAKING CONCREAT LEG!?
No, but seriously, This was an awesome thing, I'd love to read more stories from you <3
FinnKaenbyou:
--- Quote from: HatKuma035 on August 26, 2009, 10:53:55 AM ---But how will Okuu swim with an NUCLEAR CONTROL RAD FOR AN ARM and a FREAKING CONCREAT LEG!?
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Well, that's a question for Sango to answer, isn't it? ^_^