Maidens of the Kaleidoscope
~Hakurei Shrine~ => Alice's Art Atelier => Topic started by: Kommisar on June 09, 2012, 12:44:28 AM
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(｀・ω・?)(｀・ω・?)(｀・ω・?)(｀・ω・?)(｀・ω・?)(｀・ω・?)(｀・ω・?)(｀・ω・?)(｀・ω・?)
Haven't been here in a while haha. Picked up my gameboy again and made this. All done on LSDJ, gameboy tracker blah blah.
http://soundcloud.com/kommisar/lunatic-eyes-dat-immortal-moon
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>kommisar makes music post
>immediately rush to thread
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Decent LSDJ work here, really picks up right before the midway point. I liked the buildup to it. If you feel like working on it further I have some critiques for you:
The part from 0:26 to 1:13 felt like it dragged on too long, I would recommend trying to reduce it to 2 or 4 patterns [not sure what your tempo & speed are set to] and hear how that works. After the swing section you can possibly bring back the patterns @ 1:26 for a while and successfully extend the tune. As it is a dance track, I like to see those reach at least 5 or 6 minutes. Also, I am not a fan of the arpeggio effect for the lead. Probably just a taste thing, but I just don't like how it's used here for the lead. Hurts my head. Can probably get a lot more expressive with pitch bends and vibrato instead.
On another subject, didn't realize you posted here, that is cool. I have featured your songs on my radio show before, a few times, mainly Rigid Paradise. Keep up the good work!
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thank you! This is certainly something I want to go back and polish up some. great feedback :3
Need to keep working on this EP :blush:
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Pretty good and rockin'!
I think 0:56 could use an alternate pattern to keep interest up. Seconding Overcoat on the post-swing pattern repetition.
I dislike using arpeggiation on leads or bass, and would prefer them for backing material (as in covering chords and similar harmony parts).