Maidens of the Kaleidoscope

~Hakurei Shrine~ => Alice's Art Atelier => Topic started by: JT on August 07, 2011, 09:56:11 AM

Title: [art] Hey look, I made a thing (now with music!?)
Post by: JT on August 07, 2011, 09:56:11 AM
Just a little something I've been slowly hobbling together over the past couple of weeks. My coloring skills are still dodgy at best, but I'm pretty happy with how the overall design came out. :3

(http://img84.imageshack.us/img84/5827/hollyr.th.jpg) (http://img814.imageshack.us/img814/8232/hollyb.jpg)

I'll post more new stuff eventually. God willing, it'll be sometime before the sun goes supernova.
Title: Re: [art] Hey look, I made a thing
Post by: Tengukami on August 07, 2011, 11:44:11 AM
That looks really professional. I don't know what you mean about your coloring skills, though, because everything looks fine to me.
Title: Re: [art] Hey look, I made a thing
Post by: HakureiSM on August 07, 2011, 11:34:17 PM
Damn nice design hot damn
Title: Re: [art] Hey look, I made a thing
Post by: DX7.EP on August 07, 2011, 11:43:14 PM
Very nice design.

My coloring skills are still dodgy at best, but I'm pretty happy with how the overall design came out. :3
Still beats mine. Though I'd like more contrast....

The textures on her shirt and skirt don't always follow the shape and contour of the body, so it looks visually distracting in places.

Figure seems pretty static and motionless. There are several ways to fix this, but I'm not exactly sure what will work best here.
Title: Re: [art] Hey look, I made a thing
Post by: noodles on August 10, 2011, 06:05:42 AM
I like your thing 8)
Title: Re: [art] Hey look, I made a thing
Post by: Teewee on August 11, 2011, 12:16:28 PM
I like the design too! Good work as always, JT :) Only problem I see there is that the eyes lack shine, which makes her look less lively.
Title: Re: [art] Hey look, I made a thing (now with music!?)
Post by: JT on August 22, 2011, 08:01:14 AM
Thanks for the praise/criticism, gentlemen. Your comments are always appreciated.

This is a remix/arrangement/whatever of Ultimate Truth (Youmu's stage in PCB) (http://soundcloud.com/johnschander1/ulttru2), done completely from scratch in FL Studio. I've never done anything like this before and have basically zero knowledge of music theory, so go easy on me.
Title: Re: [art] Hey look, I made a thing (now with music!?)
Post by: Bio on August 22, 2011, 08:07:25 AM
Thanks for the praise/criticism, gentlemen. Your comments are always appreciated.

This is a remix/arrangement/whatever of Ultimate Truth (Youmu's stage in PCB) (http://soundcloud.com/johnschander1/ulttru2), done completely from scratch in FL Studio. I've never done anything like this before and have basically zero knowledge of music theory, so go easy on me.
The first few seconds are way to quiet even for a build up. But hey, nice work. My only other complaint would be the repetitive nature, but that holds no ground.

Fake E:
The transition at 3:06 also seems a bit unnatural.
Title: Re: [art] Hey look, I made a thing (now with music!?)
Post by: DX7.EP on August 22, 2011, 09:33:00 AM
This is a remix/arrangement/whatever of Ultimate Truth (Youmu's stage in PCB) (http://soundcloud.com/johnschander1/ulttru2), done completely from scratch in FL Studio. I've never done anything like this before and have basically zero knowledge of music theory, so go easy on me.
Not bad considering that you are just starting with music in general, overall. Now for the rest:

Copying Bio here with the quiet build-up.

Instrumentation is too simple, making repetition an issue. Change around instruments at times in the melody and completely for the counter-harmony.
Also, more importantly the mix is too simple - it seems like a part of something, rather than something that can act stand-alone.

I find that the instruments have too much delay/sustain, and the release too short. Also I'd add a tiny bit of reverb to melody and drumkit.

I don't really have much like for the analog kit.

Abrupt transition at 3:06....
Title: Re: [art] Hey look, I made a thing (now with music!?)
Post by: JT on August 22, 2011, 12:36:49 PM
Ahh, I see! Thank you very much.

Also, "analog kit?" You mean the drums or...?
Title: Re: [art] Hey look, I made a thing (now with music!?)
Post by: DX7.EP on August 24, 2011, 03:24:46 AM
Also, "analog kit?" You mean the drums or...?
Yeah, the drumkit. It is based off the sounds of analog drum synthesizers such as the Roland TR-808.