At last I finished my story! I don't know if my story true or not, my English is so bad after all. This story is postponed by me for a while before because I write Grand Chase fanfic too. Many people wants me to continue and continue. Well... I can't turn it down. Enjoy btw! ^^
The (Un)usual Day For Marisa
Spring has come in Gensokyo earlier than usual. The spring fairy, Lily White flying happily all around Gensokyo. Shouting and spreading Danmaku Bullet from her sleeves.
?IT?S.... SPRINGGG~!!!?
The fairy flying pass Hakurei Shrine and spreading the Danmaku Bullet around there too. Meanwhile, a shrine maiden open the shrine?s sliding door lazily. Lily White?s Danmaku nearly hit her on the foot.
?Hey! Brainless Fairy!! Don?t spread your Danmaku in my shrine! It?s dangerous you know!!!? The Shrine Maiden scold the fairy, but doesn?t have any intention to punish her.
Lily stop her flying and panickly apologize to the shrine maiden who still standing in front of the sliding door, emotionless.
?Eeeekkkkk! I... I?m sorry Reimu-san! I just... too happy that the spring has come.... Sorry and excuse me!!?
Reimu staring at the white fairy that make a quick escape after apologized to her until she disappear from her sight.
*sigh* ?Why is she run away? Am I that scary? Ahhh... forget it!?
The red-white shrine maiden walk into the store room, picking up her broom to sweep the shrine?s courtyard.
Arriving there, Reimu spotted someone praying in front of the shrine?s offertory box. She dropped her broom and quickly approach the prayer.
?Thank you for visiting our shrine!?
The black haired shrine maiden bow slightly to that prayer. The person notice Reimu and turn to her. Looking to the mysterious person, Reimu take a few minutes until she finally know who that person is.
?You?re..?
A few hours later in the Forest of Magic...
A black-white witch holding a bamboo broom in her hands, waiting for someone in front of her house.
?Where on Gensokyo does that doll maniac go? I?ve been waited for such a long time?
Suddenly, a blonde haired girl appear near the witch, together with her doll which is also blonde haired.
?Who are you calling doll maniac, Marisa! You sneaky thief!!? The blonde girl shout to Marisa, make the black-white witch jump a bit.
?Whoa! Sorry Alice, but you really take a lot of time. We just want to go for shopping right? ?
?Oh that... ummm.... well.... sorry about that, but I think we?ll go shopping some other time. I have to prepare for something now...?
?Awwww... just what are you preparing??
?N.. not your business! Anyway, I must get going now. Bye!!? Alice walking away quickly, leaving the now confused witch.
?What?s wrong with her? Geez... Maybe I go borrowing some book from Patchy for now-ze~?
Marisa ride on her broom to Scarlet Devil Mansion, but something feels weird there.
?Hmm? Is this lake always this quiet? Where is that stupid ice fairy and her friend??
The witch flying around the Misty Lake to look for the fairies, but doesn?t find them. She?s not seeing the common fairies too.
?I guess they are playing with the cockroach and that noisy bird. More importantly... book I?m coming-ze~?
Grinning, she launch her bamboo broom to the mansion in the middle of the lake. Her broom keep getting faster and faster, it aims to one of the mansion?s window that lead to the library.
?WOHOOO!! I?M THE FASTEST IN GENSOKY-?
DUAGHHHH!!!!!!!
Other than crash into the window, Marisa hit an invincible wall and fall to the ground, together with her broom. Meiling who (miraculously) still awake see the event, burst out laughing.
?What the..ze~ That really hurt. What the hell is that??
?That?s a magic wall created by Lady Patchouli for you? The green gate guard walking approach Marisa while still laughing a bit.
?Patchy? Does she get serious to prevent me stea- I mean borrowing her books?? The black-white get up and dusting her dirty clothes.
?Hmmm~ Who knows~ Just go home okay~ I want to do my job now?
As Meiling turn around, Marisa point her mini Hakkero to her.
LOVE SIGN! MASTER SPARKKKKK!!!!
Huge beam of light deep fried the poor gate guard instantly.
?That?s what you get for pissing me off-ze~ Maybe the gate isn?t affected by the magic wall...?
HOLD IT!!!
The witch freeze in her place because there is a knife grazing her left cheek and cut a bit of her blonde hair.
?Stay in your place or I?ll make sure the next knife will stab right into your head!!?
The blonde witch slowly turn around and become face to face with the Scarlet Devil Mansion?s head maid.
?Sa..Sa...Sakuya...go..good day-ze~? Marisa grinned but sweat a lot, trembling.
?Yes, good day. Now, please go home right away. I still have many chores to do? Sakuya coldly reply.
?Eeehh? But I still not yet to do my usual routine. Now, if you excuse me...?
?What a rude attitude you have there Marisa...? A vampire girl wear a pink gown, landing beside Sakuya while shading herself with a small pink parasol.
?Mistress... You don?t need to handle this...? The head maid put down her knife.
?I must handle this stubborn witch myself, you can?t fully handle her Master Spark right??
?W..Well..., you?re right mistress...? The silver haired maid wants to object her mistress, but receive a sharp glare from her.
?So... this ?Mistress Remilia? can stop my Master Spark-ze~? said Marisa mockingly while pointing her mini Hakkero to Remilia and Sakuya.
?You can try if you want~, but after you defeat me and enter my mansion... You?ll be welcomed by my sister~? Remilia smile devilishly.
?What the... You free that psychopathic girl? Zeezzzz....? The witch put down her mini Hakkero.
?If you understand, now... GET YOUR ASS OUT OF HERE! OHOHOHOHO!!!!? The vampire laughed menacingly like she just successfully killing her biggest enemy.
?Mistress... the charisma....?
?Oh! Ahem... Just go home for now okay?? Said the little vampire with a cute, childish voice.
?Right, right. I pull back for now, but tomorrow I?ll come again?
Marisa fly back to Forest of Magic.
?Tomorrow eh? You won?t be able to go here again Marisa...? Remilia said while grinning.
?Arrrghhhh!!! This really pissing me off! Everyone is acting so strange. Maybe I?ll talk about this with Nitori, she seems more entertaining?
The black-white witch once again fasting her broom, going to the Youkai Mountain.
?Nitoriiii!!! I come to play-ze~?
Marisa shouted near a waterfall in Youkai Mountain. No answer.
?Hey~ Do you hear me??? Still no answer.
?She?s busy I think. Hmm?? The witch spotted a book lie alone on the ground near her.
She picked up the book and read the cover.
?Magic Song. I never heard about something like that. Let see...?
When she opened the book, Marisa only see one sentence.
?Marisa Stole the Precious Things?
The book glowed dangerously after that.
?Oh shi-?
BOOOOOOMMMMM!!! The so-called-Magic Song book is explode.
?Zeeeee!!!!~? Marisa sent back flying to Forest of Magic.
?The hell is this! Why is everyone threat me like that!!? Said the star witch while getting up from the bushes she landed on.
?This must be an incident, I must tell Reimu right away!?
The Hakurei Shrine is very silent. No Oni sleeping on the roof, no shrine maiden drinking tea at the terrace.
?Weird... Where did they go??
DAGHHH!!! Someone hit Marisa?s back neck, making her fainted.
?That was close...?
?Is this okay to make her like this, Reimu??
The Hakurei Miko poke Marisa?s face to check if she pretend to unconscious or not, ?Don?t worry about that, Youmu. Just bring her to her house, we?re still busy preparing for tomorrow?s event. You sure she won?t wake up in a short time right??
?Yes, she?ll wake up tomorrow morning. Don?t worry? The swordsman lift Marisa unconscious body.
?I leave the rest to you then...?
Morning come again in Gensokyo.
Marisa wake up on her bed, touch her aching back neck.
?Why am I here? Someone knocked me out at the shrine.... Is some Youkai take over the shrine? Reimu must be in dangerous.... REIMUUUU!!!? The witch picked up her bamboo broom quickly and ride it at the the top speed to the Hakurei Shrine.
?Come out you evil Youkai! Release my friend right away or I?ll make you taste my Master Spark!!?
The Shrine still silent, ignoring Marisa?s threat.
?Ignoring me eh? Then I?ll....?
SURPRISEEEEEE!!!!
Reimu and another familiar Youkai appeared from the back shrine and rush immediately to the witch.
?Eh? What?? Marisa confused looking at their actions.
?Today is your birthday idiot! Don?t tell me you?re forget about it? Reimu smack the confused witch head.
?Owww~ Sorry~, but how did you know about it? I never tell anyone about my birthday..?
?Find out about that yourself. You know the person better than any of us? The shrine maiden smiled.
?Hmmm.... okaysss~ Now... thanks everyone.. I?m really happy with this...? The black-white witch blushed and cover her face with her big pointed hat.
?Now, now... don?t mention about it.... Let?s enjoy the party now okay?? Yukari appeared from a gap near Reimu.
?Yup! LET?S PARTY EVERYONE!!!?
OOOOOOO!!!!! The crowd cheer excitingly.
?What a good day isn?t it?? Hieda no Akyu sitting on her house terrace with a man.
?Yes...? Reply the man while looking at the sky.
?You really don?t have a good sense of humor to do that to Marisa?
?Maybe..., but I bet she doesn?t want to see me again..? Said the mysterious man with a sad tone.
?Who says that to you? You don?t even talk to me?
The room? s sliding door is opened and revealing a black-white witch with a big black pointed hat.
?Ma...Marisa..! Shouldn?t you at the shrine? Why did you come here?? The white haired man startled.
?Reimu told me to find out myself who tells everyone about my birthday. Kourin doesn?t do it, so you?re the only one who knows about it, dad...?
?I see..., sorry Marisa... I thought that you wouldn?t be happy if I?m the one who arrange the party, so I-?
Marisa walk to her father and hugged him. He hesitate for a moment but hug her back.
?Don?t worry about that, dad. Thank you for doing this for me...? The tomboyish witch can?t help but cry a bit in her dad chest.
Hieda just smiled, looking at the happy moment of father and daughter in front of her.
END
Okay~ This is my real Touhou fanfic I've ever write. Sorry if it's so bad =_=
Alright! I know you've been waiting, but now our judges finally have a majority in. There were several good fics given, but for a contest there must be a firm judgement. Black and white. And thus our winner is:
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Squidtentacle
Your fic was just wonderful. It was well written, drew the readers in, and the story fitted the contest perfectly. I think it would have been a strong contender in the WWC about learning lessons. Yuuto had a strong presence despite being a minor character and Orin's change of heart was touching. You've earned your new title, and I hope to see you writing more. Especially when the WWC revives.
Honorable mentions go to:
Topos, your fic was beautifully written, and had a pleasant subtlety to it. All the judges thought very highly of it, and we'd like to see more of this level of language in the library. You and Squidtentacle are going to be hard to critique in ways that aren't based off stylistic preferences.
MaxKnight, while all our judges wept at it's length, your story has a lot of promise. For someone coming in out of nowhere you have a very strong story base. Hopefully the input we give you can help you polish it.
Sect, you made all the judges laugh. This is an impressive accomplishment in and of itself. There were a few minor issues here and there, but a good punchline (or two) can lead to much forgiveness.
Thanks to all our contestants for participating, and we hope that our advice will give you all renewed confidence in your writings, as well as a good boost of skill. We're going to start compiling and sending out all the reviews now, though we may add a little more later after another judicial review.
We're expecting good things from all of you in the future.
Nice one, squid! Congrats on your new status! Is it strange if I kinda saw this outcome? I even saw the outcome in my story's review, which is also kinda weird...
Anyways, I'll be sure to use my review notes, and try to make a better story next time! Well, if I ever start a fic here...