This is the first NaNoWriMo fic I have completely read now, and I've been enjoying myself so far~ Besides the exposition dump at the start this is a great fic, and the characters are very imaginative with an interesting setting. I can actually imagine the majority as a show. The various references here and there are a nice touch, there are some extreme (and especially brutal) fight scenes in this. The scene where Mitsuko's revealed to be dead
and the confrontation between Ise and Takashi
were genuinely depressing. You can transfer emotions over to the audience very well. Keep up the good work, Ere~
I do have to note that, despite the gritty setting, the brief sex scene between Mitsuko and Takashi
kinda felt a bit out of place imo, but that's probably just me. :V