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It's been a long wait that seems almost like forever and a day. But the time has come, for Fanfic #2, Reprise of the Subterranean Sun, to be revealed to the public!
This fanfic takes place about three weeks after the end of Human-Machine in Foreign Lands (http://www.shrinemaiden.org/forum/index.php?topic=6757.0).
There's not really much else to say, so I guess you should read on! Enjoy!
Again, I would like to ask the moderators to please excuse the consecutive posting. I want to keep the chapters as separate posts!
May I critique a little?
Chapter one is really good. I like how you describe the room, and Utsuho's thoughts. The sudden change in descriptive detail from the end of chapter one, to the first rather perfunctory scene of chapter two is really awkward.