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Achariyth

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Re: Aya's Writing Workshop - Bring us your story ideas and outlines!
« Reply #450 on: August 25, 2015, 02:21:30 pm »
A question for the Japanese speakers:

Is there an equivalent of Octavian  ("The Eighth"/"Eighth Son") in Japanese.  If not, what are some male names that are based around the number "8"? 

And for the mods:

Is there a better thread than this for "story research" questions?

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Re: Aya's Writing Workshop - Bring us your story ideas and outlines!
« Reply #451 on: August 25, 2015, 02:47:56 pm »
A question for the Japanese speakers:

Is there an equivalent of Octavian  ("The Eighth"/"Eighth Son") in Japanese.  If not, what are some male names that are based around the number "8"? 

Ichiro means first son, so I imagine hachiro, yaro or some other kanji pronunciation variant of 8 would work.

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And for the mods:

Is there a better thread than this for "story research" questions?
Nah, here is fine.  It's not like it's interrupting a huge conversation or anything.

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Re: Aya's Writing Workshop - Bring us your story ideas and outlines!
« Reply #452 on: August 26, 2015, 05:53:03 pm »
Thank you.  I was leaning towards Hachiro, but my Japanese is even worse than my non-existent Latin.

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« Reply #453 on: August 27, 2015, 04:51:41 am »
A brief search reveals "Hachirouta" (八郎太) as a masculine name, though its rare enough as to probably only exist in fiction.

Alternatively, the cheater's way to produce a boy's name in Japanese is to take the word you like, and then add -tarou to the end. For example, in the Japanese folk tale of the Peach Boy, the main character's name is Momotarou (momo = peach, tarou=son, or a rough equivalent). So a much more natural sounding name would be Hachitarou (八太郎).

There are other ways you could do it (like the one Iced mentioned), but in my opinion that would be the most natural (and thus realistic) sounding name.

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« Reply #454 on: September 04, 2015, 09:38:15 am »
Does anyone know how a crossover between Touhou and Inside Out should work out? I'm thinking more among the lines of the events of Inside Out re-adapted into an incident in Gensokyo with a happiness incarnate who just wants to make her master happy as the mastermind behind the incident.

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« Reply #455 on: December 05, 2015, 05:42:08 pm »
Been deciding on if I should post here or not but I do have a few questions. I've got a game I've been working on for some time but now finally have a story synopsis done for the main parts, but I have no idea where to start. I have an idea how to start the story but I'm afraid of being too generic or not having a good enough hook to keep the readers attention. Should I work on the story as I work on my game or should I type out the story first and work on the game after?
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« Reply #456 on: December 05, 2015, 08:24:59 pm »
Been deciding on if I should post here or not but I do have a few questions. I've got a game I've been working on for some time but now finally have a story synopsis done for the main parts, but I have no idea where to start. I have an idea how to start the story but I'm afraid of being too generic or not having a good enough hook to keep the readers attention. Should I work on the story as I work on my game or should I type out the story first and work on the game after?
Generally you want to work on story and game at the same time, unless it's a VN.  This is because you need to design your mechanics to fit your story (or story to fit mechanics).  Pacing is important, and what works on paper may not work as a game.  So long as you have an outline working on both at once is the best plan.

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« Reply #457 on: December 05, 2015, 11:07:34 pm »
Sweet thank you! Any advice on how to start the story? It's a touhou rpg so not sure if explaining the world would be ok or if I should just dive in to a part of the story.
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« Reply #458 on: December 05, 2015, 11:58:14 pm »
Sweet thank you! Any advice on how to start the story? It's a touhou rpg so not sure if explaining the world would be ok or if I should just dive in to a part of the story.
For a fangame with limited distribution spending time explaining the world in depth is kinda foolish.

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« Reply #459 on: December 06, 2015, 12:06:00 am »
Ok just wanted to make sure, again thank you!
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« Reply #460 on: January 24, 2016, 08:21:23 am »
hello everyone :D !
first of all, i have to say that my English isn't very good, so sorry if i cause you trouble trying to read my nonsense :3c

i am very nervous, this is my first time in a English forum (well, actually second time, the first one being space battles, but everyone ignored me so...).
so i don't know what to do, should i make a new post in the fanfic index, or i shall present the idea here ?

anyways, i am currently writing a fanfic which has no name, this fanfic its a crossover with my personal project, (yes, i know it sounds horrible), but i am trying to make it a great fanfic.
i am writing fanon based on canon, i try to make the characters a little bit more intelligent (in the case of rumia), and more tridimentional, and a little bit more dangerous.

if someone is interested to help, i need people who know things from the cannon works, like the games, the doujinshi and the music text, it really helps a lot.

i kinda find it difficult to expose all the argument here, so ill leave a little synopsis and a pic some friend made for a chapter.

(should i put a spoiler for the pic ?, sorry, i don't know how to use the controls very well)

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The land of gensokyo has faced many incidents in the past, but nevertheless,  a unforeseen chain of events, under abnormal conditions, have brought a young soldier into this land of illusion and fantasy, but this human is different from the rest.
The young human will have to fight to survive in this hostile environment and in his journey he will meet gods, demons, monsters and entities that defy human logic, which may help him or try to kill him.
The gears of fate began to turn, bringing incidents and events that may trigger the destruction of Gensokyo itself.

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Re: Aya's Writing Workshop - Bring us your story ideas and outlines!
« Reply #461 on: February 03, 2016, 08:33:56 pm »
Validon here, poking around this board probably for the first major time ever. I haven't written anything here before yet, but I've been thinking recently on bringing over some of my Touhou OCs from a roleplaying group to practice my writing and play around with some slice of life ideas I've had. I tend to keep my characters fairly distant from most canon characters, events, situations, etc., but I might experiment with that a little too. While I'm planning on making my own thread, I wasn't really sure how to begin, so I was going to start off with this post here as sort of an introduction (and if I do end up making the thread, I'll copy over what I've written here), and briefly summarize and introduce an OC I've had a picture of in my signature for quite awhile: Utahime Chikage.

A night sparrow born before the Hakurei Barrier had been erected, Utahime is a true villain... or at least, that's what she claims to be. She takes the "night" in "night sparrow" a bit too seriously, having traded the traditional song and dance of other night sparrows for control over shadows and illusions, and uses those in tandem to lure humans to her home in the forest at the Youkai Mountain's base to slaughter or otherwise scare and spread stories of herself to others. Eventually, she wants to lead an all-out assault on the Human Village, to reintroduce fear into the lives of the complacent humans used to the neutral grounds of the village.

Her attitude is cocky and mocking, and she continuously lauds her evil and superiority over others... at least, that's what she does in public. Due to the recent introduction of the spellcard system, she's truthfully afraid that youkai are losing their purpose, and stubbornly sticks to the old ways in order to, in her mind, live on, feeling that if her name and legacy are forgotten, she would vanish from existence. She is unable to comprehend why other youkai have been able to live "peacefully" as long as they have, and cannot bring herself to let up on her "evil", lest she lose her purpose.

In short, Utahime's life is that of a youkai trying to bring the old ways back, spreading rumors and stories of herself to become a threat to the humans of Gensokyo, while at the same time getting caught up the many incidents that shake the land to its roots. Also not provoking the wrath of the Hakurei Shrine Maiden. That might also be a good idea.

Utahime's not my only OC, but I figured I'd just start out with one that I have developed out quite a bit to share with PSL here, and one I'm the least nervous in sharing (trust me I'm super nervous sharing any of my OCs outside the RPing group, eheh), and I just wanted to test the waters a bit with a mini-bio. Feel free to leave thoughts or ideas, I'm still sorta figuring out what I want to do here.
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Re: Aya's Writing Workshop - Bring us your story ideas and outlines!
« Reply #462 on: February 05, 2016, 04:38:46 pm »
The following is based on the posted challenge at fanfiction.net. Seeing that there is little response, with a sad number of existing Touhou - Harry Potter crossovers, I decided to share my wild ideas in the hope that it would inspire some writers.

Background: Suppose Yukari gets bored with the lack of incidents or events in Gensokyo. She finds the Harry Potter universe, and decides to gap in random characters at random times to see what would happen to them. Primarily Harry Potter-based with a great deal of inserted Touhou characters; they can become the main protagonists or simply as secondary characters to Harry and gang.

The Gaped Touhou characters may or may not know each other. Those that appeared in the same games or involved in the same plotlines are expected to know each other.

And ho:
  • Year 1: (Parsee Mizuhashi) - Some of her aspects are reincarnated into Harry - green eyes, random bouts of jealousy (but at limited levels, on par with Ron in Year 4), etc.
  • Year 1: (Kosuzu) - Hermione.
  • Year 2: (Wriggle Nightbug) - A firefly saved from Aragog / other acromantulas' webs. Becomes Harry's minion and aids Harry with various spying projects after Year 2. May or may not be involved after Year 6, given the complexity of plots and usually short lifespan of fireflies.
  • Year 2: (Yamame Kurodani) - Consort of Aragog, with minor involvement. Alternatively, may appear as one of the spiders (*animagi) during Moody's first DADA lesson, with a secret crush on Ron.
  • Year 3: (Eirin Yagokoro / Reisen II) - Potions expert, ranger & recluse living at the edges of Hogwarts. Previously fought with Nicholas Flamel over the patent to the philosopher's stone. First met Harry in Year 3 while Harry flees werewolf Remus. Appears in Year 5 to help chase away the centaurs (in place of Grawp), and in Year 7 to offer Harry to remake one last philosopher's stone to resurrect a person of Harry's choice before her death, but is declined by Harry. May attempt to resurrect Yoshika / Regulus Black (see below).
  • Year 3: (Rin Kaenbyou) - Crookshanks, with a terrifying affinity for dementors. [Note that Yukari wouldn't gap away her Chen into foreign and dangerous places.]
  • Year 3: (Sakuya Izayoi) - Innovator, developer of the time-turner and (later) dementor eliminator, using the principle of dementors being a rift or black-hole in space/time, which she is able to destroy. Eventually lives in recluse. May end up serving Remilia again if she found Remilia gaped into HPverse as Narcissa Malfoy or Mistress Greengrass.
  • Year 3+: (Mamizou Futatsuiwa) - A trickster and metamorphmagus who morphs into various forms just to serve chaos, and Peeves' ally and/or idol. First mentioned by Peeves. Initially acts against Harry by impersonating various Order characters or Death Eaters, and partly causes Sirius's death in the Ministry in Year 5 (or, if the writer wishes, someone else close to Harry). Eventually pacified through some means and helps Harry in the war. Takes Snape's place during the final meeting with Voldemort in the Shrieking Shack, and dies in his place. Mourned by Harry and Snape.
  • Year 4: (Prismriver Sisters) - The Weird Sisters. May include Mystia Lorelei and/or Raiko Horikawa with ulterior motives.
  • Year 5: (Rumia) - Darkness spirit residing in the Department of Mysteries. Accidentally released by Harry and friends, and follows Harry back to Hogwarts to torment him. Eventually sealed and semi-disintegrated by George Weasley, who uses her essence to create the Peruvian Instant Darkness Powder.
  • Year 6: (Yoshika Miyako) - Manifests as the inferi of Regulus Black, with relevant powers. At the writer's wish, may be properly reincarnated/restored by Eirin after the war to carry on the Black name and/or take over the Black estate from Harry.
  • Year 7 or earlier: (Satori / Koishi Komeiji) - A non-Voldemort aligned chaotic / dark witch, who was imprisoned by Moody during the First War, and her Third Eye taken away from her to be remade into Moody's fake eye. Escaped along with Bellatrix in Year 5. Causes a great commotion in the Ministry of Magic in Year 7 at the same time when Harry & friends break into it. Eventually gives thanks to Harry for returning her Eye, and joins forces with Hogwarts. Marries Snape after the war (if Mamizou died in Snape's place).

Others (including those mentioned in passing):

  • Tewi Inaba - The short-lived wife of Felix Felicitum, who later brewed the Felix Felicis in her memory
  • Hina Kagiyama - Curse mistress, popularly known as Wendelin the Weird, possible twin sister / enemy of Tewi.
  • Kagerou Imaizumi - Neutral-aligned werewolf, leads the werewolf tribes after Fenrir Greyback's incarceration / death.
  • Sunny / Luna / Star - Sprout / Neville's minions that aid the control of greenhouse weather in Herbology.
  • Nitori Kawashiro - Engineer and student of Salazar Slytherin, helped to maintain the structure and wards of the Slytherin dungeon and the Chamber of Secrets. Lived (or lives) in the Black Lake.
  • Sekibanki - Close associate of Nearly Headless Nick.
  • Hatate Himekaidou - Successor of Rita Skeeter as Daily Prophet head writer, with even more cunning skills in slandering and gossip collection.
  • Rinnosuke Morichika - Auror guard stationed at Hogsmeade, responsible for reporting cursed or malicious objects. All hell breaks loose when he is tasked to patrol Diagon / Knockturn Alley.
  • Yuyuko Saigyouji - A hungry ghost with quasi-dementor abilities. Eventually sealed by Sakuya / a curse-breaker / a powerful wizard, witch or magician / a coalition force.

Well. Just for variety. Contribute your ideas or comments if you want.  :(
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Re: Aya's Writing Workshop - Bring us your story ideas and outlines!
« Reply #463 on: March 27, 2016, 05:22:53 pm »
I'm writing a Touhou and Mega Man crossover fic named "Forest of Tohno".

The story starts with Mega Man and the others finding the torii gate of the Hakurei Shrine in the outside world. Apparently, the outside world Hakurei Shrine is in the universe where Mega Man takes place in. Mega Man decides to greet the Gensokyo inhabitants. Then there’s a story arc where Orange decides to build a robot master, ON-001 "Youkai Woman". Then, late one night, Orange gets cornered by Bass, who demands to know where Mega Man is. Orange is at first scared and doesn’t know who it is, and then when Bass reveals himself, Orange is lovestruck. Later on, there might be some Tenshi x Bass stuff, as well as Mega Man helping Reimu solve an incident, Roll working at Ellen's magic shop, Otaka (my Mega Man OC) learning Esperanto, along with other plotlines.

Help me flesh out this story.
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« Reply #464 on: May 18, 2016, 03:24:29 am »
So longshot here but I need some assistance with my own work.  I need someone fluent in Brazilian Portuguese to offer a good nickname for an easygoing girl.  Obviously google translate will not suffice.

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« Reply #465 on: May 18, 2016, 09:51:26 am »
So longshot here but I need some assistance with my own work.  I need someone fluent in Brazilian Portuguese to offer a good nickname for an easygoing girl.  Obviously google translate will not suffice.

I know just who to ask. Will PM you soon.

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« Reply #466 on: May 18, 2016, 04:59:28 pm »
I know just who to ask. Will PM you soon.
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« Reply #467 on: May 18, 2016, 06:04:04 pm »
Yeah that would be me

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Thanks a lot.  I got myself in trouble by doing plot first, research second.  :derp:

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Re: Aya's Writing Workshop - Bring us your story ideas and outlines!
« Reply #468 on: May 27, 2016, 07:34:50 am »
OOhh my gosh I'm sorry if I'm posting this wrong I'm p new here!! But It's actually pretty good this exists because I have a major fic I've been planning, regarding my headcanons around Meira (being a sister to Reimu and originally supposed to be the Hakurei Miko, taken by Mima by some means for her power), but I have four different ideas on how to start this/ All are good and bad in their own rights, and while I know some are worst than others I don't know which I should be going for. It'll probably be good to get opinions outside my own as to what people would be interested in.

1. Mima kidnaps Meira but Meira is an amnesiac through some means (magic? getting whacked out cold with that weird moon staff thing? Who knows atm). She wakes up in Reimaden, unaware of her past or situation.

Pros: there's the added plot in that she has to retrieve those memories, probably with Marisa's help
Cons: It gets rid of my original idea and themes, which were around youth mistakes and regret. I also feel like it's a very cheap thing to go about, or that amnesia is far too overused to be interesting.


2. Sendai died or was never there for either her or Reimu, Meira is kidnapped in her sleep or when tending to the shrine and Reimu is left behind.
Pros: Keeps the original themes I had in mind, like regret, escape (although it was "escape reality" than anything), and family. Makes being with Mima all the worst
Cons: doesn't really match the ages I've given them, and removes the plot in that it's later revealed by Mima that Sendai died (spoiler: lies lies lies) and thus removes the climax of the story I had planned out.

3. The original I was going with. Meira goes out to walk, contemplating over how she doesn’t want to be the Hakurei Miko but a samurai when she gets lost and meets Mima late at night. This is also how the amnesia start begins, and Meira is either manipulated in going with them or willingly leaves.
Pros: explains why she's a samurai in the future (sword is a family heirloom, originally owned by Konngara), keeps most of my original ideas intact and maybe feels a little more genuine, as well as pointing out just how evil Mima actually is
Cons: Meira, being about 7, probably knows not to trust random ghosts in the woods at night, which would lead to being taken by force (Actually now that I think about this that's not that bad-), her wanting to leave maybe implies bad homelife more than her disregard for 'fate', which is false

4. I start in the middle and leave the beginning ambiguous, implying the reason Meira has for being here was against her will and could mean either of these 3 beginnings while the story continues on and the beginning is only hinted at.
Pros: I won't have to worry about all this, could lead to any of the three above and gives me time to think this over but also get the story started already. Maybe leaves readers questioning?
Cons: this is super super cheap, like an absolute cop-out for the sake of ease.

Again sorry if this isn't meant to be posted here! But honestly I appreciate any input that'll help me towards not slowly losing my sanity trying to make this decision.

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« Reply #469 on: May 27, 2016, 04:30:22 pm »
It's fine to post here, but it's really hard to offer advice on "what other people should write."  Writing is a very personal thing.

I will say that option 4 isn't the copout you view it as.  Avoiding the messy details is a time honored tradition.  People get awards for being vague.  You will probably want to decide how it goes down later, but first is the story you want to tell.

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« Reply #470 on: May 31, 2016, 09:42:11 am »
Cons: Meira, being about 7, probably knows not to trust random ghosts in the woods at night, which would lead to being taken by force (Actually now that I think about this that's not that bad-), her wanting to leave maybe implies bad homelife more than her disregard for 'fate', which is false

Why can't it be both? Maybe her mother was overly baring, and pushed the pressure of being the next hakurei maiden down her throat so hard that Meira got too stressed out about it, and decided to rebel against her mother.

That said, i think you should go with 4. Would be more interesting.
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« Reply #471 on: January 05, 2017, 01:34:50 am »
First time posting here since I'm kinda new to being an active forum member.
Does anyone ever have issues coming up with last names for characters? I've given full names to pretty much every single character and now I'm down to the last two that I'm wanting to draft out. They're brothers, the elder is named Klein while the younger is named Gaffgarion. Every time I come up with with a name for one, it just doesn't feel right for the other one if that makes any sense. I've had a friend tell me to just change one of their first names to one I feel works or change their background so they're not brothers so they can have different last names, however I've held onto these two characters since I was in grade schools so there's a sort of sentimental value to how they are now and I just can't bring myself to change them.
As a followup I guess, does anyone else have any original characters that they've held onto for a prolonged period of time?
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Re: Aya's Writing Workshop - Bring us your story ideas and outlines!
« Reply #472 on: January 05, 2017, 02:31:31 am »
I believe Gaffgarion's surname was Goffard? Or Gaff, if you got with the old translation.

And oh yeah, I have some that are older than the war on terror.

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« Reply #473 on: May 17, 2017, 02:58:38 pm »
So after finally getting more feedback on Double Exposure I'm having to do a major rewrite, if addendum to the title of that thread didn't make it clear.

I'm trying to salvage what I can from the first half and kind of begun working on a kinda retroactive outline of the rebuild as I've already got entire scenes to remove early on but I'm not sure how to fit what's left into there or if I'm cutting too deeply.

Still here is the newly built outline.

- Hatate overflight of SDM
- Checks camera for early deciding subject to write about afterwards
- Realization about photobombing Koishi
- Bank and change course
- Acceleration
- Diving to Geyser Center
- Most of rest of story / Koishi encounter, chase, etc

I'm pretty much as a given removing anything related to things happening in the fortress outside ideas related to Hatate's starting to preplan her story (noting about the festival, looking through the pictures, etc). The bigger problem is the salvaging without those recovered bits looking like they just don't fit.
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Re: Aya's Writing Workshop - Bring us your story ideas and outlines!
« Reply #474 on: May 25, 2017, 11:46:25 pm »
Hey guys, just made an account for this. I saw a lot of really angsty stories on fanfiction.net and wanted to write a more fun one. Basically the plot is that in Phantasmagoria of Dim. Dream, Rikako Asakura beat Yumemi Okazaki and got her fifth grade science textbook. She promptly decides to study it and attempt to educate the whole of Gensokyo. Throughout her somewhat lonely endeavour(she's a heretic!) she opens up to new friends and gets into some arguments with some folks over her science-ing or lack thereof. As a note, the timeframe of this fic is set in PC-98 right after Phantasmagoria of Dim. Dream, but the other areas exist and so do their characters. I'm going to make sure there's nobody meeting someone before they should, but since Rikako and Rika aren't heard from again, it's assumed that they can interact with newer characters within reason.

Intro: (eh who needs spoilers it's legit the intro)
Rikako reads the very first passage in her science textbook which talks about what science is and why it matters. She's pretty inspired but soon realizes that maybe in Okazaki's world this might be a noble and lauded endeavour, but in Gensokyo she's going to be quite lonely. She decides that this was the dream she had and realizes just how unlikely beating Okazaki was in the first place, and so doubles down on her goal. In these first chapters she learns about the scientific method and is mind boggled by what a microscope is, and just how she's supposed to get one. Rika begins poking around her house.

First Arc: Biology, Classification, Plants, Animals, and Ecology
The first unit of the book, biology, might look easy, but the overwhelming amount of terms Rikako has to sort through is ridiculous. Even though it's a fifth grade book, many of the things being said are completely out of this world, and so Rikako very carefully goes through every experiment. There are a couple of issues with this, the aforementioned microscope issue, the issue about how she's supposed to get her cells on a 'slide', and the numerous issues with naming wondrous creatures in Gensokyo. To top it all off, after learning the material Rikako remembers her duty as a scientist and has to try to prove her book correctly by creating a public show of science. The local population of a spiritual wonderland is about as excited as you'd expect, and Rikako is devastated. However, she begins meeting some new friends, such as Rika and unexpectedly, Keine, who values learning for the sake of the children in the village as opposed to shutting out the two girls. Together they convince the town(and the powers that be) to let them demonstrate their scientific reports and experiments. The question is, will they get it right?

Second Arc: Geology and Cycles
Oh wow. A rock pit. Turns out there's only one good rockpit that Rikako and Rika don't need heavy duty stuff for is the playground of the Human Village's schoolhouse. After being teased a bit by the kids, the group help out the scientists learn about the rock cycle and geology, along with a field trip to Youkai Mountain to observe how rocks change over time. They then go to the Misty Lake to observe the water cycle with the help of Cirno(some shenanigans ensue) and finally go to the Hakurei Shrine to look at the Moon and stars as they're terrified to climb to the top of Youkai Mountain. Weird things begin to move afoot as their books are seemingly supplemented with more detailed papers and explanations. Who wrote those?

Final Arc: Matter, Energy, and Motion
Rikako and Rika have figured out most of the scientific grimoire thanks to both their new friends and some trust teamwork, not to mention those weird papers, however this part of the book is the last, and subsequently the hardest. The two scientists struggle to understand the fundamental reasoning behind any of the things they're learning, and are about to give up when they realize that even if they can observe or theoretically say a certain piece of their simplified physics, they'd never be able to prove it. Everyone's at a loss to what they need to do to prove it, until someone shows up. Is this who's been putting in the letters? How does she know so much science, and why hasn't she taken the glory? Enter Yumemi Okazaki and Chiyuri Kitashirakawa. With her guidance Rikako and Rika can't prove the physics on their own, but what they can do is keep studying. They realize that if they figure out the laws of physics they'll be known as the greatest scientists in Gensokyo, and Chiyuri offers to teach them, but they learn that they'll have to leave their home in the Human Village, and live with Yumemi and Chiyuri in the Forest of Magic. They both realize that the friends they've made and the contributions they've done for the community's well being are better than a title, and so they ask Chiyuri to still send them books, and when they're ready perhaps they'll take her up on the offer. Yumemi and Chiyuri accept this deal as they hand the girls their newest book, a sixth grade science textbook.
Along with around six math textbooks and a litany of workbooks and lab notebooks. Oh joy.


Again this is meant to be more of a heartwarming fanfic with themes of friendship and never giving up as opposed to something edgy, plus it's my first fic so I'd love to hear your feedback on it. Thanks a lot guys!
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Re: Aya's Writing Workshop - Bring us your story ideas and outlines!
« Reply #475 on: July 15, 2017, 10:33:01 pm »
I had an idea for a fanfic it goes along something like this:

Chris Curry and Sir Clive Sinclair end up in Gensokyo one day. Knowing that their home's computer market was crowded they decide to kickstart Gensokyo's microcomputer industry. The competition is fierce, even the shrines have taken arms (the Hakurei Shrine supporting Sinclair Research, and the Moriya Shrine supporting Acorn Computers). The two fight by invoking minor incidents with the youkai, aggressive marketing, and lots of trash talk. But how will Gensokyo's micromen be able to cope when Yukari Yakumo releases a microcomputer of her own. Will Chris Curry and Sir Clive Sinclair survive? Or die as Gensokyo enters a war among shrines, fueled by the desire of controlling Gensokyo's micro industry.

Just another one of my crazy ideas, (besides my Thomas/Touhou crossovers).

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Re: Aya's Writing Workshop - Bring us your story ideas and outlines!
« Reply #476 on: July 16, 2017, 11:18:05 am »
That is just crazy enough to work in the right hands.

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« Reply #477 on: July 16, 2017, 06:51:14 pm »
That is just crazy enough to work in the right hands.

I even had ideas for youkai like Cirno, Kaguya, and Flandre, becoming bedroom coders. Mostly Touhou parodies of old games, having names like EIENTEI or Jet Set Sakuya, maybe even Seija On The Run.

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« Reply #478 on: December 17, 2017, 01:27:28 am »
Hello, my name is Jouhei(Devil Summoner reference). I'm a newbie at writing and had this crossover idea in my head roughly around the time Hurricane Irma ravaged Florida. It crosses Touhou with Shin Megami Tensei (Persona's mother series). It would star Demifiend (Nocturne's hero) and he would travel to Gensokyo in a scouting/Search and Destroy mission from Lucifer himself. His objectives being, to recruit powerful individuals to aid in destroying Yaldabaoh(not Jehovah he's a somewhat nice guy) in all universes, the quickest way to do this being to lure Him into Gensokyo and destroying the place causing him to disappear like a Youkai would. I post this with the question: Should I try to do this? Or should I try individual fics first?
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Re: Aya's Writing Workshop - Bring us your story ideas and outlines!
« Reply #479 on: March 28, 2018, 07:11:29 am »
It's been a long time MotK, but after a haitus involving getting my self-esteemed crushed and having my friends pull me out of it, I'm back and looking to make a comic! I've already passed the story by my normal channels, but I wanna get your reactions now.

I want to work on a comic adaptation of Double Dealing Character and Impossible Spell Card, as well as make something that'll be the ultimate antithesis to my self-insert fic deconstruction story Diamond In The Rough.

I call it...
Wrath of the Amanojaku

I've already written six of the ten chapters, and it's all outlined. My goal is to make a story that starts out in typical darkfic politically-torn amoral Gensokyo, but end on classic vanilla girls-shooting-eachother-with-lasers heroic Gensokyo. Despite it ascending in tone as it goes on (i.e. going from dark to light), it's actually inspired by the depression and hopelessness I've gone through these last couple of years, dealing with the loss of several friends and non-stop online harassment, and my struggle to get out of it and have hope again. It's also my answer to my previous work, Diamond In The Rough, which exposed the amoral core of typical darkfic Gensokyo in hopes of jarring fanfic writers into rethinking how they write (and ironically, it was written from a happy, playful place): if DitR is Gensokyo gone wrong, WotA will be Gensokyo gone right. As such, there will be several, several jabs at DitR throughout the story: especially nearing the end.

Here's the synopsis of the current draft:

Chapter 1:
Short Version: As the events of Hopeless Masquerade end, Seija makes her move to manipulate Shinmyoumaru so she can use the Miracle Mallet for her.

Full Synopsis:
The story begins at the end of Hopeless Masquerade, where Reimu, Miko, and Byakuren team up to fight Kokoro, who accuses the religious leaders of manipulating the masses. In the crowd, Cirno and co. watch, and they ask her why she's not involved, but Cirno says she doesn't understand what's going on, nor does she think she'd last in a fight with any of the competitors of the war.

The incident wraps up with Reimu giving Kokoro a new purpose as a performer. Byakuren and Miko argue what solved the incident, but Reimu tells them to not take everything so seriously, going on to say there will never be a youkai dangerous enough to put Gensokyo in danger. To help Kokoro perform, we meet a very meek and unfamiliar Raiko, currently a simple taiko drum tsukumogami, who barely commands any respect from the folks present at the Shrine.

Meanwhile, Seija shows up at Shining Needle Castle and meets Shinmyoumaru, who apparently doesn't know much about the history of the Inchlings. Seija reveals she has the Miracle Mallet and is willing to give it to her for free. Shinmyoumaru wishes to learn the history of the Inchlings, but Seija tells her to stop, and says she could tell her herself. Meanwhile, Aya spots this and, knowing the history of the amanojaku, runs back to the Tengu Village to report what she found.


Chapter 2:
Short Version: Aya knows what Seija is up to and tries to rally support to try and stop her, but nobody seems to care. Akyuu worries Gensokyo is on the verge of imploding, and all Aya can do is hope somebody saves Gensokyo in time.

Full Synopsis:
Aya returns and demands an alert be sent out: whoever captures the amanojaku will be given a reward. However, Hatate tells Lord Tenma that Aya is simply being paranoid, and convinces Lord Tenma that Aya is jumping at shadows due to an apparent obsession with the long-forgotten Vampire Incident. Tenma tells Aya to stand down, but Aya sneaks out to find help.

Without funding, she cannot hire Marisa, and Reimu is too suspicious of Aya after an incident involving her and the Three Fairies of Light pranking her. She goes to the Myouren Temple, and Byakuren reveals Seija did try to join, but was banished for trying to get the youkai to attack the humans. Byakuren reveals her strategy is to simply do nothing and wait for the situation to resolve itself, but Aya doesn't believe the amanojaku have evolved like the other youkai races. Byakuren tells Aya that only she is badmouthing Seija, and that Aya's rumor-mongering is far worse, and asks her to leave.

Finally, Aya sees Akyuu, who actually does remember the history of the amanojaku and is willing to give her a history of them to prove they are a threat. However, when they find the recordings on the amanojaku, all of the pages have been ripped out, meaning Seija must've already sabotaged her. Akyuu despairs that if an amanojaku gets ahold of the Miracle Mallet's power, it'll mean the end of Gensokyo, but by this point, Akyuu reveals she has become jaded and doesn't even believe Gensokyo should even be saved, citing the growing political rift between all of the factions.

Aya gives up and returns home. Momiji scolds her for sneaking out, but then tells Aya to please have faith in Gensokyo. Aya sighs and tells Momiji she'll try.


Chapter 3:
Short Version: Seija carefully manipulates Reimu to crash the Religious Symposium so she can raid the Hieda Family Archives, giving Shinmyoumaru all the "proof" she needs that Gensokyo must be destroyed and taken over by the weak. Two weeks later, everyone's tools begin acting up, and Reimu, Marisa, and Sakuya embark on their journies...

Full Synopsis:
Weeks earlier, it turns out Seija had already visited Reimu, disguised as a human, and warns her that the religious leaders are holding some sort of meeting to take over Gensokyo. This "meeting" is actually the Religious Symposium, where Byakuren and Miko argue over leadership in the human village, while Kanako says the youkai rule Gensokyo. Miko says that if that's the case, the humans are no more than animals in cages, and that with the current situation, Gensokyo is going to implode at any moment. At the end of the Symposium, Reimu busts in to break it up. Keine rushes in to stop Reimu, but not before Seija sneaks behind her back into Akyuu's archives and steals what she needs.

Cut back to the present: Seija twists Gensokyo's history to paint the land as a cruel, hideous place full of cruel, selfish, monstrous people, where might makes right and the strong dominate the weak. Seija tells her the power of the Mallet can reverse this, and Shinmyoumaru agrees to help her with a rebellion.

Two weeks later, Reimu wakes to find her gohei moving on its own, Suika being wrestled by her own sake gourd, Marisa accidentally blows up Alice's house to save her from revolting dolls, and Sakuya and Meiling are forced to defend the Scarlet Devil Mansion from a fairy revolution. Remilia calls Sakuya aside and tells her to go after the rampaging youkai, giving her an ancient youkai-hunting dagger which apparently changes her behavior into being more bloodlusty.

As Sakuya flies off, Remilia reveals the dagger was simply a form of "bait," and Yukari shows up to congratulate her on her "plan" working. Yukari and Remilia apparently know exactly what's going on, and that Gensokyo is about to remember its history the hard way... (But since this is supposed to be the "Anti-DitR", it's not as sinister as it lets on...)


Chapter 4:
Short Version: Reimu, Marisa, and Sakuya meet up in a skirmish over Misty Lake. Although they defeat Wakasagihime, they then knock each other out in a duel. With them indisposed, the tsukumogami are free to launch a wide-scale assault on Gensokyo.

Full Synopsis:
The fairies, using their newfound powers, decide they're going to take over Gensokyo, but not before Cirno shows up with her own newfound powers and decides to become the strongest herself. Marisa, on a supply run to the Scarlet Devil Mansion, challenges her to a fight, only to be interupted by Reimu, who's investigating the incident. Marisa and Reimu argue, only to be interupted by Cirno and the fairies putting aside their differences to take them down. Reimu and Marisa use their cursed weapons to win, but Wakasagihime shows up to overpower them both. They only survive thanks to Sakuya showing up in the nick of time, but all three argue over who's kill it was.

Sakuya accuses Reimu and Marisa of using the incident as a power grab, while Marisa and Reimu argue over who should resolve the incident. They decide to have a duel to see who will go ahead, but it's a three-way knockout. Yatsuhashi observes the situation and reveals that they were waiting for all three incident resolvers to meet thanks to the fairy uprising and, of course, knock themselves out. Yatsuhashi and Benben signal the beginning of a widescale, Gensokyo-wide tsukumogami rebellion. When Reimu, Marisa, and Sakuya recover, they find out Gensokyo is now amidst quite possibly the biggest incident to date.


Chapter 5:
Short Version: The human village is under attack by Sekibanki and the tsukumogami, and Reimu, Marisa, and Sakuya learn to work together to take her down. They learn of the Grassroots Youkai Network, and set their sights on finding Kagerou, who may know what's going on.

Full Synopsis:
The Human Village is under attack by the tsukumogami, and the chapter opens with the Myouren Temple, the Taoists, and Keine all battling to protect the villagers as they rush to the shelter. Sekibanki terrorizes everyone, attempting to become the scariest youkai in the village, but Reimu, Marisa, and Sakuya rush in to save the day. Marisa attempts to Master Spark her, only to forgot she put it on a timer when she was experimenting with it earlier, which allows Sekibanki to escape. All three of them get overwhelmed as the tsukumogami plunge in to attack, but they're all saved by the combined forces of the Myouren Temple and the Hermits. The three chase Sekibanki through the village canals, using their cursed tools to battle their way through, eventually coordinating a final attack that shoots Sekibanki out of the sky.

When brought back for questioning, Sekibanki reveals nothing, but Kogasa, a tsukumogami who did NOT join the rebellion, reveals Sekibanki is just a harmless wannabe, and Sekibanki shamefully admits she wishes she was really the scariest youkai in the village. Kogasa then tells the heroines of the Grassroots Youkai, and says Kagerou might be the only one left to know what's going on. However, she's in the Bamboo Forest on a full moon, Eintei has gone dark, and the heroines will have to get there alone while the Hermits and Myouren Temple protect the village. Reimu, Marisa, and Sakuya accept the task, and Keine says that once full moon goes down, she will regain her ability to eat history and hide the village, and everyone will be able to provide backup. However, in the background, Yukari tells Cirno to follow the incident resolvers, and that once Cirno meets the person behind the incident, she will help make her the strongest fairy in Gensokyo.

In the shelter, Kosuzu has a panic attack regarding the attack, but Akyuu assures her they'll be fine and the shelter is protected by a youkai-proof barrier, and once it's all over, the humans will ring a youkai-proof All-Clear Bell to let them know everything's okay. However, as Kosuzu drifts asleep, Akyuu worries that it really is the end of Gensokyo...


Chapter 6:
Short Version: Realizing their weapons are cursed, Reimu and co. are forced to fight Kagerou without their primary weapons. Kagerou goes into shock when she finds out the other Grassroots Youkai were involved, and helps the heroines find the source of the tsukumogami's power, but not before being taken out by the tsukumogami who label her a traitor.

Full Synopsis:
Eintei has been destroyed by Kagerou and the tsukumogami, but everyone inside has safely hidden themselves in the Lunar Passage. Unfortunately, Reisen and Mokou were stuck outside helping everyone get in, forcing them to fight alone. Reimu, Marisa, and Sakuya show up just in time to help fight Kagerou, who reveals the youkai are happy they have power and can now act independently. The three duel Kagerou, but Marisa's trigger-happy nature, which has already been going overboard all night, goes over the top as she nearly burns down the forest. Meanwhile, Sakuya tries to stop her, but then goes into an unstoppable bloodlust. Reimu knocks them both out as Kagerou escapes, and finds out that whatever is making the tsukumogami stronger is also affecting their weapons, which are in-turn affecting them.

Reimu tells everyone to sheath their weapons and switch to their secondary weapons. Marisa struggles to fight as they chase down Kagerou, and she struggles to fight Kagerou, but it turns out Sakuya was using Marisa as bait so Reimu could trap her.

With Kagerou defeated, she reveals she's acting alone, but when Sakuya tells her that Wakasagihime and Sekibanki attacked, she goes into shock and says the tsukumogami used her. She tries to tell the heroines there's something up in the clouds, but is branded a traitor by the tsukumogami and is shot before she could say anything else.

Reisen reveals that Youkai Mountain has also gone dark, meaning this attack has affected virtually all of Gensokyo, but Reimu remembers that the Celestials might have good enough defenses to survive and a good enough overlook of Gensokyo to know what's going on. Since Tenshi owes the heroines a favor, everyone heads to Heaven. Meanwhile, it's revealed Raiko has been following the heroines, now with a digital drum set and flashy new threads, and says that Reimu will have to accept that she is not just the savior of Gensokyo's humans, but the tsukumogami as well...


Chapter 7:
Short Version: Reimu and co. dive into the magical stormclouds hiding the source of the tsukumogami's power, just as the remaining forces of Gensokyo become overwhelmed, leaving them to fight alone. Reimu meets Raiko, who fills them in on the truth behind the incident, and wishes to help to save the tsukumogami.

Full Synopsis:
Tenshi says she knows what's going on and lays out a battle map of Gensokyo: virtually everything has been overtaken by the tsukumogami, the Scarlet Devil Mansion has been destroyed, Hakyugokuro has been destroyed, the Moriya Shrine, the Tengu Village, virtually everything but the Human Village and Genbu Ravine has been destroyed. The Moriya Shrine and the Tengu have all been pushed down to Genbu Ravine with the Kappa, where they're preparing for a final stand. It turns out that the tsukumogami are hiding and protecting something in a giant storm cloud, but nobody knows what it is. Reimu says the Hermits and Myouren Temple are waiting until sunrise to look for the culprit, but Tenshi believes that they won't stand a chance unless they figure out how to take out the source of the tsukumogami's power by sunrise. Yuyuko, pushed back to Heaven with Youmu, gives her plan: a small team will infilitrate the storm while everyone else rescues the Genbu Ravine, and once the power source has been taken out, the survivors of Genbu Ravine will come to the rescue. Reimu and Marisa naturally volunteer, but Sakuya argues with Youmu whether or not she should go, with Youmu having doubts Sakuya cares about anything other than the Scarlet Devil Mansion. Sakuya says she does, but also adds the Scarlet Devil Mansion is all she has. Tenshi calls Sakuya out, but Sakuya does the same to Tenshi, who is only joining the incident for the fun of it.

As they split off, Tenshi asks Sakuya if she really thinks she's as alone as she says she is. Before descending into the storm, Sakuya flashes back to the end of Scarlet Weather Rhapsody, and upon remembering how close she was with everyone else, she enters the fight with new gusto.

However, this is all a trap: Seija was planning for everyone to go to Genbu Ravine, and then sends everything she has to trap them and cut off Reimu and co.'s rescue. Worse, once the Myouren Temple and Hermits get word of this, Yukari, Ran, Chen, and their fairies show up to keep everyone from leaving. Yukari says she's fighting for the tsukumogami and the Grassroots youkai and lets Sekibanki go, shocking everyone, and everyone rushes to fight Yukari.

Back up in the clouds, Yatsuhashi and Benben fire everything they got at Reimu with the intent to kill her, cutting of Marisa and Sakuya before they have a chance to catch her. Marisa and Sakuya are forced to fight alone, and as the battle wears on, Marisa is shot off her broom, forcing Sakuya to race past Yatsuhashi's and Benben's shots to save her, and then carry her on her back while fighting them both. Down below, Raiko rescues Reimu mid-fall and tries to explain the situation, but Reimu fights Raiko, thinking she is the cause of the incident; especially with Raiko's talking of really building a world where tsukumogami can live in peace. However, Reimu stops fighting Raiko when she reveals her powers did not come from the thing the tsukumogami are protecting, and that both their races depend on them. Raiko and Reimu rush up to stop everyone from fighting, and Raiko explains the situation: the tsukumogami have been manipulated by the infamous amanojaku Seija Kijin. Marisa goes into shock, because they have met before...


Chapter 8:
Short Version: It turns out Seija has been planning this incident for ages, laying the foundation in many past incidents, all so she can attain the Miracle Mallet's power. Unfortunately, the heroines fall right into her plans: Seija uses Reimu and co.'s attack as the reason Shinmyoumaru must share the Mallet's power with her. Shinmyoumaru gives Seija a Replica Mallet and endows it with power, and Seija reveals her plan to take over the Human Village, which would effectively kill off all youkai and make her a god.

Full Synopsis:
Cut back to Mountain of Faith. It turns out that Seija gave Marisa Illusion Laser B, but only so that the tengu could publish an article of Marisa that she was deliberately breaking Spell Card Rules. Marisa reveals what happened, but Seija goes into hiding. Sakuya says Seija came by the mansion to pick up a history on the Vampire Incident, and everything about Seija's actions, like badmouthing Remilia to Sakuya before badmouthing Sakuya to Remilia, unsettled her.

Benben and Yatsuhashi don't want to betray Seija in fear of losing their powers, but Raiko convinces them it will be fine. Marisa and Sakuya use what little experience they have to play Benben and Yatsuhashi's instruments while Raiko explains the nature of the tsukumogami and why it's affecting their weapons: the power of the users make tsukumogami strong, and Raiko bets once Seija betrays them and tries to take their powers, this will be proof that everything she's told the tsukumogami was a lie. Reimu feels hesitant helping the tsukumogami, but Raiko assures her that the Hakurei Shrine Maiden's job is to protect everyone, and that she will have to learn this lesson sooner or later.

Meanwhile, at the Myouren Temple, Yukari reveals she's keeping everyone in because once they all launch an assault on Shining Needle Castle, Seija will have the "proof" she needs to convince Shinmyoumaru to share the power of the Mallet with her, and that the heroines are going to defeat her by themselves. Miko suspects Yukari of a power grab, saying that starting a war like this could give youkai indefinite power, but Yukari says that'd be overkill and a stupid idea since the humans of the village already think that's a reality (despite being mostly a fiction), and Yukari reveals she's actually super-protective of Gensokyo, but does it in a wierd way. She says Genbu Ravine will be fine, and all that's left for them to do is wait until sunrise.

However, Byakuren reveals Miko told her about Yukari talking to Cirno, and she sent Koishi, who could easily slip past Yukari, to warn the heroines. This sends Yukari into a shock nobody's ever seen before, and she quickly calls for a Plan B: Cirno was supposed to set off another one of Seija's traps, but without her, the very presence of the heroines will alert Shinmyoumaru to their presence. Yukari orders everyone to attack at once.

Back at Shining Needle Castle, Koishi shows up to tells Reimu she's being followed, and they catch Cirno and send her back home, telling her it's too dangerous and she's too weak to be of any use. Dejected, Cirno leaves as the heroines rush in: Reimu, Marisa, and Sakuya decide to take out Seija while Raiko tries to take back the mallet before Shinmyoumaru can use it again. However, Raiko falls into the trap as planned, and it's left uncertain what happens to her as the bullets fly.

The heroines find Seija and chase her through the castle, only to end up in the same room as Shinmyoumaru. Seija has thoroughly convinced Shinmyoumaru that Gensokyo is at fault for its destruction, it destroyed itself in trying to take control from the tsukumogami, and that Reimu is planning to send "her" army of youkai to destroy them for disagreeing with them. Seija offers them a shot at redemption by joining her forces and fighting back the youkai who "destroyed" Gensokyo. Obviously, the heroines don't listen to Seija and try to reason with Shinmyoumaru. Shinmyoumaru has none of it, gives Seija a replica of the Miracle Mallet, and makes a wish to endow it with her power, cementing her plans.

Seija then tells Shinmyoumaru she plans to use the Mallet's Power to ring the Human Village's All-Clear Bell, and once the humans see not only the humans and youkai fighting side-by-side, but her singlehandedly defeat everyone, it'll destroy their fear in the other youkai and make everyone fear her instead. As a result, it'll simultaneously kill off ALL of the youkai in Gensokyo AND turn Seija into a god. To top it all off, Seija then lies to Shinmyoumaru that it was Reimu who commanded the youkai to kill off all of the inchlings, and that Shinmyoumaru is next. Seija escapes as Reimu, Marisa, and Sakuya struggle to survive Shinmyoumaru's onslaught.

Just as Seija escapes, she's met by Yukari, Miko, Byakuren, and all their forces, but Yukari is shocked to see that they are too late: Seija has the Miracle Mallet's power, and she is now the most powerful being in Gensokyo. Yukari tells everyone to void Spell Card Rules and give everything they got.


Chapter 9:
Short Version: Gensokyo rallies for a final stand against Seija as the heroines battle Shinmyoumaru for the Miracle Mallet. They get the Mallet, but its powers can only be used by an Inchling. However, Shinmyoumaru witnesses Seija's true colors as the tsukumogami and Grassroots Youkai turn on her, and she changes her mind and decides to help Reimu and co. stop her.

Full Synopsis:
Just as Genbu Ravine is overun, Remilia rushes in to save the day. She tells everyone that Hatate has been in contact with the amanojaku, and uses the false history of the Vampire Incident she gave to Seija as proof. Remilia says she handed over a false history because Seija would've stolen the REAL history if she didn't, and this was the perfect bait for anyone who remembers the incident. Hatate admits she made Aya look paranoid because Seija promised her newspaper would gain fame and fortune using the information she provided.

Lord Tenma believes it is too late, and the best option is to just leave Gensokyo: Seija has become too powerful, and even if that weren't the case, Gensokyo has become too much of a political hotbed. Remilia calls out Tenma and says Gensokyo hasn't changed one bit, and that everything Seija's done was to make Gensokyo give up hope on itself, citing how right now, the Tengu, the Kappa, the Moriya Shrine, the Lunarians, the Celestials, and now the Scarlet Devil Mansion have teamed up to save one-another, all while two factions who were at war are now fighting to stop an amanojaku together while a Shrine Maiden, a Witch, and a Maid fight to take back the Miracle Mallet. Inspired, everyone vows to fight to the bitter end, even Tenma. Aya is finally allowed to call for a hunt of the amanojaku with a reward for her capture. Cirno has given up and has gone home as the rest of Gensokyo rallies for the final battle, but Team 9 shows up to convince her she's stronger than she thinks she is, and she joins.

Reimu, Marisa, and Sakuya defend themselves from Shinmyoumaru as the forces of the Hermits and Myouren Temple dwindle as they fight Seija, trying to run out the clock so Keine can hide the village at dawn. Just when it seems like nobody can hold out from Seija any longer, EVERYONE in Gensokyo shows up to fight back Seija. EVERYONE: the Scarlet Devil Mansion crew, the Netherworld Crew, the Lunarians, even the forces of Makai (who heard about Alice's house blowing up and assumed it was the tsukumogami), the forces of Hell (when Satori thought Koishi might be in danger), the Ministry of Right and Wrong, EVERYONE. The heroines are awestruck at the sight of a united Gensokyo flying together as the sun breaks outside, but Shinmyoumaru just sees it as proof that Reimu has brainwashed the youkai to do her bidding.

Everyone holds back Seija just in time for dawn, or at least what they thought was supposed to be dawn: it turns out Seija had told Shinmyoumaru about the Imperishable Night spell, and that means the moon will hang in the sky as long as she wants, meaning Keine cannot hide the village. With no other choice, Reimu and co. fight for the Mallet, racing against the clock as Seija single-handedly destroys ALL of Gensokyo. A battle of titanic proportions ensues, with all combatants fighting at full power and no Spell Card Rules.

Finally, as the forces fighting Seija are wittled down to only a few of the strongest (and Cirno hiding behind a shield of ice, unable to keep up with Seija's power and just giving up), the heroines get the mallet... only to find only an inchling can use it. This causes the Tengu to retreat, losing Lord Tenma in a heroic sacrifice to cover the escaping flights. Just as Yukari, Miko, and Byakuren are shot down, it turns out Raiko escaped just in time, now fully in control of her powers, and rallied together the last of the tsukumogami and the Grassroots youkai, filling them all in of the truth. This buys Marisa just a little more time to figure out a way to use the Mallet's power, but it's no use: it's locked so tightly that it'd take weeks to unlock. This means the only way to stop Seija is if Shinmyoumaru changes her mind, but she's convinced the heroines are evil and Seija is good.

Though, as Seija fights the Grassroots youkai, Shinmyoumaru has second thoughts, but not enough to change her mind. Then Seija tries to take away Benben and Yatsuhashi's powers, but it doesn't work, so she tries to take away everyone's powers, restoring the heroine's weapons and reducing the tsukumogami to their weaker original forms, further shaking Shinmyoumaru's faith, as well as all of the tsukumogami's.

Finally, it's down to Raiko (while Sekibanki is also forced to hide behind Cirno's ice shield, also too scared to fight), the last survivor who can fight Seija, and now that's she's in command of her powers, she holds out for a surpsingly long time. Raiko calls out Seija for her belief the strong oppress the weak, saying the strong can make the weak powerful as well, inspiring all of the tsukumogami to the point where they stop attacking her. However, it's clear that not even Raiko at full power can win, leaving Reimu to simply pray something will stop Seija, while Marisa and Sakuya throw in the towel and have one last drink together.

Shinmyoumaru has a breakdown, unable to figure out who to believe anymore: Seija is her best friend, but the heroines really do seem like they want to save Gensokyo, but Seija also said never to trust them and they'd stab her in the back if she did. Reimu tells Shinmyoumaru to have faith, and if she really cares about the fate of the weak, she'll stop Seija. Shinmyoumaru asks why a shrine maiden would help protect the youkai, and Reimu swallows her pride to tell her that as the Hakurei Shrine Maiden, it is her duty to protect ALL of Gensokyo. They give her back the Mallet, just as Seija defeats Raiko.

The chapter ends just as Shinmyoumaru demands Seija returns the power of the Mallet...


Chapter 10:
Short Version: Seija nearly wins after betraying Shinmyoumaru one last time after losing her powers, but Seija is finally defeated by Cirno. Shinmyoumaru realizes Gensokyo is nothing like Seija painted it as, Raiko thanks Reimu for saving the tsukumogami, and the cast celebrate saving Gensokyo together. In the epilogue, Akyuu goes back on her earlier thoughts of Gensokyo being on the verge of imploding, and watches the sunrise with a new hope for Gensokyo's future.

Full Synopsis:
Seija refuses to give back the power of the Mallet, so Shinmyoumaru orders Reimu to trap her in a Duplex Barrier as she takes it back by force. Shinnmyoumaru makes her wish, but the Mallet's power isn't enough to cancel it out. Unable to fight back, Seija takes out Reimu.

The Tengu return, knowing it was only a matter of time before Shinmyoumaru changed her mind, and buy Marisa and Shinmyoumaru time to figure out how to squeeze extra juice out of the Mallet. It turns out most of the power is being used to sustain Shining Needle Castle, and destroying it will give Shinmyoumaru just enough power to remove Seija's own powers (which it turns out wishing for that will cause a spike in power output).

Marisa and Sakuya carefully time a coordinated attack to Master Spark the castle (using the timer from Chapter 5), but Seija takes them both out: Seija takes out Marisa as she distracts her from Sakuya, and then Sakuya jumps in front of a bullet heading for Shinmyoumaru as she makes her wish for everything to turn back to normal. The moon goes back to where it should be, but Keine is knocked out and unable to hide the village. Seija loses her powers and threatens to kill Shinmyoumaru in revenge, but the tsukumogami have had enough to all gang up on the defenseless Seija.

Seija pleads for mercy, but the tsukumogami don't let up. Seija begs Shinmyoumaru for help, saying she's learned her lesson and that everyone deserves a second chance, and if she lets her go, she'll never bother Gensokyo again. Everyone tells her not to listen, but when Seija tells Shinmyoumaru she was her only friend, Shinmyoumaru decides to give her the benefit of the doubt and stop the tsukumogami attacking her.

Seija tearfully hugs Shinmyoumaru and thanks her for saving her... and then Seija shoots her at point-blank and calls her an idiot.

It turns out Seija didn't think she was at fault at all, and she says that Shinmyoumaru was the one who planned on stabbing her in the back. Seija keeps demanding Shinmyoumaru to apologize, but every time she does, Seija says she doesn't truly mean it. Shinmyoumaru falls into despair and yells out that she hates Seija. Seija then picks up the defenseless Reimu and hurls her into the All-Clear Bell, and the humans in the shelters prepare to leave.

With no time left, it's clear that Seija has won. Cirno and Sekibanki chastise themselves for being cowards, only to accidently realize that maybe there's still a way to save Gensokyo if the people can't escape the shelters. Reimu's intuition picks up on this, and Reimu taunts Seija to distract her. Seija beats the crap out of Reimu and gloats how she'll murder her in front of the entire human village, but before Seija can do anything, she turns around to find that Sekibanki's heads have blocked the path out of the shelter, scaring the humans back in, and Cirno's ice has made an impenetrable wall of the heads.

Without her powers, Seija is utterly defenseless against Cirno, who instead of wanting to become the strongest fairy, just wants revenge on Seija for hurting her friends. Seija tries to convince Cirno that "friendship" is just a tactic by the powerful to manipulate the weak, and that "good and evil" are simply made up by the strong. Cirno doesn't listen to Seija's lecture on amorality and simply freezes her into a giant hunk of ice. Everyone in Gensokyo is shocked, but relieved.

Yukari reveals Cirno was never meant to be a distraction at all: since there was a 0% failure rate for defeating Seija, thanks to centuries of planning, Yukari just wanted to give Seija the most humiliating defeat she could and deflate her argument about "the strong and the weak" by being defeated by a fairy. Aya is hailed as a hero for rallying Gensokyo to hold back Seija just in time, while Cirno is hailed as a hero for stopping Seija (and given the reward, which sadly turns out to be a steakhouse giftcard). The Grassroots Youkai and tsukumogami apologize for their actions, but Gensokyo gladly accepts it since causing incidents is what youkai do.

Howevery, everyone demands Seija be killed. Reimu refuses, and Yukari supports her decision: not because it'll make her the better person, but because Seija WANTS them to kill her. If Seija dies, once the amanojaku find out, they will use her death as proof Gensokyo is corrupt and send even more amanojaku. Rather, the best choice is to simply accept Seija as one of them while ignoring her lies: it will make Seija powerless, miserable, and outcaste amongst the amanojaku who believe she "went native" in Gensokyo. Reimu asks Yukari why Seija did this, but not even Yukari knows: all she does know is her grudge against this land will never cease, and she will refuse to leave, no matter what. So, Reimu vows that they must never give up, either: they'll continue making the land the opposite of what Seija says to keep proving her wrong.

Reimu then goes to see Shinmyoumaru, who is distraught over the loss of her castle and destroying Gensokyo. Reimu says she forgives her and swears to protect her, no matter what, in the meantime. Shinmyoumaru still feels horrible that she's the last of the inchlings, but Yukari tells her she's not: Seija lied about that, too, and that her next goal is to rebuild the kingdom of the Inchlings. Shinmyoumaru cries tears of joy knowing Gensokyo is nothing like Seija described, all as everyone gathers around to offer their condolences to her.

Raiko then thanks Reimu and Shinmyoumaru for saving the tsukumogami, vowing to make the paradise for tools that Seija never gave them, and Reimu gives her word that she will not attack Raiko's tsukumogami. Everyone's next challenge is to rebuild Gensokyo, but not before retiring to (what's left of) the Scarlet Devil Mansion for a quick afterparty.

Keine and Mokou return to the village to open up the shelter. Akyuu, knowing Cirno must've worked with Sekibanki to freeze those heads and block the shelter, leaves with a refreshed optimism for Gensokyo, taking back everything she said before about Gensokyo being on the verge of collapse and tearing itself apart. Akyuu and Kosuzu watch the sunrise together as the village rushes to repair itself, and Akyuu says that as long as we never forget why we love Gensokyo in the first place, there'll always be another day.

The End


My goal here was to write a story where the ending fills people with hope and a refreshed love and appreciation for Touhou: a reminder that at the end of the day, past any drama that happens in the story or in our community, Touhou is just a game, a game that's brought so many different people together from across the world. The story begins with Gensokyo in political turmoil, but ends with everyone putting aside their differences for one moment because of how much they love the Eastern Wonderland of Gensokyo. As I said before, I want something that'll be the opposite of Diamond In The Rough, which ends on hopelessness, nihilism, despair, and confusion over who was really in the right: here, I want hope, victory, a sense of accomplishment and success, clear heroes celebrating their victories, and the villain finally defeated.

The current target release date is August 12, 2018 (the five-year anniversary of DDC), but I'm known for missing deadlines.

I hope you guys like it. Let me know what you think, any plot holes or whatever I should clear up, suggestions, etc.
 
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