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Re: Aya's Writing Workshop - Bring us your story ideas and outlines!
« Reply #450 on: August 25, 2015, 02:21:30 pm »
A question for the Japanese speakers:

Is there an equivalent of Octavian  ("The Eighth"/"Eighth Son") in Japanese.  If not, what are some male names that are based around the number "8"? 

And for the mods:

Is there a better thread than this for "story research" questions?

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« Reply #451 on: August 25, 2015, 02:47:56 pm »
A question for the Japanese speakers:

Is there an equivalent of Octavian  ("The Eighth"/"Eighth Son") in Japanese.  If not, what are some male names that are based around the number "8"? 

Ichiro means first son, so I imagine hachiro, yaro or some other kanji pronunciation variant of 8 would work.

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And for the mods:

Is there a better thread than this for "story research" questions?
Nah, here is fine.  It's not like it's interrupting a huge conversation or anything.

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Re: Aya's Writing Workshop - Bring us your story ideas and outlines!
« Reply #452 on: August 26, 2015, 05:53:03 pm »
Thank you.  I was leaning towards Hachiro, but my Japanese is even worse than my non-existent Latin.

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« Reply #453 on: August 27, 2015, 04:51:41 am »
A brief search reveals "Hachirouta" (八郎太) as a masculine name, though its rare enough as to probably only exist in fiction.

Alternatively, the cheater's way to produce a boy's name in Japanese is to take the word you like, and then add -tarou to the end. For example, in the Japanese folk tale of the Peach Boy, the main character's name is Momotarou (momo = peach, tarou=son, or a rough equivalent). So a much more natural sounding name would be Hachitarou (八太郎).

There are other ways you could do it (like the one Iced mentioned), but in my opinion that would be the most natural (and thus realistic) sounding name.

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« Reply #454 on: September 04, 2015, 09:38:15 am »
Does anyone know how a crossover between Touhou and Inside Out should work out? I'm thinking more among the lines of the events of Inside Out re-adapted into an incident in Gensokyo with a happiness incarnate who just wants to make her master happy as the mastermind behind the incident.

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« Reply #455 on: December 05, 2015, 05:42:08 pm »
Been deciding on if I should post here or not but I do have a few questions. I've got a game I've been working on for some time but now finally have a story synopsis done for the main parts, but I have no idea where to start. I have an idea how to start the story but I'm afraid of being too generic or not having a good enough hook to keep the readers attention. Should I work on the story as I work on my game or should I type out the story first and work on the game after?
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« Reply #456 on: December 05, 2015, 08:24:59 pm »
Been deciding on if I should post here or not but I do have a few questions. I've got a game I've been working on for some time but now finally have a story synopsis done for the main parts, but I have no idea where to start. I have an idea how to start the story but I'm afraid of being too generic or not having a good enough hook to keep the readers attention. Should I work on the story as I work on my game or should I type out the story first and work on the game after?
Generally you want to work on story and game at the same time, unless it's a VN.  This is because you need to design your mechanics to fit your story (or story to fit mechanics).  Pacing is important, and what works on paper may not work as a game.  So long as you have an outline working on both at once is the best plan.

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« Reply #457 on: December 05, 2015, 11:07:34 pm »
Sweet thank you! Any advice on how to start the story? It's a touhou rpg so not sure if explaining the world would be ok or if I should just dive in to a part of the story.
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« Reply #458 on: December 05, 2015, 11:58:14 pm »
Sweet thank you! Any advice on how to start the story? It's a touhou rpg so not sure if explaining the world would be ok or if I should just dive in to a part of the story.
For a fangame with limited distribution spending time explaining the world in depth is kinda foolish.

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« Reply #459 on: December 06, 2015, 12:06:00 am »
Ok just wanted to make sure, again thank you!
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« Reply #460 on: January 24, 2016, 08:21:23 am »
hello everyone :D !
first of all, i have to say that my English isn't very good, so sorry if i cause you trouble trying to read my nonsense :3c

i am very nervous, this is my first time in a English forum (well, actually second time, the first one being space battles, but everyone ignored me so...).
so i don't know what to do, should i make a new post in the fanfic index, or i shall present the idea here ?

anyways, i am currently writing a fanfic which has no name, this fanfic its a crossover with my personal project, (yes, i know it sounds horrible), but i am trying to make it a great fanfic.
i am writing fanon based on canon, i try to make the characters a little bit more intelligent (in the case of rumia), and more tridimentional, and a little bit more dangerous.

if someone is interested to help, i need people who know things from the cannon works, like the games, the doujinshi and the music text, it really helps a lot.

i kinda find it difficult to expose all the argument here, so ill leave a little synopsis and a pic some friend made for a chapter.

(should i put a spoiler for the pic ?, sorry, i don't know how to use the controls very well)

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The land of gensokyo has faced many incidents in the past, but nevertheless,  a unforeseen chain of events, under abnormal conditions, have brought a young soldier into this land of illusion and fantasy, but this human is different from the rest.
The young human will have to fight to survive in this hostile environment and in his journey he will meet gods, demons, monsters and entities that defy human logic, which may help him or try to kill him.
The gears of fate began to turn, bringing incidents and events that may trigger the destruction of Gensokyo itself.

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Re: Aya's Writing Workshop - Bring us your story ideas and outlines!
« Reply #461 on: February 03, 2016, 08:33:56 pm »
Validon here, poking around this board probably for the first major time ever. I haven't written anything here before yet, but I've been thinking recently on bringing over some of my Touhou OCs from a roleplaying group to practice my writing and play around with some slice of life ideas I've had. I tend to keep my characters fairly distant from most canon characters, events, situations, etc., but I might experiment with that a little too. While I'm planning on making my own thread, I wasn't really sure how to begin, so I was going to start off with this post here as sort of an introduction (and if I do end up making the thread, I'll copy over what I've written here), and briefly summarize and introduce an OC I've had a picture of in my signature for quite awhile: Utahime Chikage.

A night sparrow born before the Hakurei Barrier had been erected, Utahime is a true villain... or at least, that's what she claims to be. She takes the "night" in "night sparrow" a bit too seriously, having traded the traditional song and dance of other night sparrows for control over shadows and illusions, and uses those in tandem to lure humans to her home in the forest at the Youkai Mountain's base to slaughter or otherwise scare and spread stories of herself to others. Eventually, she wants to lead an all-out assault on the Human Village, to reintroduce fear into the lives of the complacent humans used to the neutral grounds of the village.

Her attitude is cocky and mocking, and she continuously lauds her evil and superiority over others... at least, that's what she does in public. Due to the recent introduction of the spellcard system, she's truthfully afraid that youkai are losing their purpose, and stubbornly sticks to the old ways in order to, in her mind, live on, feeling that if her name and legacy are forgotten, she would vanish from existence. She is unable to comprehend why other youkai have been able to live "peacefully" as long as they have, and cannot bring herself to let up on her "evil", lest she lose her purpose.

In short, Utahime's life is that of a youkai trying to bring the old ways back, spreading rumors and stories of herself to become a threat to the humans of Gensokyo, while at the same time getting caught up the many incidents that shake the land to its roots. Also not provoking the wrath of the Hakurei Shrine Maiden. That might also be a good idea.

Utahime's not my only OC, but I figured I'd just start out with one that I have developed out quite a bit to share with PSL here, and one I'm the least nervous in sharing (trust me I'm super nervous sharing any of my OCs outside the RPing group, eheh), and I just wanted to test the waters a bit with a mini-bio. Feel free to leave thoughts or ideas, I'm still sorta figuring out what I want to do here.
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Re: Aya's Writing Workshop - Bring us your story ideas and outlines!
« Reply #462 on: February 05, 2016, 04:38:46 pm »
The following is based on the posted challenge at fanfiction.net. Seeing that there is little response, with a sad number of existing Touhou - Harry Potter crossovers, I decided to share my wild ideas in the hope that it would inspire some writers.

Background: Suppose Yukari gets bored with the lack of incidents or events in Gensokyo. She finds the Harry Potter universe, and decides to gap in random characters at random times to see what would happen to them. Primarily Harry Potter-based with a great deal of inserted Touhou characters; they can become the main protagonists or simply as secondary characters to Harry and gang.

The Gaped Touhou characters may or may not know each other. Those that appeared in the same games or involved in the same plotlines are expected to know each other.

And ho:
  • Year 1: (Parsee Mizuhashi) - Some of her aspects are reincarnated into Harry - green eyes, random bouts of jealousy (but at limited levels, on par with Ron in Year 4), etc.
  • Year 1: (Kosuzu) - Hermione.
  • Year 2: (Wriggle Nightbug) - A firefly saved from Aragog / other acromantulas' webs. Becomes Harry's minion and aids Harry with various spying projects after Year 2. May or may not be involved after Year 6, given the complexity of plots and usually short lifespan of fireflies.
  • Year 2: (Yamame Kurodani) - Consort of Aragog, with minor involvement. Alternatively, may appear as one of the spiders (*animagi) during Moody's first DADA lesson, with a secret crush on Ron.
  • Year 3: (Eirin Yagokoro / Reisen II) - Potions expert, ranger & recluse living at the edges of Hogwarts. Previously fought with Nicholas Flamel over the patent to the philosopher's stone. First met Harry in Year 3 while Harry flees werewolf Remus. Appears in Year 5 to help chase away the centaurs (in place of Grawp), and in Year 7 to offer Harry to remake one last philosopher's stone to resurrect a person of Harry's choice before her death, but is declined by Harry. May attempt to resurrect Yoshika / Regulus Black (see below).
  • Year 3: (Rin Kaenbyou) - Crookshanks, with a terrifying affinity for dementors. [Note that Yukari wouldn't gap away her Chen into foreign and dangerous places.]
  • Year 3: (Sakuya Izayoi) - Innovator, developer of the time-turner and (later) dementor eliminator, using the principle of dementors being a rift or black-hole in space/time, which she is able to destroy. Eventually lives in recluse. May end up serving Remilia again if she found Remilia gaped into HPverse as Narcissa Malfoy or Mistress Greengrass.
  • Year 3+: (Mamizou Futatsuiwa) - A trickster and metamorphmagus who morphs into various forms just to serve chaos, and Peeves' ally and/or idol. First mentioned by Peeves. Initially acts against Harry by impersonating various Order characters or Death Eaters, and partly causes Sirius's death in the Ministry in Year 5 (or, if the writer wishes, someone else close to Harry). Eventually pacified through some means and helps Harry in the war. Takes Snape's place during the final meeting with Voldemort in the Shrieking Shack, and dies in his place. Mourned by Harry and Snape.
  • Year 4: (Prismriver Sisters) - The Weird Sisters. May include Mystia Lorelei and/or Raiko Horikawa with ulterior motives.
  • Year 5: (Rumia) - Darkness spirit residing in the Department of Mysteries. Accidentally released by Harry and friends, and follows Harry back to Hogwarts to torment him. Eventually sealed and semi-disintegrated by George Weasley, who uses her essence to create the Peruvian Instant Darkness Powder.
  • Year 6: (Yoshika Miyako) - Manifests as the inferi of Regulus Black, with relevant powers. At the writer's wish, may be properly reincarnated/restored by Eirin after the war to carry on the Black name and/or take over the Black estate from Harry.
  • Year 7 or earlier: (Satori / Koishi Komeiji) - A non-Voldemort aligned chaotic / dark witch, who was imprisoned by Moody during the First War, and her Third Eye taken away from her to be remade into Moody's fake eye. Escaped along with Bellatrix in Year 5. Causes a great commotion in the Ministry of Magic in Year 7 at the same time when Harry & friends break into it. Eventually gives thanks to Harry for returning her Eye, and joins forces with Hogwarts. Marries Snape after the war (if Mamizou died in Snape's place).

Others (including those mentioned in passing):

  • Tewi Inaba - The short-lived wife of Felix Felicitum, who later brewed the Felix Felicis in her memory
  • Hina Kagiyama - Curse mistress, popularly known as Wendelin the Weird, possible twin sister / enemy of Tewi.
  • Kagerou Imaizumi - Neutral-aligned werewolf, leads the werewolf tribes after Fenrir Greyback's incarceration / death.
  • Sunny / Luna / Star - Sprout / Neville's minions that aid the control of greenhouse weather in Herbology.
  • Nitori Kawashiro - Engineer and student of Salazar Slytherin, helped to maintain the structure and wards of the Slytherin dungeon and the Chamber of Secrets. Lived (or lives) in the Black Lake.
  • Sekibanki - Close associate of Nearly Headless Nick.
  • Hatate Himekaidou - Successor of Rita Skeeter as Daily Prophet head writer, with even more cunning skills in slandering and gossip collection.
  • Rinnosuke Morichika - Auror guard stationed at Hogsmeade, responsible for reporting cursed or malicious objects. All hell breaks loose when he is tasked to patrol Diagon / Knockturn Alley.
  • Yuyuko Saigyouji - A hungry ghost with quasi-dementor abilities. Eventually sealed by Sakuya / a curse-breaker / a powerful wizard, witch or magician / a coalition force.

Well. Just for variety. Contribute your ideas or comments if you want.  :(
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Re: Aya's Writing Workshop - Bring us your story ideas and outlines!
« Reply #463 on: March 27, 2016, 05:22:53 pm »
I'm writing a Touhou and Mega Man crossover fic named "Forest of Tohno".

The story starts with Mega Man and the others finding the torii gate of the Hakurei Shrine in the outside world. Apparently, the outside world Hakurei Shrine is in the universe where Mega Man takes place in. Mega Man decides to greet the Gensokyo inhabitants. Then there’s a story arc where Orange decides to build a robot master, ON-001 "Youkai Woman". Then, late one night, Orange gets cornered by Bass, who demands to know where Mega Man is. Orange is at first scared and doesn’t know who it is, and then when Bass reveals himself, Orange is lovestruck. Later on, there might be some Tenshi x Bass stuff, as well as Mega Man helping Reimu solve an incident, Roll working at Ellen's magic shop, Otaka (my Mega Man OC) learning Esperanto, along with other plotlines.

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Re: Aya's Writing Workshop - Bring us your story ideas and outlines!
« Reply #464 on: May 18, 2016, 03:24:29 am »
So longshot here but I need some assistance with my own work.  I need someone fluent in Brazilian Portuguese to offer a good nickname for an easygoing girl.  Obviously google translate will not suffice.

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« Reply #465 on: May 18, 2016, 09:51:26 am »
So longshot here but I need some assistance with my own work.  I need someone fluent in Brazilian Portuguese to offer a good nickname for an easygoing girl.  Obviously google translate will not suffice.

I know just who to ask. Will PM you soon.

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« Reply #466 on: May 18, 2016, 04:59:28 pm »
I know just who to ask. Will PM you soon.
Yeah that would be me

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« Reply #467 on: May 18, 2016, 06:04:04 pm »
Yeah that would be me

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Thanks a lot.  I got myself in trouble by doing plot first, research second.  :derp:

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Re: Aya's Writing Workshop - Bring us your story ideas and outlines!
« Reply #468 on: May 27, 2016, 07:34:50 am »
OOhh my gosh I'm sorry if I'm posting this wrong I'm p new here!! But It's actually pretty good this exists because I have a major fic I've been planning, regarding my headcanons around Meira (being a sister to Reimu and originally supposed to be the Hakurei Miko, taken by Mima by some means for her power), but I have four different ideas on how to start this/ All are good and bad in their own rights, and while I know some are worst than others I don't know which I should be going for. It'll probably be good to get opinions outside my own as to what people would be interested in.

1. Mima kidnaps Meira but Meira is an amnesiac through some means (magic? getting whacked out cold with that weird moon staff thing? Who knows atm). She wakes up in Reimaden, unaware of her past or situation.

Pros: there's the added plot in that she has to retrieve those memories, probably with Marisa's help
Cons: It gets rid of my original idea and themes, which were around youth mistakes and regret. I also feel like it's a very cheap thing to go about, or that amnesia is far too overused to be interesting.


2. Sendai died or was never there for either her or Reimu, Meira is kidnapped in her sleep or when tending to the shrine and Reimu is left behind.
Pros: Keeps the original themes I had in mind, like regret, escape (although it was "escape reality" than anything), and family. Makes being with Mima all the worst
Cons: doesn't really match the ages I've given them, and removes the plot in that it's later revealed by Mima that Sendai died (spoiler: lies lies lies) and thus removes the climax of the story I had planned out.

3. The original I was going with. Meira goes out to walk, contemplating over how she doesn’t want to be the Hakurei Miko but a samurai when she gets lost and meets Mima late at night. This is also how the amnesia start begins, and Meira is either manipulated in going with them or willingly leaves.
Pros: explains why she's a samurai in the future (sword is a family heirloom, originally owned by Konngara), keeps most of my original ideas intact and maybe feels a little more genuine, as well as pointing out just how evil Mima actually is
Cons: Meira, being about 7, probably knows not to trust random ghosts in the woods at night, which would lead to being taken by force (Actually now that I think about this that's not that bad-), her wanting to leave maybe implies bad homelife more than her disregard for 'fate', which is false

4. I start in the middle and leave the beginning ambiguous, implying the reason Meira has for being here was against her will and could mean either of these 3 beginnings while the story continues on and the beginning is only hinted at.
Pros: I won't have to worry about all this, could lead to any of the three above and gives me time to think this over but also get the story started already. Maybe leaves readers questioning?
Cons: this is super super cheap, like an absolute cop-out for the sake of ease.

Again sorry if this isn't meant to be posted here! But honestly I appreciate any input that'll help me towards not slowly losing my sanity trying to make this decision.

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« Reply #469 on: May 27, 2016, 04:30:22 pm »
It's fine to post here, but it's really hard to offer advice on "what other people should write."  Writing is a very personal thing.

I will say that option 4 isn't the copout you view it as.  Avoiding the messy details is a time honored tradition.  People get awards for being vague.  You will probably want to decide how it goes down later, but first is the story you want to tell.

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« Reply #470 on: May 31, 2016, 09:42:11 am »
Cons: Meira, being about 7, probably knows not to trust random ghosts in the woods at night, which would lead to being taken by force (Actually now that I think about this that's not that bad-), her wanting to leave maybe implies bad homelife more than her disregard for 'fate', which is false

Why can't it be both? Maybe her mother was overly baring, and pushed the pressure of being the next hakurei maiden down her throat so hard that Meira got too stressed out about it, and decided to rebel against her mother.

That said, i think you should go with 4. Would be more interesting.
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« Reply #471 on: January 05, 2017, 01:34:50 am »
First time posting here since I'm kinda new to being an active forum member.
Does anyone ever have issues coming up with last names for characters? I've given full names to pretty much every single character and now I'm down to the last two that I'm wanting to draft out. They're brothers, the elder is named Klein while the younger is named Gaffgarion. Every time I come up with with a name for one, it just doesn't feel right for the other one if that makes any sense. I've had a friend tell me to just change one of their first names to one I feel works or change their background so they're not brothers so they can have different last names, however I've held onto these two characters since I was in grade schools so there's a sort of sentimental value to how they are now and I just can't bring myself to change them.
As a followup I guess, does anyone else have any original characters that they've held onto for a prolonged period of time?
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Re: Aya's Writing Workshop - Bring us your story ideas and outlines!
« Reply #472 on: January 05, 2017, 02:31:31 am »
I believe Gaffgarion's surname was Goffard? Or Gaff, if you got with the old translation.

And oh yeah, I have some that are older than the war on terror.

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« Reply #473 on: May 17, 2017, 02:58:38 pm »
So after finally getting more feedback on Double Exposure I'm having to do a major rewrite, if addendum to the title of that thread didn't make it clear.

I'm trying to salvage what I can from the first half and kind of begun working on a kinda retroactive outline of the rebuild as I've already got entire scenes to remove early on but I'm not sure how to fit what's left into there or if I'm cutting too deeply.

Still here is the newly built outline.

- Hatate overflight of SDM
- Checks camera for early deciding subject to write about afterwards
- Realization about photobombing Koishi
- Bank and change course
- Acceleration
- Diving to Geyser Center
- Most of rest of story / Koishi encounter, chase, etc

I'm pretty much as a given removing anything related to things happening in the fortress outside ideas related to Hatate's starting to preplan her story (noting about the festival, looking through the pictures, etc). The bigger problem is the salvaging without those recovered bits looking like they just don't fit.
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« Reply #474 on: May 25, 2017, 11:46:25 pm »
Hey guys, just made an account for this. I saw a lot of really angsty stories on fanfiction.net and wanted to write a more fun one. Basically the plot is that in Phantasmagoria of Dim. Dream, Rikako Asakura beat Yumemi Okazaki and got her fifth grade science textbook. She promptly decides to study it and attempt to educate the whole of Gensokyo. Throughout her somewhat lonely endeavour(she's a heretic!) she opens up to new friends and gets into some arguments with some folks over her science-ing or lack thereof. As a note, the timeframe of this fic is set in PC-98 right after Phantasmagoria of Dim. Dream, but the other areas exist and so do their characters. I'm going to make sure there's nobody meeting someone before they should, but since Rikako and Rika aren't heard from again, it's assumed that they can interact with newer characters within reason.

Intro: (eh who needs spoilers it's legit the intro)
Rikako reads the very first passage in her science textbook which talks about what science is and why it matters. She's pretty inspired but soon realizes that maybe in Okazaki's world this might be a noble and lauded endeavour, but in Gensokyo she's going to be quite lonely. She decides that this was the dream she had and realizes just how unlikely beating Okazaki was in the first place, and so doubles down on her goal. In these first chapters she learns about the scientific method and is mind boggled by what a microscope is, and just how she's supposed to get one. Rika begins poking around her house.

First Arc: Biology, Classification, Plants, Animals, and Ecology
The first unit of the book, biology, might look easy, but the overwhelming amount of terms Rikako has to sort through is ridiculous. Even though it's a fifth grade book, many of the things being said are completely out of this world, and so Rikako very carefully goes through every experiment. There are a couple of issues with this, the aforementioned microscope issue, the issue about how she's supposed to get her cells on a 'slide', and the numerous issues with naming wondrous creatures in Gensokyo. To top it all off, after learning the material Rikako remembers her duty as a scientist and has to try to prove her book correctly by creating a public show of science. The local population of a spiritual wonderland is about as excited as you'd expect, and Rikako is devastated. However, she begins meeting some new friends, such as Rika and unexpectedly, Keine, who values learning for the sake of the children in the village as opposed to shutting out the two girls. Together they convince the town(and the powers that be) to let them demonstrate their scientific reports and experiments. The question is, will they get it right?

Second Arc: Geology and Cycles
Oh wow. A rock pit. Turns out there's only one good rockpit that Rikako and Rika don't need heavy duty stuff for is the playground of the Human Village's schoolhouse. After being teased a bit by the kids, the group help out the scientists learn about the rock cycle and geology, along with a field trip to Youkai Mountain to observe how rocks change over time. They then go to the Misty Lake to observe the water cycle with the help of Cirno(some shenanigans ensue) and finally go to the Hakurei Shrine to look at the Moon and stars as they're terrified to climb to the top of Youkai Mountain. Weird things begin to move afoot as their books are seemingly supplemented with more detailed papers and explanations. Who wrote those?

Final Arc: Matter, Energy, and Motion
Rikako and Rika have figured out most of the scientific grimoire thanks to both their new friends and some trust teamwork, not to mention those weird papers, however this part of the book is the last, and subsequently the hardest. The two scientists struggle to understand the fundamental reasoning behind any of the things they're learning, and are about to give up when they realize that even if they can observe or theoretically say a certain piece of their simplified physics, they'd never be able to prove it. Everyone's at a loss to what they need to do to prove it, until someone shows up. Is this who's been putting in the letters? How does she know so much science, and why hasn't she taken the glory? Enter Yumemi Okazaki and Chiyuri Kitashirakawa. With her guidance Rikako and Rika can't prove the physics on their own, but what they can do is keep studying. They realize that if they figure out the laws of physics they'll be known as the greatest scientists in Gensokyo, and Chiyuri offers to teach them, but they learn that they'll have to leave their home in the Human Village, and live with Yumemi and Chiyuri in the Forest of Magic. They both realize that the friends they've made and the contributions they've done for the community's well being are better than a title, and so they ask Chiyuri to still send them books, and when they're ready perhaps they'll take her up on the offer. Yumemi and Chiyuri accept this deal as they hand the girls their newest book, a sixth grade science textbook.
Along with around six math textbooks and a litany of workbooks and lab notebooks. Oh joy.


Again this is meant to be more of a heartwarming fanfic with themes of friendship and never giving up as opposed to something edgy, plus it's my first fic so I'd love to hear your feedback on it. Thanks a lot guys!
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