Remorse in Secession's Nobility

[Usually Dead]

We have another Ibunshu installment!

The next story in the Retelling of Oriental Stories arc is Touhou Toshinanto, Remorse in Secession's Nobility.

Like always, it's available to read along with the rest of Ibunshu at my website, following the pathing:

http://usuallydead.com --> Stories --> Retelling of Oriental Stories

This newest story will be the first of two that act as preludes to Ibunshu's final installment. Please read, discuss, and post typos below! 

[Kilgamayan]

first

[Dizzy H. "Muffin" Muffin]

Darn, not calling it "Retellishable Night."

[Herasy]

Ok, I just finished it. While the way Reisen seems to think about things reminded me a little too much of how Sakuya also thinks, I still like how you portrayed her. Reisen does indeed make the rough slightly inept soldier character fit her quite well.
Tewi is a jerk, as per usual. Although it seemed a little out of character for her to prank someone so far as to compromise the safety of the mansion and her rabbits.

I suppose I don't really have much to say about this installment like all installments. But it was still as wonderful to read as your previous installments. I look forward to the next parts!

Also a typo I noticed in chapter 5:
"I’m the only one who remained loyal after was ousted"

P.S

Spoiler:

I smirked at the Eirin x Kaguya lesbianism

[FinnKaenbyou]

I probably wasn't looking as intently as I could, but I found two typos in Part 5:

"Eirin kept her bow at the ready, but she didn?t draw the strong."

"The arrow disappeared into the mob, but not entirely. The arrowhead kept is effect."

It'd take me a while to say everything I LIKED about this story, so it might be faster to focus on the one thing that irked me a little.

I know that it's different because it's an origin story, but it was somewhat offputting to see Reisen think back to the whole Tsukito attack almost every five seconds. It's a valid point, yes, and perfectly logical, but sometimes it felt like it was happening a little too often.

That's not to say I didn't enjoy it - hell, I'll admit my pulse was probably racing during the

Spoiler:

Reisen attempting suicide scene

- but as a reader I did slightly start saying 'alright, I get it, she's scarred after everyone she knew died and she ended up

Spoiler:

giving Sakuya over to Remilia

, I don't need to keep seeing her break down in tears whenever she's alone'.

Besides that little complaint, it's your usual great work. In particular I actually really like the way you write Eirin, which means something since I normally don't care for her much as a character.

All in all, looking forward to seeing the continua-

This newest story will be the first of two that act as preludes to Ibunshu's final installment.

FFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFF

[Usually Dead]

Thank you thank you. The above typos are corrected.

Darn, not calling it "Retellishable Night."

Don't worry, dood. It ain't the end yet.

(But naaaaah, not gonna use that name. You're welcome to it!  )

[Dizzy H. "Muffin" Muffin]

Actually, I was hoping to steal "Redefined Fantastic Object." It's cool. |3

[Usually Dead]

Actually, I was hoping to steal "Redefined Fantastic Object." It's cool. |3

I'm not too hip to UFO, neither the game nor the characters. You're welcome to it.

[Kilgamayan]

No one has noticed the Easter Egg yet.

MotK, I am disappoint.

[Von Stein]

*sighs* One of the first Touhou related sites I came across, and I just now got around to reading the stuff on it. Ayayayayaya.

I do have to say I like your writing style though. [/trying to sound like he knows what he's talking about.]

Thanks.

[Dizzy H. "Muffin" Muffin]

Also, methinks the bunny doth protest too much at the beginning of chapter 6.

And I forgot to mention, but: bah, I prefer Kaguya x Mokou. Mind you, this is because I'm completely freaking nuts.

[FinnKaenbyou]

Remorse in Secession's Nobility

Oh, you.

[Zengar Zombolt]

Remorse in Secession's Nobility

Oh, you.

Oh... wow.
:V
Also you couldn't avoid giving a detailed description of Eirin's breasts.

[Moerin]

Remorse in Secession's Nobility

Oh, you.

I was wondering when someone would point that out...

Oh well, I guess I'll have to read this when I get some free time~

This newest story will be the first of two that act as preludes to Ibunshu's final installment.

Aw, I was looking forward to seeing how you'd fit the phrase "Phantasmagoria of Flower View" into the story...

[Kilgamayan]

Remorse in Secession's Nobility

Oh, you.

We has a winner!

[Mobius]

Dead, you bastard. I'm trying to get clean and you're not helping. I come back after all this time to find pure gold waiting for me. Fresh, top quality heroin fanfiction.


Never stop writing. I don't care if Ibunshu is nearing its end. Write something else, then. Just never EVER stop.

[Nine West]

This shall be known as ReiSeN.

This newest story will be the first of two that act as preludes to Ibunshu's final installment.

Egads! Does this mean that you'll stop writing about Touhou?

[Usually Dead]

Egads! Does this mean that you'll stop writing about Touhou?

No no. I don't think I could stop writing Touhou-related things. There's just too much to do.

[Nine West]

No no. I don't think I could stop writing Touhou-related things. There's just too much to do.

I see, do you plan to retell the stories of the games after Imperishable Night?

[Usually Dead]

I don't really know, truth be told. It's kind of hard to say what's going to happen until I get there.

[Kilgamayan]

This shall be known as ReiSeN.

That was the plan.

[Dizzy H. "Muffin" Muffin]

Oh dear. I've pretty much figured out

Spoiler:

how just about all the Impossible Requests are to be fulfilled

... naturally, I have just enough information to come up with two completely different trains of logic, both of which are most likely dead wrong, but ...

[Usually Dead]

Oh dear. I've pretty much figured out

Spoiler:

how just about all the Impossible Requests are to be fulfilled

You're amazing man. You know even more about these stories than I do.

[Dizzy H. "Muffin" Muffin]

So you're making it up as you go along to an even more ridiculous degree than I was for the first half of Catness, considering these stories are supposed to be serious?

[Usually Dead]

I've admitted before that I'm very much an author who figures out things as he goes along. The awe and respect that I pay to this trade is that things always seem to work out, not in spite of this lack of concern over the future, but seemingly because of it.

I don't mean to say that I'm going into this entirely blind. I'm not. I have ideas about where I'm going, even if those ideas aren't totally defined or set in stone. It's just that you, Muffin, offer some of the most cutting criticism I get on MoTK. This is not a bad thing. I do appreciate what you have to say. But it gives me lisence to tease you back now and again.

[Blackraptor]

This newest story will be the first of two that act as preludes to Ibunshu's final installment.

Awwww...and I really enjoy reading about GRIMsokyo. Upside is since it WILL be ending Ibunshu you just know that UD has something eartshattering to reveal in the end to make everyone go :V then ;_; then

If that will be the case then...



I just hope it doesn't end with everyone doing a heroic sacrifice or Gensokyo getting wiped out because of a Lunarian Invasion or something...

[Nine West]

This newest story will be the first of two that act as preludes to Ibunshu's final installment.

Awwww...and I really enjoy reading about GRIMsokyo.

Come on, it's not that depressing... 

[Zengar Zombolt]

But it gives me lisence to tease you back now and again.

UDXMUFFIN.
NOW.

[Pesco]

IMO Tewi would have run off without a second thought rather than stay and apologise.

[Fightest]

Ah, wonderful, my first post on the forum and I'm here to complain, what an entrance.

Anyway: all over the place "solider" is used as opposed to "soldier". Could that be fixed?

Otherwise, an enjoyable read  .