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Re: The New Generation (Story) (May contain TD spoilers)
« Reply #60 on: September 27, 2011, 10:09:14 PM »
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Sorry, I would have replied earlier but I was sleeping over on the USS Salem, and couldn't feel my arms on Sunday, hopefully I gave you enough to go on with mine
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Re: The New Generation (Story) (May contain TD spoilers)
« Reply #61 on: September 27, 2011, 11:18:19 PM »
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Mokou chuckled at the fairy's enthusiasm. ?One question at a time, kiddo. I did, I just control it, I make wings because I do, they keep my pants from burning, and I wear pants because I do.? The odd pair had soon arrived outside of a small house. ?Well, I'm going inside. I don't need to sleep, but I like it. Do whatever you want, I guess. See you around, little fairy.? Mokou walked inside, waving to the fairy.


GuardianTempest and Sourfang

Shou shrugged at Heal's request. ?Well, we've been serving Vaisravan here for awhile now. We all got sealed up awhile ago, but then some stuff with geysers and evil spirits started happening, and the seal was un-done. Byakuren had been sealed differently, so we went about un-doing the seal when we returned. We've been here ever since. Well, that's the long and short of it, anyway. I could go into more detail, but I don't want to bore you, and it's getting late.? She then turned to Minako. ?Hm... a pegasus, huh? And yes, it's pretty normal that you lost your memories.?

Shou stood up, and stretched her arms. ?Well! I'm heading to bed, so I'll show you to your rooms. If you have any more questions, feel free to ask in the morning.? She led the two farther into the temple. Snores could be heard from other rooms. Finally, they reached two doors across from each other. ?Well, here you are, for now at least. I have a few final things I need to attend to, so I'll see you two in the morning.? She then walked back to the main room, leaving the two Youkai standing in the hall.


Marokuu
(OOC: ?:V Sorry about that. It won't happen again, I promise!
And I'll probably keep this up for a bit. Sorry for the people who are already getting up, but I'd like to let a few people catch up before having you wake up. I'll probably have you all wake up in the next large update, but until then, please be patient. I'm not going to wait for every single person to get up to this point, but I want to keep you all on at least somewhat the same timeline.)

Momiji raised an eyebrow at the jellyfish's attempt to put the robe on. ?...You were supposed to go take that jacket off and put the robe on instead, but whatever floats your boat I guess.? She then took a sip of the tea. ?...A bit weak I guess, but I've made worse...? she mused to herself. ?A-anyway, do you know why you were falling off the waterfall? I suppose I should have asked this earlier, but getting you a place to rest was first priority.?


MFZBdude

The yellow haired girl turned to the newcomer and was about to speak, but was cut off by Cirno. ?It's a nineball! Nine is the strongest number, so it only made sense that it would represent the strongest person in all of Gensokyo. She then raised a quizzical eyebrow at Ark in response to having her dress tugged. ?...Oh yeah, you're kind of nude, huh? Rumia! Go get our third-in-command some new clothes! Just get them out of my own wardrobe!?

The yellow haired girl nodded, and flew off into the dark sky. Cirno grinned at Ark. ?Wriggle's normally second-in-command, but she and Mystia are dirty traitors, so you and Rumia just got promoted!?

After a few minutes of talking, Rumia returned with a dress like Cirno's. ?Here you go!? She handed the dress over to Ark.


Crow Cakes

Satori nodded. ?Of course. Orin, please show our guest to her room.? The cat meowed in protest. ?I know, I know, but Okuu isn't here and Koishi is already asleep. You're the only one who knows where it is, anyway.? Orin meowed again, but jumped out of her master's lap, looking up expectantly at their guest. Well then, we can speak more in the morning, Chiseki.

The cat then returned to a human form. ?Well then, let's get going.? Orin started walking off into one of the hallways. ?So, your name's Chiseki? Well, I'm Rin Kaenbyou. Didn't know there were any Satori left in the city.? The pair had soon reached a door on the side of the hallway. Orin opened the door. ?Well, here you go. Just holler if you need anything.?


XinXin

Within a second of Mikan's request, the maid had disappeared without a trace. Meiling scratched behind her head, laughing nervously. ?She does that. Sakuya can manipulate time, so she stops it a lot to save time.?

A few seconds later, Sakuya had returned, holding a maid outfit. She held them out to Mikan. ?Put this on. By the way, you won't be staying for free. The Mistress says you can stay, but as a maid.?

Meiling grinned at this. ?Well, it'll be nice to have you around. I take it she'll start tomorrow??

?Well, she still needs training, of course. This is just to keep her covered, for now.?


German Flower Youkai

?Valkyrie? Never heard of 'em. As far as the rest of it... That's a bit odd. But, I know what always makes it better!? She put an arm around her newfound friend's shoulder. ?Time to hit the town! Nothing's more relaxing than sake! We can grab a bite to eat, too.? She walked away, with her new friend in tow.

(OOC: This would normally be a great time for some Oni antics, but like I said, I kind of want to keep everyone at the same pace, so instead, noodle incident!)

The valkyrie stumbled through the down, bumping into people as she went. She knew that she would never look at a horn the same way again. Just thinking about it made her sick. Everything was starting to get hazy, but she could see a large building off in the distance.

Reisen-tanith
(OOC note: You do not control Kotohime yet.)


The wolf turned around to see a girl in a purple kimono staring her down, hands on her hips. ?Just what do you think you're doing in here in the middle of the night? Especially in th- ...why do you have a chicken hanging out of your mouth? That's... kind of disgusting.  ...Anyway, I guess I should do something about this. Um, come with me, okay? You can resist if you want, I guess, but it's kind of late and that would be a pain.?


Hanzo

The new tengu managed to stand up, and looked around. The place seemed odd, like she knew where she was, but not really. She then turned to see another girl staring at her. The girl had long, black hair, a white shirt, and a green skirt. What stood out about her more, though, was the weird rod on her arm and the shiny thing on her chest. It looked like an eye. Close inspection revealed that her feet also stood out. The two had a staring contest, then the other girl broke the silence. ?...What were we doing, again? I saw shiny stuff in here so I came in, but it's all so sharp... What did miss satori ask me to do?? She turned away from the other bird, scratching her chin. ?...It was something important, too...?

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Re: The New Generation (Story) (May contain TD spoilers)
« Reply #62 on: September 28, 2011, 12:24:41 AM »
Heal nodded at Shou, "Understood, I shall be in my designated room." she said. Later indoors, she tries carefully not to make any disturbing noise as she was escorted to her door. As she opens the door, numerous more thoughts run through her head, probably as a shock for suddenly gaining sentience. "This...is what they call...a headache, hmm? For when...you think too much. I must relax before my first day of duty." she whispered to herself. Quietly closing the door and lying on the bed, she feels a sudden rush of comfort inside and thinks, "My my, no wonder the humans enjoy this so much."

Covering herself with the provided blanket, Heal begins to have her first night's sleep. Slowly she drifts off into a lucid dream, in a semi-meditative state. There she sees patches of memories of her previous life and adjusts herself for the upcoming days. She decides that she will oversleep just this once, then for the subsequent night she will wake up quite early in the morning. The thought of upsetting people with the effort required to wake her up worries her and tries to jump at the smallest nudge she can feel, but hopefully she won't end up hurting people because of it.

Re: The New Generation (Story) (May contain TD spoilers)
« Reply #63 on: September 28, 2011, 07:08:38 AM »
Minako enters her temporary accomodations, albeit slightly reluctantly. She'd never even been indoors before, let alone in a room this size. It's not an entirely comfortable sensation. She thinks that if she stretched her wings out, they'd touch both walls. However, this place, this temple, doesn't seem quite so bad. There's a warmth here, the kind that comes from a true home, from beings that do more than simply share a dwelling. The newborn youkai has a sensation that the people here care for each other.

And then there's this 'Byakuren' person. When Shou said that name, Minako perceived something in the way she said it. There's a story there, Minako's sure. Something to ask about tomorrow, along with many other questions. So walks to the small window and opens it, needing the feel of fresh air on her face. Why does this place look so much like an overturned... boat, she thinks the word is. This Heal person, and the small girl with the rodent ears. Are they like Minako, newly 'born'? Perhaps not the mouse, Shou seemed to know her. But what of the other one? Is it common for two youkai to be 'born' so close to each other? Why did it even happen in the first place, to either of them? Or Shou, for that matter. Would the haze that seemed to have fallen between her current self and her old memories ever be lifted, to let her recall clearly who she was before she was 'Minako'?

But those can wait till tomorrow. Navel-gazing will gain her nothing now, so best to wait until the sun rises, and see if this Byakuren, or Shou, has some answers for her. But she wonders, as she lays down on the little bed in the room on her stomach, if this is to be her new existance, could she stay here for a while. This is a nice place.

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Re: The New Generation (Story) (May contain TD spoilers)
« Reply #64 on: September 28, 2011, 08:09:16 AM »
Ohuku raised her own eyebrow as a response to Momiji's suggestion "Why would I take off myself? That just seems stupid." She paused for a moment "Hmm speaking isn't that hard when you don't plan it out too much" she thought.

She decided to follow Momiji's lead in drinking the tea. Like everything else, using a mouth to ingest things was a completely new experience for her. "Ow" Burning her tongue was also a new experience, she set down the cup at the table.

"I... do not know... what happened" her speech slowed down when responding to the question. "I do not have any... memories before I... woke up, floating around the lake." She shook her head "The... only thing I knew was... my name... Sushikisu... Ohuku"

She fell silent, her mind yet again filling with thoughts. Where had she come from? Why was she here?

"You... saved me... right? Do you know what happened?"
« Last Edit: September 28, 2011, 04:15:02 PM by Marokuu »
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Re: The New Generation (Story) (May contain TD spoilers)
« Reply #65 on: September 28, 2011, 01:02:38 PM »
Aref looked over at the human in the kimono, and then down at her self..."What the ... I'm humanish now?" she said dropiing the chicken from her mouth. 
"I was hunting for food," She said licking the blood from her lips, *This human looks like shes an alpha... I best listen to her.*
"All right Ma-am, lead the way." She said as she started overtowards the Officer.
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Re: The New Generation (Story) (May contain TD spoilers)
« Reply #66 on: September 28, 2011, 01:15:57 PM »
"W-wait, what?" Mikan was stunned as she held the uniform in her hands. "I never said anything about staying here!" Especially what if they really ARE lunatics! She stared at them for a few moments, looked down at the maid uniform, and sighed while they remained seemingly oblivious all the while. Probably not because they were, but that they were ignoring her. She had no choice, she remembered nothing anyway. There was no way she could survive in this foreign land alone. "Never... nevermind..." She turned around, making sure to cover where was needed and crawled behind a nearby bush.

Upon proper inspection of the dress that she was about to wear, she was completely astonished. Mikan stared at it, mouth open, eyes twitching. This really was a genuine meido maid uniform: a black and white dress that was frilly at the edges along with a matching frilly hairband. After a few moments of awkward agony, she dressed herself. It was quite clear which was the lesser of the two evils. It was quite comfortable in actuality, however, she felt odd wearing it because CHINA PRIDE for reasons unbeknowest to her. Still, it was probably dark to the point that the humiliation would be saved for another time. She emerged from the bushes.

"Well... How do I look?" Mikan crossed her fingers as she strutted forward.

(Not the best fitting picture, but sufficient for the time being)

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« Last Edit: September 28, 2011, 01:18:55 PM by XinXin »
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Re: The New Generation (Story) (May contain TD spoilers)
« Reply #67 on: September 28, 2011, 09:27:04 PM »
Ark gratefully accepted the dress and slipped it on.  She smiled at Rumia and looked back at Cirno.  "So what all do we do?" she asked, looking around.  Out of cruiosity, she poked Rumia a little.  "And how did you fly?"  She knew Cirno could fly because she had wings, but Rumia didn't have anything like that.  It was piquing the Yuki-Onna's curiosity and she wanted to know if she could do the same.
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Re: The New Generation (Story) (May contain TD spoilers)
« Reply #68 on: September 28, 2011, 10:25:22 PM »
These 'Oni' know how to make a party, they outdrunk me in no time.. Hilde's still wandering along the street, trying to get rid of all the sake she drunk. Her vision is in haze but she seems to be able to walk in a straight line. Not only that, she can think quite clear, well as clear as a drunk can be, but she's able to sort her thoughts.'Gensokyo'. That's what Yuugi said, this underground is connected to it. I can't remember anything about such a place. I can remember a few things about where I'm from but nothing about Gensokyo.
She takes a look around. The underground city looks really beautiful in this everlasting night of the underground. It's also snowing down he... Suddenly her vision moves to the ground. She missed a step on the path and tripped to the ground. "autsch". She's checking herself if she got hurt. I don't even have a scratch. Her vambrace protected her arms from getting hurt. This armor is really of avail. Now that she mentions it. Mmh, the armor I'm wearing isn't as heavy as I thought before. The food and the alcohol did it's best.:V She smiled while standing up from the ground.

She looks at her helbard, she's still holding in her hand. Her face became serious while thinking about what happend before she woke up here. I still can't remember how did I get here. Yuugi said she never saw someone like me before, the other Onis aswell. Maybe the person, Yuugi told me to visit, knows something...  Her vision goes back onto the street and she starts to walk again. And this weapon is also a mysterie to me. I remember that I was used to this kind of weapon, but I feel more than that in this one

She can see the huge building coming closer and closer. So, thats the building Yuugi told me about. Hilde gets excited about what lies before her. She moves her helbard onto her shoulder and increases her movement.
She stops at the front of the main entrance. *TOCK TOCK TOCK* She knocks three time. Noone opens the door after a few seconds, so she repeat herself. *TOCK TOCK TOCK*
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Re: The New Generation (Story) (May contain TD spoilers)
« Reply #69 on: September 29, 2011, 12:53:05 AM »
(OOC: So, as some of you may be aware, I put in my sign-up that Kanade's fur is red. However, every time I picture her I picture her as blue, so instead of having two different images of her, I'm just going to change her fur color to blue. Her hair is still a deeper color than the rest of her fur, it's just blue now. I would use an arctic fox as basis for this, but her fur is a much deeper blue (arctic fox fur appears to be a grey-blue during the winter). Not really useful information, just thought I should point it out in case any character ever identifies her by fur/hair color, as I am wont to do.)

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(OOC: Well, you did say she's going to oversleep, so you won't be updated until after Sour's next post. :trollface:)


Sourtang

A myriad of questions floated through Minako's head as she drifted off to sleep.

---

The pegasus woke up from a dreamless sleep. Now that the room was filled with light, she could see that it was mostly barren aside from a dresser, a nightstand, and the bed she was sleeping in. She could smell something good coming vaguely from the direction of the area she and Shou had been talking in last night.


GuardianTempestMarokuu :V

Momiji was taken aback at Ohuku's notion of taking off herself. ?...The jacket isn't a part of you, you know...? She then listened as Ohuku explained her dilemma. ?You don't remember anything? In that case, you probably have amnesia... Or you may be a new Youkai. I'll ask Nitori tomorrow. And while I did save you, I don't know why you were falling, either...?

Momiji then stood up and yawned. ?Well. We should probably get to bed. The room I pointed to earlier is where you'll be sleeping, so unless there's anything else, I suppose I'll see you in the morning...?

Reisen-tanith

?...You're supposed to cook the chickens first, you know. Well, whatever. Follow along, then.? Kotohime sighed, and started walking next to the wolf. ?I'm surprised you didn't resist. Most Youkai get overconfident in their abilities and try to fight me off. Of course, by the time I'm done with them, they've learned their lesson, so I don't bother arresting them. Anyway, this is the place.?

Before them stood a rather large mansion. The human village was nowhere to be seen. ?I'm a princess, so of course I have a house like this.? The mansion itself was very ornate, if a bit... odd. It wasn't that it was weird, something just felt a bit off about it. Kind of like its owner. ?I don't live in the human village because I don't want to. Those people don't understand me, so I make no effort to understand them.? She opened the door, and led the wolf inside.

It was now clear why the mansion seemed so strange. Inside, it was full to the brim of things. Not even things with any clear connection, just random objects, most of which the wolf did not recognize. ?It's a bit cluttered in here, but you're a criminal so it's fine.? Kotohime led the wolf through the mansion, which seemed to be almost like a maze. Some paths were blocked off simply because there was to much stuff in the way. Eventually, they reached a flight of stairs. Down these stairs was a small dungeon. ?Here. We'll discuss the terms of your imprisonment in the morning.? She opened the door, and closed it once the wolf was inside. ?Don't try anything funny.? She locked the door, and left the dungeon.


XinXin

Meiling smiled as Sakuya gave the new maid a once-over. ?You look great!?

?Not bad, I guess. The point of the uniform isn't fashion, of course, but I've seen much worse,? Sakuya replied, agreeing somewhat. ?Anyway, you'll mostly be working during the day, so you should go get some rest. I'd show you to your room, but I'm busy now. I'll have one of the maids show you, instead. Farewell.? Within a second, the maid had vanished again.

Meiling let out a sigh. ?She's right, though, it is getting pretty late. I n- conserve my energy, so I'm not that tired, but you probably are. I suppose I'll see you in the morning, then!?

Right on cue, a fairy maid appeared. ?Okay, let's go, new girl!? The fairy smiled energetically as it led Mikan into the mansion. The inside was very ornate, and large. Larger than it should have been. But she tossed that thought aside as they arrived at a small door. ?We don't have many guest rooms, but this should do. Most of us maids have our own homes anyway. Night!? The fairy then flew away, probably to do some new task or another. Or just slack off again.


MFZBdude

Cirno beamed with pride once more. ?We travel around Gensokyo, saving its denizens from the bad guys! We are friends of justice, enemies of the mal... mally... malevorient!?

Rumia seemed confused at Arks' question. ?What do you mean, 'how'? I just... did. I dunno how else to put it, it just happens is all. I decide to fly, and I fly... Wait, you mean you can't fly??

Cirno's face was suddenly wrought with concern. ?...This could be a problem. We can't exactly travel the lands if you're stuck on foot.?

German Flower Youkai

The door opened to reveal a red-haired girl in a black dress. She was visibly irritated. ?Yeah yeah, what is it??

A voice from inside called, ?Orin, that's no way to talk to our guests. Let her in.?

Rin grumbled as she opened the door. ?Sorry, sorry.? Hilde stepped in, and wa greeted by a girl with pink hair, and a strange orb on her che- was that an eyeball?

?Hello. Yes, this is an eyeball. Yes, I just read your mind. No, I'm not kidding.?


Youkai Jesus

Arasoi slowly awoke to the smell of something cooking. Whatever it was, it smelled good. He could see that the room he was in contained a dresser, closet, nightstand, and a few things lying around, including some weird stick. Now that he got a closer look, the room seemed like it had been gone through recently.

Sonae

Sayuri woke up to that same starry sky. The door to her room was slightly ajar. She got out of bed, and went to open the door. As she stepped into the hallway, she could hear a voice from the other end. It was a bit far away, but she could make it out if she concentrated on the voice. ?My my, this is a problem indeed...? The voice sounded somewhat familiar, but she couldn't quite place it.

Another voice joined the first. ?I don't see what we have to do with it, still.?

The first voice spoke again. ?Well, we're housing her. I suppose they just want someone to escort her there...?

?But why do you believe would they be so specific?? Another voice this time, as difficult to identify as the other two, but still familiar.

?Ah, good morrow, miss Sayuri!? Sayuri turned to see a woman standing behind her. It took Sayuri a second to realize that this was Futo. ?I trust thee slept well??

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Re: The New Generation (Story) (May contain TD spoilers)
« Reply #70 on: September 29, 2011, 01:20:30 AM »
Arasoi yawned, pulling himself up. As his body left the futon, little sparks of lightning shot through his back, causing those yellow spikes of his to push themselves out of a retracted state. The scales on his "armor" gleemed in the morning sun. Arasoi rubbed his jaw a little, instinctively causing his yellow, jagged teeth to replace those human carines. After just moments of revealing themselvez, Arasoi sent those teeth back where they belong. He would'nt need them anyway.

For now.

Arasoi scanned the room, before grabbing another random rice cracker under another detached sleeve, poking it before munching on it. Still crispy. He slowly Stretched out his body, lightning jolting on his horns and spikes. Being curious, he grabs the wooden stick, before Waving it around. The white things on the tip gently waved in the movement. Arasoi then began to follow his nose towards the scent...

He was hungry anyway...

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Re: The New Generation (Story) (May contain TD spoilers)
« Reply #71 on: September 29, 2011, 01:29:46 AM »
(big question. Do I ?respawn? if I go poof? Will determine how risky I am with her.)

Sparkler thinks curiously, wasn?t she just told she was a fire spirit or something? She must experiment! She flies around near the house, looking for anything that seemed useful, getting some bamboo, and trying to hallow it out so she can fill it with the ash from where she came from. She however was more interested in testing herself, then finding things. She gets any pieces bamboo, and stuck them in the ground, before trying to light them on fire. She began to concentrate on one trying to get it to do....something. This continued for a while 10 seconds before she gave up on that, and attempted to ?grab? the fire, in hopes to do something with it, and unintentionally testing her own fire resistance.
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Re: The New Generation (Story) (May contain TD spoilers)
« Reply #72 on: September 29, 2011, 05:01:28 AM »
Minako takes a moment to run her fingers through her hair as she rises with the morning. The sensation may be new to her, but it feels right. She believes she used to take care of her appearance when she was  pegasus. It's still not quite right to her yet, being in this body, but the feel of the sun upon her skin is a welcome sensation. Humanoid or pegasus, it's a lovely experience.
She glances back at the bed and takes note of the few feathers she left there. It isn't much, but it's a start. She seems to find herself somewhat territorial, perhaps she was that way before as well. She wants to stay in this place, and leaving a few feathers in her new 'nest', such as it is, is as good a place as any.

But then as now, one must start the day by breaking one's fast. Relearning how to fly won't be an easy task on an empty stomach. And thus, Minako leaves her room and follows her nose towards that good smell, wondering just how much she can eat now.

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Re: The New Generation (Story) (May contain TD spoilers)
« Reply #73 on: September 29, 2011, 09:04:00 AM »
Mikan gave the room a quick look. It looked comfortable, although argueably not as grand as the rest of the mansion. Still, having a place to rest for the night was sufficient. Looking over her maid outfit once more and dusting it a bit just for the sake of it, she crawled onto her bed where she would rest until tomorrow came. What would await her in this odd place where things are not as they seem, she could only imagine an eighth of the craziness that transpired in this mansion. Probably because most of what she thought was related to death, which, as per ZUN Gensokyo standards, is not really something a youkai like her should be worrying about if she did not poke her head in the wrong places.

Eventually, the night devoured the girl and a blanket of peace was woven onto her. Rest.
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Re: The New Generation (Story) (May contain TD spoilers)
« Reply #74 on: September 29, 2011, 10:09:31 AM »
[OOC: I just notice that I was always trying to write in present... I should just write in simple past :V
"Meiling[...]not [...] tired[...]":derp: ]

'Awesome' was the first thing she thought. She started to grin. 'Mindreading, from a strategic perspective, this is an unbeatable advantage, Usually, in battle, you read the movements of your opponent in order to foresee his next step and prepare yourself. But with that, you can just read his next move and counter him on every single step.'
'But when I think of sociality'
Her face changed into sad one. '...' She switched the topic.
'Can you only read the thoughts of others or also their memories, their dreams, their subconscious?' she didn't stop for an answers.  :wikipedia:'Are there more of your kind here? This place is huge. Neat tile floor. Oh before I forget.'
"I haven't introduce myself. My name is Hilde." She does a curtsey in front of Satori and Orin, which isn't that easy in her outfit  :derp: She looks at Orin. 'My, these catears look cute.'
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Re: The New Generation (Story) (May contain TD spoilers)
« Reply #75 on: September 29, 2011, 01:57:43 PM »
Ohuku furrowed her brow when Momiji mentioned her jacket "Jacket? What's that and why would it be part of me?" She gave the tengu a look of confusion "You just told me to take off myself... well, maybe it's me that is me now but this..." She patted her former body turned raincoat "used to be me... I guess, that's one of the things I also knew whe...whe... whe-"

Her sentence was interrupted by a mighty yawn forcing it's way up her throat, suddenly sleeping seemed like a really tempting proposal.

"Y'know I feel... sleepy." She stood up, causing the untied robe to slip of her shoulders again "You can keep that, if you have something that goes under myself... old me... this, instead of on top?" Her intonation was that of a question but the sentence wasn't quite right for it.

"I'm going asleep, see you next morning" She walked into her room and flopped onto the futon. Not bothering to cover herself she simply fell asleep like that, on top of the blanket, in her coat.
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Re: The New Generation (Story) (May contain TD spoilers)
« Reply #76 on: September 29, 2011, 02:17:01 PM »
The netherworld is a place where souls of humans resides, awaiting their reincarnation. It is a place where you would forget about your previous life and lose any memories taken with you. Such 60 year visit would ensure the visitor to erase his mind completely, thus allowing him to take on a new form. However due to outsiders activities the netherworld itself can become unstable, and certain exceptions can occur...

Our story here follows a poltergeist, named Yoshiko Nakamura. She came from the outside world and appear to be searching for someone around here. Souls of humans that reside here bears little difference, they all come from Higan and they all have the same ghostly form. They don't speak, so finding a particular soul seems to be impossible. She would use to talk to covert with others, with rather no results, other than rising interest in her, and making some of the dead even follow her for a while. However her endeavours were not unnoticed, and are now being taken care of a peace keeper of Hakugyokurou.

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Re: The New Generation (Story) (May contain TD spoilers)
« Reply #77 on: September 30, 2011, 12:54:12 AM »
Youkai Jesus

Arasoi followed his nose until he reached the kitchen of the shrine. There, he found Mima, who was cooking on the stove. ?Morning. Took you long enough to wake up.? She then flipped something, and Arasoi realized that she was cooking meat. ?Sorry about just flying off like that last night. I had some stuff I had to do.?

She turned off the stove, and placed the meat on a plate. She set it down on the table with some rice and soup. ?Well, dig in.?


Narouge
(OOC: Not immediately, and she will be able to die permanently in certain situations. I'll notify you of these beforehand, of course. Also, she does respawn, but she also dies really, really easily.)

The fairy tilted her head upon returning her hand from the fire. She could tell that it was hot, but it wasn't painful. She was starting to get a bit tired, though...

Sourclang

Minako walked through the temple, rubbing sleep from her eyes. Eventually, she reached the same room she and Shou had conversed in the night before. A girl with purple and brown hair in a strange black dress was setting food on the table. ?Ah, good morning. I take it you're Minako? Shou told me about you and the other girl earlier this morning. I was just about to come wake you up, actually, as breakfast is ready.? The food itself smelled good, but was not so appetizing visually; it seemed to be just some brown stew. Still, food in general sounded good right now.


XinXin

Mikan slowly faded into rest. She thought she could hear a voice, but brushed the thought aside as sleep encompassed her. It was probably just her mind, anyway.

---

Mikan was awoken by a knock on the door.  She clumsily got out of bed, and opened the door, rubbing sleep from her eyes. On the other side of the door stood the maid from the night before. ?Good morning. Since today is your first day, we'll go relatively easy on you. Not that slacking off will be tolerated, but of course it is acceptable if you don't understand some thing immediately, or mess up. But first, some breakfast.?

Sakuya led the new maid through the mansion, pointing out certain rooms and hallways as they went. Finally, they arrived at a large mess hall. Fairies could be seen munching on food and conversing. ?This is where you will be eating. Of course, the Mistress dines in a much... nicer room,? she explained. ?Sit wherever you like. It's buffet style to avoid the trouble of having servers for the maids. Don't be greedy, of course. I'll come get you once you finish.?


German Flower Youkai

?Trust me, it is much more of a curse than a blessing. I can read thoughts, and memories to a certain extent. The only person who can read the subconscious is my little sister. One just arrived a few minutes ago. I am Satori Komeiji, the owner of this palace and ruler of the Underground City. And yes, they are quite cute.? Orin pouted, and turned into a cat, meowing up at her master. ?Alright, alright. Please, come sit down.? She then led Hilde to the room Chiseki and Satori had conversed in, before sitting down. Orin jumped into her lap. ?So, what brings you here??


Marokuu

Sleeping in a bed felt weird. Ohuku wanted to sleep in water This would do, though.

---

Ohuku slowly opened her eyes. Sunlight shone in through the window. She sat up, and managed to stumble out of bed. She left the room, to see Momiji standing there. ?Oh, good morning. I was just about to come wake you up. Breakfast is ready.? She turned and led the jellyfish into the dining room. Rice and fish were set out on plates. ?You look like you lived in the lake, so I figured you might like fish.? She sat down at the table. ?I'm going to eat now.?


Berzul
(OOC: You need to give me something to go off of. Like, her actually appearing there, not just saying what will happen. Her reaction, things like that.)


---

?Well, here we are!? Hina said, smiling. In front of them was a small, run-down shrine. ?This is my shrine. I don't get many visitors, since most people think I bring bad luck, instead of taking it away.? She sighed a bit at this, but her energy soon returned. ?Anyway! You'll be my new shrine maiden, the last one had a terrible stroke of misfortune and died. I wasn't there to take it away in time, but I'll be much more attentive this time! ...Unfortunately, I don't really have any shrine maiden clothes right now, so you'll have to borrow one of my old dresses...?

Kanade picked her jaw up from the floor. ?...You honestly expect me to be your shrine maiden? We just met, and the last one's fate doesn't exactly fill me with hope...?

Hina smacked Kanade on the back, resulting in another yelp from the girl. ?You'll be fine! I mean, I can't take your misfortune for some reason, but you've got enough that I'm sure I can't give you much more!?

Kanade pouted. ?Thanks, that really cheers me up...?

Hina frowned. ?Er, sorry. I thought it was a compliment...?

Kanade waved her hand dismissively. ?No, it's alright. It's just a lot to take in...?

Hina nodded. ?I know what you mean. Well, we can talk more in the morning. I'll lead you to the shrine maiden's room.? Hina entered the shrine, followed by Kanade. The shrine was just as run-down on the inside, even more. ?I haven't had a shrine maiden in awhile, so it's been falling into a bit of a bad state. I can't clean it myself, there's some rule against that or something. Well, here you are!?

They were in front of a small room containing only a bed and dresser. Kanade looked at Hina, suspicious. ?How can you be so happy with your shrine like this??

?I don't let things like that get to me. I am the Curse Goddess, after all~? Hina replied, spinning a bit.

?...Right. Well, then, good night.? Kanade sighed, and entered her room.

?I'll have that dress out for you in the morning~? Hina called from the hallway, before leaving.

Kanade yawned as she climbed into the bed. It was surprisingly comfortable. She pulled the covers over herself; it did little to keep the cold out. Still, it was better than nothing. She slowly fell away into the embrace of sleep.

---

A girl with glasses sat in her chair, playing with a pencil. There was a knock at the door. ?Come in.?

?I just wanted to let you know that the I-Type is in position, and the A-Types are almost ready. The first should be ready within one or two days.?

?Good. Carry on.?

Re: The New Generation (Story) (May contain TD spoilers)
« Reply #78 on: September 30, 2011, 01:09:16 AM »
Sayuri jumped, if it's even possible for spirits to jump. She turned around, startled by the girl. "O-oh...good morning" she says nervously, gazing around, wondering how she had got in. "What was your name again?" She asked, trying to hide the fact that she overheard a serious conversation just now.

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Re: The New Generation (Story) (May contain TD spoilers)
« Reply #79 on: September 30, 2011, 01:10:16 AM »
A bit late, Heal wakes up for the first time. Feeling refreshed, just like her previous master with immense vigor. As she moves, she accidentally falls of the bed, flat on her face with a loud bang on impact. She stands up, unfazed as usual and begins walking out of her room and into what she thought was the 'living room'. She sights Minako and Shou as she stretches her arms up, a sign of relaxation and greets the two.  "Good morning Minako, Shou, a fine morning." with a short bow. Looking at the third person, she feels a feeling of grace and nobility coming from her. She asked "Oh my, who might this lady be?"

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Re: The New Generation (Story) (May contain TD spoilers)
« Reply #80 on: September 30, 2011, 03:01:07 AM »
Arasoi sat at the table, his spikes still jolting with energy. Silently, he streched his arms, cracking his knuckles as his teal armor jingles in his arms. He did'nt think Mima would actually cook for him. And if she was the deity of this shrine, could'nt she make food with a snap of her fingers? Maybe evil-ghost-gods can't do that.

Arasoi looked at the food presented to him. Meat, rice and soup. A simple meal, although not suited for a breakfast, it was still food. And Mima's food would be good, just like yesterday's rice... She could make a pretty good wif-

Arasoi shook his head, repelling that thought away. However, another thought entered his mind. Yesterday's dream. He fell asleep while thinking of Mima, and it was only adequate that his mind would think of Mima while he slept. Silently, Arasoi gulped down the rice and meat, hks mind slowly getting filled with thoughts. Why was he thinking this way, anyway?


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Re: The New Generation (Story) (May contain TD spoilers)
« Reply #81 on: September 30, 2011, 03:23:26 AM »
(OOC: I am very, very sorry for not posting. My house lost Internet connection, and it's still not back after three days. I'm typing from school.)

Chiseki nodded to the cat. Before walking in, her third eye glanced at Orin, scanning all her current thoughts.

The guest room had simple decorations. Plain wooden furniture stood in the room. A window with long brown curtains allowed her to see the outside grounds of the palace. The bed in the middle of the room was clean and white, and its mattress looked a bit too big.

After one look out the window, the satori immediately laid down on the bed. It wasn't long before she actually slept, but in the time it took for her to doze off, she reminded herself to do one thing after she met the owner of this house: to scan her mind. If Satori really was what she said, then she could trust her.

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Re: The New Generation (Story) (May contain TD spoilers)
« Reply #82 on: September 30, 2011, 03:47:46 AM »
Sonae

?I am Mononobe no Futo. May I ask why thou seemest so... startled?? Futo had a look of concern on her face.

Then, a voice from the other room. ?Hm? Oh, Futo, is our guest awake??

?Yes, she hath awoken.? Futo nodded down at Sayuri. ?Thou may proceedeth foremost.?


GuardianTempest
(OOC: Just as a side note, Shou is not currently in the room. I should have specified that.)

Byakuren gave the vassal a warm smile. ?Good morning. My name is Byakuren Hijiri. Shou informed me that you wished to speak with me about something? Please, do sit down. I must admit, I have something that I need to speak to the two of you about as well, but it can wait.?


Youkai Jesus

Mima sat down, and also ate. After a few minutes of silence, she spoke up. ?So. We need to head to the human village later. Either today or tomorrow, I'm not sure yet. Of course, you'll be coming along. That okay with you??


Crow Cakes
(OOC: Don't worry about it. Like I said, stuff happens. I myself was unable to post one day due to losing my internet connection. It's not a problem~)

As Chiseki fell asleep, the voices that even still were present in her mind faded away into silence, until only two voices remained. Hers, and another one. The other voice was clear, yet impossible to understand. The words were words she knew, but they did not register. She ignored it as she fell into slumber.

(OOC: I want you and German Flower Youkai to be on the same timeline since you're in the same place right now, so I'm afraid you'll have to wait until GFY catcehs up. Sorry. Shouldn't be a problem, though.)


Berzul
(OOC: Since this is a bit late into the timeline, I'm just going to have it so that Yoshiko becomes aware on the second day. We had someone start a few days early, so starting a day late isn't a problem.)

The poltergeist wandered the netherworld, not knowing what to do. She knew she had to find someone, but she did not know who. She did not even know where she was; nothing really registered to her. She was here to find someone, and that was all.

?Ah, I see we have a new face.? The poltergeist turned to see a woman with pink hair looking at her. ?We usually only get the little fluffy guys you see here, so ones like you with actual human forms are pretty uncommon. My name is Yuyuko Saigyouji, I'm the ruler of this place. And you are??

Re: The New Generation (Story) (May contain TD spoilers)
« Reply #83 on: September 30, 2011, 04:47:47 AM »
(SourCLANG now? Name's all over the place these days.)

For a being that had subsided on diets of grass and other forms of natural plants, brown stew seems odd indeed. Still, it does smell good.
"Good morning... Heal, was it?" Having a seat at the table, the pegasus fixes her attention on the woman in black, who identifies herself as Byakuren Hijiri. Straight away, Minako can tell that this is a good person. That she is, in all likelihood, the head of the herd. And exquisitely beautiful, as well, seeming to carry herself with a sense of serenity and strength, a power of spirit the likes of which Minako had never seen, and that not even the greatest of pegasi she'd known had possessed. Even someone that had only been humanoid for less than a day would stop and stare at the woman before her.
"Y... Yes. I am Minako. Minako Honjou. Uh... 'I'm pleased to make your acquaintance.' .. That's what people say, isn't it?" It seems to her that she'd heard that expression before, somewhere. She couldn't quite put her finger on it. "Do you... lead this place?"

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Re: The New Generation (Story) (May contain TD spoilers)
« Reply #84 on: September 30, 2011, 06:28:41 AM »
Heal felt some affirming emotion, this was the sort of people she'd drool over to serve, but then that's not very knight-like now, is it? She tries to control herself and keeps her pace as she settles down on her seat, nodding to Minako's question. She glances to Byakuren for a moment then swiftly looks back on her meal. She wondered at the thought of eating, youkai and humans pretty much see it as a basic process in their metabolisms, but to her it feels somewhat foreign. Examining and strategizing on how she's going to eat it, at first thought she would just chug it down, but then that's not a very noble manner as she notices the provided utensil. "Um...excuse me.."

She slowly looses her helmet as she lifts it gently, revealing her mouth, then her nose, then completely revealing her head as it slides off. She gazes on the reflection on her armor to check of her appearance, gold eyes, gold hair in a bob cut, with her bangs neatly styled to one side. It felt quite strange, originally she just thought she was just a piece of ornamented metal but sure enough she has a human 'interface'. Laying it down on the floor, she delicately picks up the spoon and fills in a tablespoon of stew, with a few bits of vegetables in it. Feeding the food-material, the sensation of taste leaves her distracted as she begins consuming the soup. The thought of serving Byakuren still remains though, and hopes to tell her eventually.

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Re: The New Generation (Story) (May contain TD spoilers)
« Reply #85 on: September 30, 2011, 07:01:27 AM »
Mikan's eyes stared right at the large array of delights that spanned the table. It was not a large table, but it was filled to the brim with pastries and the like. She immediately grabbed a plate and started picking out the best of the best, eventually filling up her plate. She found a seat among the mass of tables, somewhere not too near the fairies, yet not too far so as to make it less awkward. She could not recall the last time she ate something, but for some reason, this was extremely high by her standards. As she lay her plate down on the table and sat on the bench, she immediately turned into a vacuum, forgetting herself and devouring each and every delectable delight in front of her.
Helloo world! Would you like a cookie?

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Re: The New Generation (Story) (May contain TD spoilers)
« Reply #86 on: September 30, 2011, 07:01:39 AM »
Arasoi slowly lifted his head up, his clawed fingers probing the bowl of soup beside him. He tilted his head to the right slightly, his free clawed hand supporting his head as a yawn came out from his mouth.

"The human village you say...?" Arasoi pondered in his head, how would humans look like. Were they like the demons in Makai? With those female, humanoid bodies with wings and claws? Or were they like Mima. Mima... Arasoi shook his head, repelling that thought from his constantly imagining mind once more. A sigh escaped his mouth as his right clawed hand traced the soup bowl.

He looked back up at Mima, her green eyes showing no sign of that affection he wanted to see. It just showed... Friendship. And within his, those gold eyes of his, longed so dear for something. Why had he fallen for Mima, anyway...?

"It's fine with me. I would like to know more about Gensokyo, anyway."

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Re: The New Generation (Story) (May contain TD spoilers)
« Reply #87 on: September 30, 2011, 07:41:17 AM »
"Uhm thanks." Ohuku sat down opposite Momiji and picked up her plate, giving it a closer look.

"I don't really remember eating before, I don't even know if I... ate in the same way before... this." She waved her hand in front of herself in a general gesture.

"Now, how do I?" She picked up the fish from the plate and looked at it, suddenly her stomach let out a loud rumble and she swallowed the whole thing instantly. "Hmm this was tasty." she said before continuing on to the rice. "This was more boring but it is filling me up."

After finishing the meal she looked at Momiji questioningly. "So umh err, what eh... happens now? Do we like... do something or... what?"
« Last Edit: September 30, 2011, 06:03:58 PM by Marokuu »
My first attempt at storywriting, looking for critique

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Re: The New Generation (Story) (May contain TD spoilers)
« Reply #88 on: September 30, 2011, 09:27:09 AM »
[OOC:
(OOC: I want you and German Flower Youkai to be on the same timeline since you're in the same place right now, so I'm afraid you'll have to wait until GFY catcehs up. Sorry. Shouldn't be a problem, though.)
Well, as far as I can see it, I arrived after Chiseki gone to sleep. So I'm actually "ahead". Maybe I woke her up by knocking too loud or something like that :V.

Posting stuff later, Girl is preparing  ::)]

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Re: The New Generation (Story) (May contain TD spoilers)
« Reply #89 on: September 30, 2011, 04:43:00 PM »
?Ah, I see we have a new face.? The poltergeist turned to see a woman with pink hair looking at her. ?We usually only get the little fluffy guys you see here, so ones like you with actual human forms are pretty uncommon. My name is Yuyuko Saigyouji, I'm the ruler of this place. And you are??

Excited seeing another ghost, Yoshiko would instantly reply  "It's a pleasure to meet you, Yuyuko-sama, My name is Yoshiko Nakamura......" But at this moment something she just realised. That would be caused by the unusual reaction of the other person. It felt strange, she could hear own voice perfectly, but it was not the same feeling while the other ghost spoke. She thought that, since the other ghost could speak, she would be able to as well. But *something was wrong with her voice?*, she pondered.

She tried several times speaking single word, breathing heavily, even trying to pull her tongue out, but to no effect she could not produce any sound with her lungs. She left a bit envy and embarrassed since the other ghost could do that such easily. She looked down... as she realised that the other ghosts could also float over ground. Thus excited Yoshiko began to float around her examining her. Yes it was something different that your usual ghost, with some kind of clothes on her. There seem to be more heavy than the cloth dress she was wearing. Additionally she noticed floating ghosts around the other ghost. She remembered that some of them would follow her around as well, so she looked around if any would be around her now.

Seeing the different ghost, she would try to act the same as it. But that just risen a question that would she would try to ask. She would ask the other ghost "You are me? Are you a ghost too?" reinforcing her statement by points on the other ghost and then back on herself. Awaiting her response we would try to mimic anything the other ghost would do, trying to get some kind of response out of her.

On the side note speaking is usually a very easy achievement for a Youkai, but since such spectral ones do not have a "Physical body" I assumed they need a little time to realise that, and speak by other means. With poltergeist, because they are able to produce sounds, it would be something they would learn with their power.