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Re: Weekly Writing Challenge! - Post-Apocalyptic Setting
« Reply #780 on: May 15, 2011, 06:21:33 PM »
Maribel twisted the knob on the radio very slightly.  As she did the boundary between noise and signal shifted just enough to begin to hear the station.  ?I got it!? she proclaimed, twisting the knob a little more to lock the signal in.  Soon ?A kiss to build a dream on? was playing out over the scrub land.

Renko smiled as she steered around a rock.  ?Good job Mary.  It was getting boring without the radio.  Not that I don't enjoy your voice but...?

Maribel's reply was cut off by the guttural sound of a motorcycle's engine.  Speeding out from behind the frame of a house came two bikes.  They quickly pulled aside the car, on either side.  The riders wore leather and sported mohawks.  More disturbingly they carried what looked to be wood handled axes.  The human closest to Renko pointed his weapon at the girl and yelled something unintelligible over the engine noise before laughing.

Renko sighed.  ?Why do they always come out during the good songs?  Can you handle this Mary??

Maribel's expression had turned grim.  ?I can only get the one on my side.?

Renko sighed again.  ?Oh well.?  She made a little shooing motion with her hand towards the biker.

The man looked startled, then angry.  He raised his axe and veered closer.  Renko quickly took one hand off the wheel to reach into her coat.

Two shots rang through the air.

After the crashing had died down Renko stopped the car and hopped out.  ?Might as well search them for food and water,? she said.

Maribel nodded once again.  Unlike her friend she hadn't become quite as desensitized to the new world.

As the two began searching through the wreckage for anything useful, the radio announcer began speaking.  ?Hellllloooo Residents of the Japanese Wastelands!  This is Captain Minamitsu Murasa, broadcasting to you live from the palanquin ship stuck in orbit right above your heads.  We promise music for all, human, mutant, ghoul or youkai.  Satellite radio at its finest.?

?Quick news update.  We've received word that there's a new player out there.  Apparently this young lady isn't interested in pyramids or nation building, but she packs quite a punch none the less.  Rumor has it she stayed in the underground for a while after the war, but she's out now and giving bandits, warlords and occasionally villages more boom then they can handle.?

Maribel looked over at Renko.  ?Think that's the one Yumemi wants us to find??

Renko nodded.

?Accounts vary as to her name, powers or race, but they all say that unlike the rest of us youkai she didn't get hit nearly as hard with the nerf bat.  So be kind to random strangers you meet in the wilds, because this is one Ranger of the Wastes you don't want to mess with.?

?And now back to music.  Here's another song from the '50s, an ironic little ditty by Tom Lehrer.  Enjoy folks.?

Soon the sound of the piano rang out leading into ?All Go Together When We Go.?  Maribel sighed.  ?I think that ghost has a very warped sense of humor.?

Renko grunted her agreement as she tossed they supplies the found onto the back seat.  ?Yeah.  I liked the Elements song better anyway.?

Once again their car sped off into the wastelands.

***

The village was a piecemeal construction of concrete, metal and wood.  Half the buildings were patched up prewar buildings, but the other half looked like they had mostly been put together from the ground up.  That was a good sign, as was the well and the gardens around the area.  It meant the village was rich enough to not need to rob travelers of their valuables.  Like say all the metal in their car.

The saloon was another good sign to Maribel's thinking.  It meant they could get real supplies for the search yet to come.  Scavenging these days was more likely to find goods then food.  Twinkies might not go bad normally, but if they were too irradiated only ghouls would eat them, and most ghouls would try to eat your face first.

Renko parked the car in the central square, pulled the face off the radio and smoothed her ankle long white cloak.  ?I hope we don't get a ticket,? she said flippantly as she locked her door.

Maribel sighed, then grinned and hopped out of her door.  ?I'm more worried about you forgetting where you parked it,? she retorted as she flipped open the trunk to grab some trading goods.  She noticed the villagers coming out to stare at the two girls, but none of them seemed to have a weapon or enough magical power to be dangerous without one.

Maribel finished filling her bag and slammed the trunk shut.  She nodded to the few villagers standing around, then followed Renko into the saloon.

The bar was made of cement, and the furniture was all scavenged, but the locals all seemed well dressed, and the radio was playing ?Mr Sandman,? creating a strangely homey air.  Maribel relaxed a little.  She thought Renko did too, but Renko always looked relaxed, even when she was ready to kill someone.

The bartender bowed to them.  ?Hello ladies, and welcome to our humble village.  Are you passing through, or looking for a place to settle down??

Renko slid into one of the stools next to the bar, and Maribel followed after.  ?Just passing through,? Renko replied.  ?We're looking for someone, though we're happy to do some trading and message delivery along the way.?

?Hrm...  That sounds good to me.?  The bartender pulled out a water purifier and two cups.  ?Need something to wet your throats??

Renko looked over at Maribel, and she nodded before turning her eyes to to container.  After a few seconds her eyes revealed there was no boundary in the liquid.  It was either safe to drink, or not water at all.

With that Mary nodded and pulled out two bottles of Fabreeze.  ?A gallon of water, dinner for two, and credit for a night at whatever passes for an inn if you've got one.?

The bartender looked at the cleaning solution carefully, then sniffed the bottles.  ?Well that seems to be a fair trade miss.  Pleasure doing business with you.?  He placed the water next to them along with the glasses.  ?There's only a little more then a gallon left in here.  Feel free to help yourselves.?

Renko shifted the bottle to make sure the weight was right.  ?Thanks.  Mind if I ask a question??

The man shrugged.  ?Sure, though I can't guarantee an answer.  This place is pretty far off the beaten path.?

?Have you seen someone wandering around who still had strong combat magic?? Renko asked quietly so her voice wouldn't carry to the other customers.

The man paused at that.  ?I don't know who you're looking for ma'am.  But I'm very happy to say I haven't seen anyone like that.?  He shook his head.  ?This is a quiet town.  We've only got one youkai, and she's a little different from the rest.?

Renko frowned at the man's dismissal of youkai, but anything she might have said to Renko was interrupted by a commotion from outside.

Maribel turned to see a black haired woman in a white cape standing next to the well and pulling on the rope.  Two villagers carrying spears backed up by one with a rifle ran over to the woman.  ?Hey!  You can't just take water!?  The woman didn't seem to notice them, she just kept pulling on the rope.  She didn't even stop when one of the men prodded her with a spear.  ?Hey!  Listen to us!?

It didn't take magic powers to tell this was going to end messily the way things were going.  Maribel decided to change that.  She flipped out a packet of radiation medicine.  ?Room and food for three, plus whatever she drinks.?

The bartender snatched up the medicine, then bellowed out, ?It's okay, she's paid for!?  Then  he turned back to her and shook his head.  ?That was nice of you, but I don't think you should be making a habit of it.  Seems like a real good way to get fleeced.?

Renko just stood and sighed.  ?Well I guess we should check up on your new stray.  It was easier when you stuck to kittens you know.?

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The woman gave a sigh of relief as she slammed her glass back down on the table. "Phew!  I thought I was in real trouble.  Thanks you two."

"Don't worry about it," Maribel replied.  "It's important to help people out when they're in trouble."

Renko just sighed and shook her head.  Everything about the woman screamed stray, from her ragged cape, to her mismatched boots.  The woman didn't even have a full knapsack, just a pouch and a canteen. Renko wondered how the woman had survived this long.  "So how'd you end up here?"

"Unyuu?"  The woman looked confused.  "Uh...  Well I walked."  She thought for a little longer.  "I guess I'm lost."  She turned back to the two.  "Anyway I'm Utsuho Reiuji.  Hell crow.  Nice to meet you," she finished with a slight bow.

Renko nodded.  Well that explained how the woman was still alive. Underground youkai were resistant to radiation, and perfectly happy to scavenge corpses.

"Maribel Hearn, and this is my friend Renko Usami," Maribel replied. "If you want you can travel with us for a bit."

"Really?"  Utsuho smiled broadly.  "I can ride in that car with you?  Thank you, again!  Most people don't like traveling with youkai."

Maribel returned the smile.  "We don't have any problem with it, so long as you don't try to eat anyone who's alive."

"Don't worry.  The shrine maiden taught me that lesson long ago.  Dead people hurt you a whole lot less, and you can actually eat them."  Utsuho looked painfully serious.  Renko had to force down a laugh.

Renko nudged Maribel and whispered to her friend, "I don't suppose this is the powerful youkai Yumemi sent us after?"

Maribel shrugged.  "She is a youkai, but she's really weak.  I can barely sense any magic."

?Uh, I can hear you ya know.?  Maribel and Renko both winced at that.  It seemed their new stray had good ears at least.  Utsuho sighed and smoothed her cape.  ?But yeah, my youkai powers are pretty much gone.  I can't even shift to crow form.?  She frowned.  ?I'm not sure if that makes me better or worse off then the ones that got stuck in crow form.?

Renko sighed and started fanning herself with her hat.  ?I don't suppose you know any youkai that kept their powers??

Utsuho grew silent for a moment.  The youkai absently rubbed her collarbone, for a moment.  ?Yeah.  I know one or two.?  She looked back at Renko.  ?But they're really dangerous people.  And their powers can only hurt others.?

Renko had to ask, ?Where are they now??  She caught Maribel's worried look.  ?Sorry Mary, but this is the first info we've gotten.  We have to check it out.?

Maribel didn't look happy, but she nodded.

Utsuho shook her head.  ?It's a bad idea you two.  But the people you're looking for are south.?

Renko nodded.  ?Are you willing to travel with us there?  Or should we drop you off along the way??

?Unyuu....?  Utsuho thought long and hard.  ?We'll see when it comes up, right??

Maribel shook her head to clear it, then smiled again.  ?Well for now, we should stock up on supplies then find the inn.  You'll help carry right Utsuho??

?Sure thing!? the hell crow said with a wide grin.

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The inn wasn't as well furnished as the bar, though the walls were a lot more sturdy.  Apparently it doubled as a hospital, though the couple running the place assured them that they used different rooms for visitors and patients.  Given the general lack of travelers these days, Maribel believed them.

Still, even the plastic chairs and table were a nice change from the road.

Utsuho looked around the table.  ?Hm?  Five places... are you eating with us??

The inkeeper smiled and shook her head.  ?Ah no, we have two more guests who eat here though.  They should be by soon.?

Maribel blinked.  ?Who would that be??  She doubted most people had the goods to eat out even semi regularly.

The inkeeper's husband spoke up.  ?The scavengers.  We had a cockroach youkai show up about 4 months back to scavenge the ruins.?

?I'm a firefly!?

At that everyone turned to the door where two small dusty figures stood.  Both wore goggles, face scarves and ragged capes.  The taller one's dirty green hair and antennae marked which one was the youkai.

With a clang the firefly youkai put down a gas canister.  ?The week's rent and food.?

The innkeeper gave her chagrined husband an elbow, then picked up the gas canister.  ?Thank you Wriggle.  As you can see, we have other guests.  I hope you and Lin are fire with company.?

The shorter figure shook its head.  ?No problems here,? Wriggle replied.  The youkai started taking off the scavenger gear.

Lin turned out to be a young girl, probably about 7.  After introductions were passed around she plopped herself down right next to Utsuho, who proceeded to spend most of the meal doing her best to get the child to laugh.  And frequently succeeding.

Wriggle kept a paternal eye on the young girl in between inspecting all of the travelers.  Maribel inspected the youkai in return.  She caught Renko's questioning glance and shook her head.  Wriggle was even weaker then Utsuho was.

?So how'd you get here?? Wriggle asked.

?We drove in from the northern roads,? Maribel said.  ?Um, Utsuho just walked here, somehow.?

Wriggle raised an eyebrow at that.  ?You guys are all lucky then.  There are a lot of bandits in that area.  A couple of big gangs too.  They mostly spend their time abusing the little villages here in the mountains, but travelers tend to get picked off sooner or later.?

Renko smoothed her cloak.  ?Well, we aren't completely helpless.?

?I guess that's gotta be true,? Wriggle said.  ?Still, I've heard some gangs are led by some of the tougher youkai.  Bullets won't work on them.?  The firefly sighed.  ?Wish I kept that power...?

There was a hurried knocking on the door.  Everyone turned to see the bartender walk in and speak to the innkeeper and her husband in hushed whispers.  After a few moments the innkeeper walked over.  ?It seems someone got hurt trying to get some work finished before nightfall.  Don't worry yourselves.?

Maribel considered offering her first aid skills, but the doctor already had a kit in hand as he headed out.  There was no need for an amateur like herself to get in the man's way.  Instead she turned back to Wriggle.  ?So how did Lin here get involved in scavenging??

The little girl looked up at the sound of her name, and all of the table gave her a reassuring smile, Wriggle going so far as to pat her on the head.  She giggled and returned to trying to snatch a piece of bread from Utusho's hand.  ?She lost her family to one of those bandit groups, or at least that's the guess.  Lost her voice at the same time I'd guess....?  Wriggle smiled.  ?Fortunately I found her in the city.  She's a mutant, immune to radiation like me.  So I'm teaching her how to scavenge.  There's gonna be a market for that far longer then I'm likely to live, much less a human.?

?Hm....  Have you heard of any youkai who've kept their powers?  Or at least have powers above simple immunities and weak magic?? Renko asked.

The conversation halted temporarily as the innkeeper brought in a final serving of soup.

?Well some of the lycanthropes have kept their speed,? Wriggle said.  ?I've heard that vampires didn't lose anything, but well no one likes them anyway.?

Wriggle's eyes narrowed, ?Why are you so interested?  And how are you equipped so well?  I can tell your clothes were machine manufactured, and they haven't been repaired often enough for you to be professional wastelanders.  Where are you really from??

Maribel was surprised at how quickly they'd been seen through.  She hoped Wriggle was just particularly observant.  Unfortunately Utsuho and Lin were both now staring at her and Renko.  It was obvious part of their secret was out.

Renko sighed.  ?Alright, I don't want to go around advertising this, but there was a small university that missed the big boom.  That of course means jack squat normally, but one of the teachers there was one hundred percent mad scientist.  Pure insane genius.  Yumemi Okazaki is her name.  She managed to rebuild the whole ecosystem within 4 miles, and with that we've got something resembling civilization going.?

The three other girls were staring at them wide eyed at this point.  Renko checked to make sure the innkeeper wasn't listening in before continuing.  ?Of course we're losing tools faster then we can replace them, but she says that somewhere out there is a youkai who might be able to control radiation.  If we can find that person....?

Utsuho frowned.  ?That sounds like kinda a fool's quest.?  She yawned.  ?I mean there are a whole lotta youkai out there.?

Maribel yawned then nodded.  ?Yes.  But if we succeed....?

Wriggle yawned, then stood up suddenly, causing her chair to collapse to the floor.  ?Wait, why are we so sleepy....?

Maribel couldn't answer, because she was already slipping into darkness.

-------

Renko groaned as she woke up.  The ceiling above her was concrete and she wasn't on anything resembling a bed.

Then she remembered what happened and she sat upright.

She was sitting in what could only be considered a cell.  Her coat and all her guns were missing.  Maribel was muttering and stirring behind her, Wriggle was sitting back to the wall looking glum and Utsuho was snoring at the back of the room where the barred window was.

"I see the poison wore off," Wriggle said.

Renko groaned and rubbed her sore back.  "What the hell?  Do they normally drug visitors here?"

"I'm very sorry about this, but it's for the good of our village," came the bartender's voice from the door.  "Someone killed some of Zed's men, and he'll be coming here to demand reparations.  We'll try
to talk him down, but you have to understand that if that fails..."

Wriggle jumped up to face the door.  "Stop looking for excuses you old bastard!  You're selling us out because you're a coward!"

Renko on the other hand tried to keep a steady voice.  "I don't suppose you'd be smart about this and just let Mary and I take care of him?"

There was no response.  Apparently the man didn't intend to stick around.

Wriggle sat back down, while Renko moved to check that Mary was still okay.  Maribel opened her eyes as Renko shook her.  "Ugh.  They drugged us?"

"Yeah apparently they want us to comfort some local robber over the loss of his men," Renko tried to keep her voice light.  "You know anything about this 'Zed'?" she asked Wriggle.

Wriggle looked down on the ground.  "Some kinda youkai.  Usually runs with other youkai and mutants.  They say he kills anyone who crosses him, men, women or children."

Renko cursed.  "And this guy is dangerous enough that they grabbed you too, just in case he wanted a cute boy.  Wonderful."

"I'M A GIRL," Wriggle snapped.

Renko flushed.  "I'm sorry."

"You shouldn't make girls cry, Renko," Maribel said as she pulled herself up.  Mary frowned and rubbed her own sore spots.  "Do we know how much time we have?"

Wriggle shook her head.  "No clue.  They'll be here soon though.  No way the village got more then a day's warning."

"Right,"  Renko took a look at the still sleeping Utsuho, then to the window.  "So we have to get out of here fast."  She took a few experimental tugs at the bars.  Sadly they seemed very sturdy.  Next
she turned to the door.  The hinges were on the inside, but they looked fairly tough. There was no keyhole on this side of the door either, but she was sure the door was both locked and barred.

Behind her Utsuho yawned and stretched.  "Unyuu?"  The hell raven looked around.  "Is this our room?"

"Technically," Renko replied as she searched through her dress. "Maribel, you still have a file?"

"Yeah.  It looks like they didn't search me as much.  Probably because I wasn't carrying 30 pounds of weaponry."  Renko took the file Mary offered and started in on the hinges.

Utsuho looked around a bit more.  "There's no beds."

"That's because this is a cell, bird brain!" Wriggle snarled.

"Unyuu?" Utsho stood.  "A cell?  Why are we in a cell?"

"Because I haven't finished breaking us out," Renko replied.  It was best to keep positive in these kinds of situations.

Apparently Utsuho believed that as well.  "Oh!  Okay."  The hell raven looked out the window.  "Huh.  There are a lot more people outside.  More youkai too.  Oh and mutants."

Renko attempted to speed up her file work.  ?Great.  I don't suppose they look friendly.?

?It's hard to say,? replied Utsuho.  ?The humans seem to mostly be hiding behind cover.  The youkai seem to be laughing though.?  Even Utsuho wasn't dumb enough to consider that a good sign.

?Who looks to be the boss?? Renko asked to take her mind off the abrasions the file was giving her.

Utusho hummed in thought.  ?Oh!  I bet it's the werewolf up front!?

Wriggle groaned.  ?A werewolf?  No one in this town is gonna have silver weapons.?

Renko was about to reply when the cells inner window slid open.  Before Renko had time to react a key flew in through the window.  Then she heard footsteps running away.

Wriggle picked up the key and shook her head.  ?Damn it Lin, why didn't you run?  I told you that's the first thing you should do.?  There was no reproach in her voice, just frustration.

?It seems she's just too nice,? Maribel said with a faint smile.

Gunshots rang out from the square below and Utsuho sighed.  ?Looks like negotiations failed.?  Renko's heart started beating a little faster.

?Damn!?  Wriggle threw down the key.  ?Now we're all trapped inside, and the damn key doesn't work because there's no keyhole on this side.  Fuck!?  The firefly did a credible jump kick into the door, but it didn't even shudder.  She fell onto her back and yelped in pain.  Renko shook her head and went back to filing.

?Hey, you should be careful,? Utsuho chastised as she and Mary moved to help Wriggle stand.  ?You could have hurt yourself.?

?That doesn't really matter now does it?!? Wriggle yelled back.  ?While we're all trapped in here they're gonna shoot all the townsfolk, then Lin, then they'll find us and probably kill us for fun too!?

?They're gonna kill Lin?? Utsuho asked in a soft voice.  Renko sighed.  Surely the youkai couldn't be that naive.

?Well they might take her as a slave.?  Maribel shook her head sadly.  ?But most raiding bands don't have use for a child.?

?Is that so.?  Utsuho stood up, her head lowered.  Then she walked right up to Renko.  ?Step back please.?

The woman's voice was so different Renko found herself obeying instinctively.  She caught herself and started to ask why, when Utsuho lifted her right foot, the one with the larger boot, and kicked the door open with a painful screech of metal.

Renko could only stare as Utsuho walked down the hallway towards where the stairs should be.

Wriggle recovered a moment earlier and sped down the hallway as well.  However she made sure to peek into every window she could.  Five doors down she shouted out ?Aha!? then unlocked the door with the key.  Renko and Mary ran over.

Renko smiled at the site before her.  All their stuff was there, ready to be given to the bandit lord as tribute.  ?Good work!? she told Wriggle as grabbed her coat and hat.  Maribel had reacquired her rifle and seemed to be loaning Wriggle her pistol.  Renko's grin widened.  Now was the time to show the wasteland who was boss.  ?Give me covering fire, Mary,? she called out as she ran towards the window.

?Dammit.  Renko you idiot!? Mary yelled as Renko kicked out the glass window here then jumped through.

She landed perfectly, rolling on her shoulder like she was supposed to, then used the momentum to get to her feet.  As she rose she pulled out two normal pistols and fired them at two human bandits that were carrying guns.  They dropped quickly.

An oni started running towards her, but she ignored that for now.  First shot was a cold iron bullet to put a fae down, then another two lead bullets to take out a mutant.  Maribel finished off another mutant right before Renko whipped out one of her specials and fired a bean straight into the oni's screaming mouth.  The creature dropped to the ground, dead, the allergen having penetrated it's brain.

?Hold your fire or I swear I'll rip this girl in half!?

Renko whirled at the command then froze.  Standing among the remaining robbers was a massive werewolf, and in his hands he was holding the trembling body of Lin.

Renko relaxed, then drew a pistol faster then the eye could see.  ?This one's silver, 'Zed.'  Put the girl down and walk away or I'll shoot you in the face.?

One of the mutants next to Zed blinked then pointed at her.  ?B~Boss!  That's 'Wheel-Lock Renko!'  I heard from up north that she's got like fifty of those weird muzzle loaders, each designed to kill a different creature.?  The other bandits all seemed to take a half step back.

?How come you get the awesome name?? Maribel asked from the window.

Renko smiled sweetly.  ?Because I've got the better gimmick.?

?Ahahaha!  That's pretty impressive girl.?  Zed smirked and tightened his grip slightly.  ?But at this distance you gotta know you won't kill me fast enough to save this girl's life.?

Renko's smile faded.  The bastard was right.  She couldn't guarantee an instant kill, and werewolves could still fight even as they bled out.  But she couldn't put her gun down either.

They were at an impasse.

Then Renko heard the steady crunch of dirt as someone walked out next to her.  Renko was once again speechless as Utusho just walked steady past her towards the group of men, armed with absolutely nothing.

Zed stared at her incredulously.  ?What!  You think you're some kinda tough guy?  You think I won't kill this girl??

Utsuho slowly cracked her knuckles, then looked at the werewolf.

?Drop her.?

?You arrogant bitch!?  Four of the leading bandits, enraged at such casual defiance rushed forward with swords and axes raised.

?Ha!? Utsuho's foot moved in a blur as sent a roundhouse kick across the face of each man, then flipped over their heads to stand before the werewolf.

?What the hell?? Muttered one of the mutants rubbing his jaw.  Then a look of horror crossed the four bandits' faces.

?What?  ?What is this!?  ?It hurts!?

They all screamed as their heads bulged, then exploded as crimson bullets made of magic flew out.  Everyone stood in shocked silence for a moment.

?You bitch!  You killed my men.  For that the girl dies!? Zed roared.  Lin gave a brief scream.

?Uuaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhh!? Utsuho screamed to the heavens, and black wings ripped from beneath her clothes to unfurl into the air.  As the youkai's shirt frayed a terrifying sunburst scar was revealed on her collarbone.

?Yaaaa~at~at~at~at~at~at~at~at~at~at~at~at~at~tah!?  Utsuho's hands moved in a blur as she struck the werewolf repeatedly.  Each strike lifted the huge form off the ground fractionally.  Lin flew from the man's hands and fell with a happy cry into Utsuho's arms as the werewolf crashed to the ground.

?That's...?  Renko looked over to see Wriggle beside her.  ?I had heard some youkai had managed to keep their power alive through martial arts, but I never believed.  It's insane....  A martial art that allows the wielder to form danmaku inside the target, destroying them from the inside out.  A godly technique.?

The man sprung to his feat.  ?You bitch, I don't know what you did but-?

?Shinken Chichuu Tenteisei.? Utusho said flatly.  ?You're already dead.?

?Huh? Ugh!?  Zed looked shocked then pain seeped into his features.

Then everyone had to shield their eyes as a miniature sun ripped out of his stomach.  The man's screams peaked as the fireball started drawing the rest of his body in, then died as it finished consuming him and faded away.

For a long while everyone just stood there as Utsuho set Lin down then dusted the girl off.  Then the bandits turned as one and ran.

Utsuho didn't even turn around. ?Are you okay??

Lin nodded, then smiled widely.

Renko breathed a huge sigh of relief.  It looked like everything had worked out wonderfully.

Then she walked over to the bartender and placed her pistol behind his ear.  His eyes went very wide when she cocked the hammer.  ?We need to talk,? she said sweetly.

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The new band of five drove through the wastes southward.  Lin had insisted on following Wriggle and Utsuho, and no one had seemed keen to stop her.  They'd started out in high spirits, but as always, there were some difficulties.

?Dammit, if you fried the radio with an EMP blast off that stupid sun...?  Maribel ignored Renko's grousing and kept fiddling with the knobs.  Eventually though the rant turned to her, ?And I thought you said that bird didn't have any youkai powers.?

?Actually I don't.? Utsuho said sheepishly.  ?These are actually divine powers.  I picked them up from the Yatagarasu.?

Maribel gave the radio a light thump.  ?I still think we should head back now.  Utsuho has to be the person Yumemi was looking for.?

?Hm...  I kinda agree with you,? Renko admitted.  ?But since she apparently has business down south, we might as well find out about those other powerful youkai as well.?  Renko looked back at the three new travelers.  ?You all sure you're fine with going south??

Utusho nodded while Wriggle just kept fanning the sleeping Lin.  ?We don't have pressing business, but sticking around that town would be stupid.  A good scavenger knows when to get out.?

Suddenly the radio squawked and Maribel could see some signal in all the noise.  She started manipulating the boundary and sure enough....

?Hellllloooo Residents of the Japanese Wastelands!  This is Captain Minamitsu Murasa, sending music to walk the plank and sink right down to your waiting ears.  Satellite radio at its finest.?

?We've got a special bonus for all you people.  Someone downstairs managed to get through our 'phone lines', somehow, and beamed up about 5 million dollars worth of music.  Well 5 mil in old RIAA terms that is.  So here's some new oldies.  You can all thank Chiyuri for this little set of ACDC, as we head down the Highway to Hell!?

Renko chuckled as the first chords started up.  ?Well that's kinda foreboding.?

?Well, hell's not a bad place to be,? Utsuho said knowingly.

The three others chuckled at that, leaving Utsuho blinking.  ?Maybe they'll play that later,? Maribel offered.

?Hey!?  Wriggle pointed to an odd colored strip of ground in front of them.  ?I think that's a road!?

Maribel peered ahead.  ?I think she's right!?

Renko smiled.  ?Well then, let's get some real distance.?

Marible couldn't help relaxing as Renko switched gears and started roaring down the old road.  Things were once again looking up.

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Re: Weekly Writing Challenge! - Post-Apocalyptic Setting
« Reply #781 on: May 21, 2011, 04:42:26 AM »
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the ending feels too abrupt ahhh



?Just make sure you?re back by nightfall, okay??

?Yeeees.?

The door closes, and the two are left to set off on an evening excursion.  The sun just barely filtered through the smoky clouds overhead; Yuugi felt a cool wind shake the trees and the grass underfoot.  Everything looked a bit darker and felt cooler, and she could already smell rain in the air.  She?d have to move quickly if she wanted to get everything she wanted to do done, and the outdoors were no place to be at night, especially if it was going to storm.  Iku had predicted that, so Yuugi took no chances and wore a jacket.

The walk so far was silent, and the only sound was the wind and the crunching of dirt underfoot.  Only when her companion spoke was that silence broken.

?What did you need to do out here??

Yuugi glanced back at the smaller girl following her, staring at the claw hammer she was turning over in her hands.  Parsee had gotten so restless staying inside all winter that whenever Yuugi went out, she automatically dropped whatever she was doing and followed her out.

?We?re going to go bribe the garbage woman.?  Yuugi held up the basket she was carrying with her.  ?I made her dinner.  Cooked some pork, and then steamed some rice and vegetables.?

Parsee frowns.  ?How much meat did you use to make that??

?Relax, I didn?t use any of those rations.  I just went out and slaughtered a boar or something.?

?Oh.?  Parsee?s ears flickered, and it took Yuugi everything she had not to reach out and pull on them.  Parsee hated that.

Yuugi?s train of thought was interrupted by an acrid smell coming from up ahead.  She slowed down and stopped as the river came into view.  Even from where she was standing, the bitter, rotting smell of the murky water stung her nostrils, and her eyes teared up.  The river water was less like water and more like an acidic poison; she could see further down the bank the remains of a tree she had toppled the first time she was here.  She had thought that she could use it to create a makeshift bridge to cross, but lo and behold, toxic fumes rose up from the water and started to eat away at the wood.  It now looked as if something had taken a bite out of it from the water.

Parsee pulled her scarf over her nose and mouth.  Yuugi heard her gag a little.

?It was poisoned on purpose,? Yuugi explained.  ?There was some huge monster in there, y?know?  So they got the earth spiders to poison the water ?n kill it.?

?Well that worked out just perfectly.?  Parsee scowled at the water.  ?That?s such a waste of water.?

Yuugi bit her lip.  She didn?t want to think about it too much, but Parsee hit the nail on the head: this was yet another resource rendered unusable?

She sighed, trying to clear out her head.  Precious time was running out.

?Anyway, it?s not that bad of a cross.?  Yuugi gripped the basket tightly and started running towards the river.  When she was at the right distance from the water, she kicked off and leapt over it.  Almost immediately she felt the fumes rising from the water scald her throat, but she shook it off and landed gracefully on the other side.  She turned back to where Parsee was standing, frozen in place.  ?Come on!?

Parsee took a deep breath and ran forward, leaping into the air and flying over the river.  Upon landing on the other side of the river, she coughed.

?It burns,? she commented as the two started to walk away from the river.  Yuugi could only shrug.

Traversing the land beyond the river?and the oasis?felt like wandering through a wasteland.  There was much less plant growth here than there was back near the camp; instead, the landscape was scorched and dry.  Withered plants and clumps of grass grew from the cracks in the dirt, and the few trees that Yuugi and Parsee passed were leafless and dead.  At the other side of this plain was a grassier area, leading into a small cave.

The mere sight of a cave was enough to make both Yuugi and Parsee let their guards down, only for a flash of lightening to scare them back to their senses.

Parsee?s ears drooped, and she looked like she was regretting not having a jacket with her.  ?I?m never going to get used to that.?

?Same??

Little droplets of water started to splatter in the dirt.  The sound of falling water intensified as the drizzle slowly turned into a full-out rainstorm.  Yuugi heard a hissing sound in the distance, and when she looked back, she could see a cloud of steam rising from the river.  There was the sound of rain drops sizzling as it hit the cloud which only grew louder when a gust of wind blew more rain into it.

?Ahh, we took too looong,? Yuugi sighed as she pulled her hood over her head.  She could already feel the dirt turning to a gooey mush underneath her shoes.  She hugged the basket closer to her, so that the food inside wouldn?t become spoiled.  If they hurried into the cave, it might still be warm enough to be presentable.
Parsee scowled and pulled her scarf over her head in a fruitless attempt to keep her head dry.  ?Yeah.  Can we go in now??

With that, the two made a dash for the cave entrance, running as fast as they could to compensate for the time they spent standing in the rain.  The second they were underneath the shelter of the rock looming overhead, Yuugi skidded to a halt and set the basket down on a rock.  As she was checking the food, Parsee grabbed the hem of her skirt and started wringing water out of it.

?How?s the food?? Parsee asked as she peeled off her scarf.  Her clothing was plastered to her skin, and her hair to her forehead.  It was safe to say that she wasn?t going to be feeling warm any time soon, and she was already starting to shiver.

?Still looks warm.?  Yuugi glanced over at the shivering girl, who was sending water droplets dripping to the floor with each quake.  ?But you don?t.?  She slipped her rain jacket off and offered it to Parsee.  The outside was wet from the rain, but the inside was still warm.  ?Here.?

Parsee chattered out a ?thank you? and draped the jacket around her shoulders, drawing it tightly around her.

?So, shall we see the garbage woman now?? Yuugi suggested as she picked up the basket once again.  She started to walk down the tunnel.  The air here was stale and damp; her hands were already feeling clammy, and a sweat was breaking out over her brow.  Behind her, Parsee had taken off the jacket and was carrying it in her arms, her cheeks flushed.  As they proceeded further into the cave, the sound of the rain thundering mercilessly on the earth died down to a slow rumble, and then nothing.

There was a rather awkward silence, and to distract herself from it, Yuugi thought back to the time she lived underground.  The tunnel leading to the surface was vertical as opposed to this horizontal one, and it was drier and cooler, too.  It led to a cave that was a lot bigger, where there was even enough room for a small celestial body to fit in there?at least temporary.  Yuugi couldn?t help but grin wryly at the far-off memory.  So many things had happened since then, that incident had become washed up in a sea of events, some that were close to dwarfing it in severity.  At least that one didn?t cause half the underground to cave in on itself.
Yuugi shook her head.  She didn?t want to remember how the bridge looked after that.  At least someone was walking with her today.

Her train of thought was interrupted by Parsee speaking up.

?There?s a light up ahead.?

Yuugi blinked and looked in the indicated direction.  The cave walls towards the end of the tunnel were painted in a warm, orange glow, flickering and dancing on the stone.  As they got closer, she even heard crackling sounds, and upon taking a deep breath, smelled burning cherry wood.  If she didn?t know any better, she would have thought ?Home Sweet Home?.

In fact, it would have been a tempting thought if not for the cave?s sole occupant.

When Yuugi and Parsee finally reached their destination, they were greeted by the sight of a rotting structure jutting from the wall.  It was barely recognizable, but it was probably a house once.  The wood was covered with enough mold and fungi to make a killing off of selling it for potions.  Crates were piled around the house and spilling from it in disarray; some were split open, revealing piles of clothes and dusty old bottles.  From the gaping ceiling came a steady drip of water, collecting in a pool at one end of the cave and branching off into little streams flowing through holes in the rock.  It was a lot colder in here, and soon enough Parsee had put Yuugi?s jacket back on.

The light source that the two had seen earlier was in fact coming from the very center of the cave: there was a campfire set up, albeit sloppily.  A log had fallen from the little formation and was burning on its own, for example.  Yuugi also observed a ring of paper seals ringing the campfire, presumably to collect smoke.  That was too clever for the garbage woman.

?Impressive.?  Parsee surveyed her surroundings, her blank stare coming to a rest on the campfire in the center.  Yuugi also looked around, but for a different reason.

?Miyako,? she called out at length.

?Who?s that??

?The garbage lady,? Yuugi explained.  ?Miyako, are you here??

There were no sounds but the occasional drip of the water and the crackling of the fire, both of which echoed across the cave and gave it the illusion of being bigger than it actually was.  Yuugi turned to Parsee. 

?You can make yourself comfortable.  Miyako?s not gonna mind.?

Parsee nodded and shuffled towards the fire.  She took a seat, hugging her legs to her chest and sighing contently.

?I brought food!? Yuugi called out, and her voice bounced off the walls and created a rather satisfying echo.  Shouting seemed to work, because within moments, Yuugi heard a shuffling sound coming from the building.  A girl with glazed over eyes and a wan complexion was pushing her way through the crates, nearly tripping over her own two feet as she shambled forward.  Her blue-black hair and the seal taped to her forehead quivered with each step she took, and her shirt and skirt looked annoyingly dry and warm in comparison to the wet clothes Yuugi and Parsee were currently sporting.

Miyako Yoshika?s head jerked upwards when her eyes fell on Yuugi, and the blue cap on her head fell to the floor.

?Hello!  Um?Yuugi, you brought me food!?  She sucked a trail of saliva back into her mouth.

Yuugi held up the basket and grinned.  ?Yup.  Better than what you?ve been eating.  We?re here to get some supplies today.?

?Ohhh~?  Yoshika grinned.  ?What is it??

?Rice, pork, some vegetables,? Yuugi rattled off as she held out the basket for Yoshika to take.  The girl fumbled with it, weakly grasping at the handle.  When she finally got a firm grip on it, she tanked under the weight, and Yuugi heard a sickening snap.  Parsee looked up from the campfire, alarmed.

?Geh?!  Did one of your bones just snap in half or something??  Parsee?s ears flickered as she stared owl-eyed at Yoshika.  Yoshika stared right back as more drool started to drip from her mouth.

??Who are you??

?Answer the question!?

?That?s a weird name, but okay.  I?m going to dig in now.?  With a lot of difficulty and more snapping bones, Yoshika sat down on the stone floor and opened the basket.  ?Whatever it is you need, go ahead and take it.?

Yuugi stood up and started for the crates, but Parsee didn?t seem quite through with Yoshika yet.  Yuugi only heard bits and pieces of the attempted conversation as she headed over to the rotted house and started poking around for things to take.  There was some alcohol here that had probably been sitting for who knows how long?she was definitely taking a few bottles of that.  Aside from alcohol?s most obvious use, Yuugi could probably use it to start a fire.

There were also a lot of clothes, and some towels.  There were people back home that needed new outfits, and the girls at the radio tower were practically dressed in rags.  With that in mind, Yuugi picked out a few extra clothes that would fit smaller girls.  While she was at it, she grabbed a few towels.
It wasn?t long before she was joined by Parsee, who was starting to pick through the crates as well.  As she compared different tools to the hammer she was carrying around with her, she commented,

?I didn?t think there?d be this much loot in one place.  Better take a lot, huh??

Yuugi nodded.  ?I wanna bring the others here sometime, but it?s kind of??

Parsee?s ears flickered.  ?Kind of what??

?How?d that conversation go with Miyako back there??

Parsee looked back at the crates? contents.  ?She told me she?s a jiang shi or something.  I guess that explains why it sounds like someone?s snapping twigs every time she moves an arm.?  Parsee holds up a faded brown dress.  ?This is nice.?

?Kind of??  Yuugi trailed off again.  ?I?ll be right back.?  After finding a safe place to set her loot, she sprinted back to where Yoshika was eating near the campfire.

?Miyako.?

Yoshika looked up at Yuugi, her mouth full of food.  ?Hmrfph??

Yuugi sat down in front of Yoshika and crossed her legs.  ?How would you like to leave this cave??

Yoshika swallowed her food.  ?Eh??

?What I?m saying is, instead of isolating yourself like this, why don?t you come back with us?? Yuugi offered.  Yoshika stared at her blankly, opting to shove a chunk of meat into her mouth instead of answering immediately.  She chewed it slowly and carefully, and only when she had completely swallowed it did she answer.

?But I have a lot of food here.?  Yoshika looked back at the crates longingly.  ?Uhh?.?  She drooled for a bit until Yuugi poked some more meat into her mouth.  ?Uoh.?

?We can move all of it out,? Yuugi explained.  ?I can make you more food like what I brought you today, too.?  She paused.  ?Listen, you don?t have to leave today.  I?ll be back next week, and then we?ll see if you want to go then.?

Yoshika tilted her head to one side, and there was another cracking sound.  ?Uhhhhh??Yeah.?

?You want to go??

?Next week.?  Yoshika continued to shovel food into her mouth.

Yuugi couldn?t help but grin.  This was what she had come here for, aside from gathering supplies.  ?Great!  We?ll come pick you up next Saturday, and then move all your stuff out then.  It?ll be great, trust me.?  She went to stand up, but hesitated.  ?By the way?what time is it right now??

?Hrm?..Dunno.  Late??

Oh.

Yuugi felt her heart sink like a stone.  She could be wrong, but even a guess had to be taken seriously.  She swallowed.

?We?ll see you then.?  Yuugi stood up and started walking back to where Parsee was.  ?We?ve gotta get outta here right now, though.  Parsee and I.?

Yoshika nodded.  Just how many bones in her body had snapped then??  ?Bye,? she said, but her mouth was so full of food that it was hard to decipher what she was saying.

Yuugi ran back to where Parsee was stuffing some clothes and tools into a worn-out duffel bag.  ?Do you have your gas mask with you??

Parsee?s ears twitched and stood on end.  ?What??

?Do you??

?Yes, I know, but why??

?We?might have overstayed our visit,? Yuugi explained as she hastily grabbed what she had collected and started packing it up.  She would have to settle for wrapping it up in a blanket for now.  She glanced over at Parsee, who was patting her clothes down with a worried expression on her face.  She couldn?t have forgotten her gas mask...

Yuugi tied off the makeshift sack and reached for the pouch that was tied to her belt.  No one went into the wastelands without a gas mask.

?Here, use this.?

?Wha?no!  I?m already wearing your jacket, keep the gas mask!?

?So you wanna cough up black tar?  I?m not having my throat ripped out because I let you get sick!?

The two continued to argue for a few more minutes, while Yoshika enjoyed her meal.  In the end, Parsee reluctantly accepted the gas mask, but lended Yuugi her scarf.  At this point, they had to end the argument before it got too late to go home, and they left after gathering the loot and bidding Yoshika farewell.

In the wastelands, a thick sheet of rain obscured the surrounding area, turning the dirt below into a thick sludge.  If one were to look closely at the trees, however, one would be able to see a thin veil of fungi, and small white flowers growing out of the bark.  It was thankfully too wet for them release any spores, but even being within ten feet of one was a bad idea.  Yuugi started to wonder if giving up her gas mask was a bad idea after all, seeing as she was starting to cough and Parsee was so reluctant to wear it.  Still, it was too late to dwell on that now.

Upon reaching the river, Yuugi and Parsee were greeted by a wall of steam, rising from the water and letting off a sharp, foul scent.  The log that had fallen across the river was literally fizzing as it slowly evaporated in the steam.

Yuugi bit her lip, mostly to hold back another cough.  They?d have to take the long way around.  At this rate, they wouldn?t be back until morning.  There was really no choice but to start walking upstream until the ground sloped upwards, and the two flew up a hill that was now too muddy and slippery to fly on.  There were more trees up here, but there was also a rock formation that formed a roofed bridge over the river.  This rock was more resilient than wood, so it eroded more slowly.  From there, they just had to keep going until they saw the oasis.

Under the cover of the roofed bridge, Parsee and Yuugi temporarily shed the gas mask and scarf respectively, as the heat was suffocating.  Fortunately, the passageway wasn?t that long, and they were soon out in the open again.  The walk back from there was miserable; they were both soaking wet, and their baggage was weighing them down.  After what seemed like an eternity, the two finally saw the safe haven of lush, green grass and trees.  Feeling soft grass instead of slippery mud was a blessing, and they were finally in the presence of fresh air.  Up ahead was the house, with the doors and windows shut to protect it from the storm brewing outside.

The second the two made it in the house, they dropped their baggage and collapsed on the rug, exhausted.  Yuugi?s shoulders heaved every time she coughed, and she looked down at the scarf in her hands.

?Sorry, might need to wash this?? she murmured.

?Who cares, you sound like you inhaled some of the spores??  Parsee sat up and wrung her hands.  She looked guilty.  ?Where??

??have you two been??

Parsee?s ears flickered as she glanced down the hallway nervously at the girl standing there.  She stood perfectly still, gazing down at them with steely eyes.  She was still in her nightgown, and her hair wasn?t brushed, indicating that she had just woken up.  The silence was only broken by Yuugi coughing.

?I see you?ve had an interesting trip.?  Oh, she knew.  ?But before we discuss that?why don?t we do something about that cough of yours??

Both Yuugi and Parsee sighed in relief.  It was past nightfall, but they were home.

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Re: Weekly Writing Challenge! - Post-Apocalyptic Setting
« Reply #782 on: May 22, 2011, 03:08:31 AM »
Hooray, first WWC here! Actually, it's my first Touhou fanfic too. Hope you enjoy. :3

To set the mood, listen to this throughout (I find it's just perfect for the story).
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I sighed. This was where I wanted to be the least right now. Wet and shivering underneath a tree, used poorly as a roof full of meaningless holes. I held my signature broom above my head in an effort to cover myself, but it hardly served me any better. All I could do was pull my hat down closer.

Taking care not to get any Rain on it, I took out my mini Hakkero from my pack, which I started carrying around since the incident. It had hardly any mana left in it, and getting it caught in the Rain would mean it would have even less. I also took out a small piece of dry wood and placed it on the ground. Sticking my broom in the tree so that the bristles hung over the wood, I used a bit of mana from the Hakkero to start a tiny fire. I gladly welcomed the heat as I warmed my hands by the fire.

“Dammit, this is all I have,” I said as I pulled out a canister of beans from my pack. I heated the beans over the fire, waited for them to cool, and began eating grudgingly. There was barely enough food to satisfy my appetite. I kicked the empty can away with a clunk. It rolled away into the pouring Rain without any care. It would have rolled on forever if it wasn’t for the rubble that blocked its path and impeded its progress. In the end, it just froze in the downpour of never-ending water, never to move on its own again.

Because the last of the food was gone, I decided to make a quick run to the remains of the Human Village in an attempt to salvage supplies there. Sighing again, I threw the Hakkero into my pack. I stamped out the fire and broke the wood into smaller pieces, so that no one could tell there was someone there. As the fire went out, the area around me became dark. The clouds covered the sun; it hasn’t been out since the Rain began.

I dashed through the Rain, making sure that my pack was as dry as possible. The village was only a few minutes away, but the journey there felt eternal. I made the trip to village many times, each one as tense and risky as the last. The pouring of the Rain and the crunching of dead leaves beneath my feet blended together in a chaotic orchestra. It was not a sound I welcomed, for I had heard it for too long, and I drew my hat around my ears to try and drown it out.

At last, I stumbled upon the village, which was little more than the ruins of destroyed houses. Roofs were caved in, entire walls were torn down, and stones from the houses were scattered all across the village. Normally, this place would be lively with people gathered, but now, it was a deserted ghost town that hardly saw a soul. The Human Village is normally a happy and exciting place, but without anybody, it seemed to be depressed under the Rain.

Moving swiftly but carefully, I made my way to the usual houses I checked. I dared not spend more than a few minutes in a single area because other desperate humans and youkai who scavenge like me could ambush at any time. I first checked the shop closest to where I arrived, but it was completely out of supplies. From there, I just went down the block, trying to be as stealthy as possible, looking for anything I could use to help me: some dry food, water, a radio.

At last, I came across a house that didn’t seem like it had been scourged through yet. Like every other building, it was annihilated, but the food that remained in its stock was still untainted. I stuffed my pack with as much food as it could carry, so that I wouldn’t have to return for a while.

As I turned to leave, I heard a crack from the front door. Apparently, some rude idiot decided to pop in just as I was finished salvaging the place. I readied my broom in defense, because I had no energy to fight with danmaku, and slowly approached the door. But there was no one there.

What I shouldn’t have done was lower my guard. The next thing I knew, the attacker grabbed my neck from behind and threatened to choke me. I whisked around, extending my leg which caused him to trip and crash on the ground. As he scrambled to recover, I grabbed my pack, which I had left, and made a dash for the door. But just as I was about to escape, he grabbed my leg and I hit the floor with a thud. I was dizzy from landing head-first, but I managed to orient myself upright. As he was about to pounce on top of me I landed a solid kick in the stomach. As he flew in the air and landed painfully on the ground, I caught the gleam of knife; he was definitely intending to kill. Not wanting to be involved any further, I ran out the door, successfully this time, and tried to run as far away as possible.

I didn’t get very far. A sharp pain ran up my right leg each time I took a step. I hid behind a house, opposite of the direction of the rain so that I wouldn’t be caught in it, and sat gratefully down. Pulling up my skirt, there was a trickle of a deep red liquid down my leg. So he managed to hit me after all. Taking some of the fabric off of my skirt, I was able to bandage myself, though it wasn’t a very skillful job.

“Next on the shopping list: a first aid kit,” I whispered to myself as I finished the knot. I planned on venturing out again once it was safe, but I was exhausted after just a few minutes. Involuntarily, I slipped into a deep sleep, one that I was thankful for as it stopped the Rain from pounding against a dry lonely world…

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I didn’t stop running.

Even though I was kilometers away from my friends, even though the moon was probably beginning to rise in the sky, even though the rain kept falling and stinging my face, I didn’t stop running. I wanted to be anywhere, anywhere that wasn’t there. The branches of the trees in the Forest of Magic scraped against my clothing and me. I could barely look ahead as I shielded my face from the rain that fell.

I ran until I felt my lungs were close to bursting. Even then, I only slowed my pace down to a jog. Once I lost my way, I started to walk. After noticing that I had stumbled in unfamiliar scenery and that I might never find my way back, I began to have second thoughts.

“Ayayaya… You’re always so rash. Look at what wonderful situation you’ve gotten yourself into this time,” I spoke to myself. It was not as if I could relieve the situation like this, but it comforted me slightly. Slowly, I began to calm down and take note of where I was. “The Forest of Magic, that much is obvious,” I confirmed. But where in the forest? I had no idea how long I had been running, nor in what direction.

Eventually, I just gave up trying to find my location. Using a reporter’s intuition, I looked around to see if I could find a place to stay for the night. Along the way, I noticed a house, or rather, what was left of it. Among the ruins I discovered a few books, a smashed pot, and a box of fresh-looking mushrooms. Instinctively, I took out my camera and snapped photos of the remains, just in case.

The rain was still falling, and I was still walking. But I happened to be in luck when I came across the Human Village. Unfortunately, there didn’t seem to be any humans left, which was understandable considering the incident either wiped them out or caused them to flee. Stepping over stones and broken pieces of wood, I wandered around the central plaza. No one, not even any youkai, were around, making the place seem like a haunted mansion. Something like the Prismrivers’, but wetter and without any noise.

Around the corner of one of the buildings, I noticed a piece of clothing sticking out. As I neared it, it turned out that it belonged to a certain black-and-white magician who was sitting against the wall. Was she dead? “This is certainly a turn of events.” I pulled out my camera once more and started taking pictures. In case I could start publishing news again.

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Again, whether I wanted to or not, I dreamed about the incident that began all of this trouble.

Reimu and I going off to investigate a seemingly average problem.

Finding that fixing this would be a bit more difficult than we thought.

That idiot Reimu wanting to face this on her own. Even after my protests, she ended up flinging me to the ground.

Each of them using up all of their energy in a battle for Gensokyo. Their final spells colliding in an intense light making a loud…

Snap.

No… a snap wouldn’t be epic enough. It would have to be something loud like…
Click.

Okay, something’s interrupting my dream monologue here. Explosions don’t give off a simple “snap” and “click.”

I opened my eyes to find a lens staring at me, centimeters away from my face. Snap. A bright light blinded me. I swatted the light in front of me to find a girl’s face behind it, looking through the camera lens that used to be there.

“Marisa! You just ruined my shot. Wait… you’re alive? Drat, there goes my latest scoop,” a disappointed tengu complained. She put her camera in a pocket in her skirt. “I didn’t think there’d be anyone else here. Then again, that’d be underestimating you and your thieving skills.” She took a seat right next to me.

“Aya, what are you even doing here? There’s really no scoop to cover. Besides, it’s not like anyone reads your paper anyways,” I said.

“A lot of people happen to read the Bunbunmaru,” she said, clearly irritated. “In fact, you’re probably the only one I know that doesn’t. As for why I’m here,” She put a finger up to her lips, “that relates to top-secret tengu stuff.”

“You can be incredibly vague sometimes,” I sighed. I picked up my pack, but it was suspiciously light. In a panic, I opened it up and discovered most of its contents were gone. All that was left inside were two apples my mini-Hakkero. I thought about going back for a resupply. “I could use Aya as a human- err, tengu shield,” I whispered to myself.

“Marisa, I can hear you whispering to yourself.”

“You were supposed to hear that.”

“I- Wait, what?!”

“Kidding. Come on, let’s get out of here.” I picked up what was left of my groceries and headed back out into the Rain. There really wasn’t any use in going back since whoever was in the house is probably planning to camp there for the night. As far as I could see, the remaining houses in the village were ransacked before I could get to them. I took a few steps and heard Aya’s behind me. As I kept walking, I could constantly hear Aya’s behind me. I spun around. “Why are you following me?”

She shrugged. “It’s not like I have anything better to do.”

“Try leaving me alone?”

“I can’t go back to Youkai Mountain, if that’s what you mean. I don’t know why, but I can’t fly anymore. I’ve lost my danmaku and wind powers too.”

Oh right, she was still a youkai. “I know why. Follow me back to the forest.” As stealthily as I came, I ventured back into the forest, double-checking to make sure no one else was following us.

*********

Living in the forest is a lot harder than it looks. For one thing, it doesn’t work well in rain. Which is what’s always falling nowadays. I was shivering under the tree, but Marisa refused to start a fire. Even when I used my cute voice. Then again, nothing cute ever works on Marisa. So I sat there, shivering under a leaky tree, my notepad and pen out, but getting hopelessly wet. I eventually put them away because they wouldn’t be any use anymore.

Marisa sat across from me, though I could barely make out her figure in the dark. She was lucky; she had a giant magician’s hat that kept her head from getting wet. While my hair was getting soaked and in my face, Marisa’s was dry as a desert. The part that was under her hat, at least. She also had a broom, but she told me she couldn’t use that for flying either.

“You know Aya, you being a reporter and knowing all the facts, I’m surprised you didn’t know about this,” Marisa poked. I opened my mouth to protest, but she brushed it away. “Well, I wouldn’t expect a non-magician to know about these things anyways. It’s got a lot to do with magic. You do know about the incident that just happened, right?”

I nodded.

“Well, after the two final attacks hit each other, a massive amount of mana was absorbed. This mana, or magic energy, is what runs many of Gensokyo’s supernatural talents. Without it, you’re basically as useless as a regular human. For instance, many youkai can fly by harnessing this energy, whether they know it or not. Mana is also used to power danmaku and magic powers. That last battle utilized an intense amount of mana, in fact, nearly all of the mana in Gensokyo. Threatening to collapse due to the lack of mana, a natural counterbalance was activated. What resulted was the formation of antimana, which takes on the form of the Rain.

“However, this is hardly beneficial to anyone. The reason why it’s known as antimana is that it absorbs mana from whatever it touches. That’s why I can’t get this mini-Hakkero wet, because the Rain will suck whatever magic remains in it. It seems like it’s already done a number on you. That’s why you can’t seem to fly or use danmaku anymore. However, any spell cards that you have will work because have the ability to convert antimana into mana. How that works, I bothered to ask because antimana was never a problem until now. I only know about it from books and experiments.”

“I’m shocked you were smart enough to figure that out,” I said jokingly. But really, I was quite surprised. I had always assumed that I could fly out my own will. Without it, I felt a lot smaller and weaker.

“Hey, I’m not all about power,” Marisa retorted. “I do my fair share of reading and research too. I don’t blindly charge into battle.”

“Well, with all this talk about antimana and energy, I’m not surprised they’re escorting people out of Gensokyo.”

“They’re doing what?”

It was my turn to inform Marisa of something she didn’t know about. “You didn’t know? Some kappa claim to have found an exit where the Sanzu River lies. It’s apparently the weakest part of the Hakurei border, and they’ve managed to reach the outer world from there.”

“And how did you find this out?” Marisa asked.

“Let’s just say a little crow told me,” I winked.

She sighed. “You really need to NOT be vague every once in a while.”

********

I awoke with a start, before the explosions began again. It was much brighter now, though the Rain still fell and clouds still obscured the sun. Aya was asleep next to me, her breathing steady and regular. She seemed to be dreaming soundly. I suspected she had a long day yesterday; it wasn’t an easy journey from Youkai Mountain to the Human Village, especially on foot.

I stretched as far as I could under the tree, without waking Aya up. I looked disappointingly at my pack and the two apples that were inside. There wasn’t much hope in going back to the village without endangering our lives. And with this cut on my leg, I was going to be more vulnerable than before. Our only hope then was to go elsewhere for food and then get out of Gensokyo.

I glanced back at Aya, still fast asleep curled up by the tree. I never really spent a lot of time with Aya before. The only times I saw here were for brief moments when she tries to snap photos of Gensokyo's residents' panties, or when we're both invited to flower viewing events at Reimu's shrine. But at those, she spent more time with Reimu anyways. Maybe now that it was just the two of us, I could get to know Aya a little better.

What was I thinking? If I hardly saw Aya before, what made me think I would start caring about her now? Rather than dwell on it, I simply discounted it as me missing Reimu rather than trying to be friendly with Aya.

She stirred slightly, mumbling something in her sleep. "Mrf... Where's am I?" she said, still half-asleep.

This would be payback for surprising me yesterday. "Aya, don't you know what today is?" I whispered, so she would hear me in her dream.

"Unh... Who is today?"

"It's Gensokyo Cucumber Day."

"I luuuuuv cucumbers," she said dreamily with an odd smile on her face.

"So many cucumbers outside today. Look! They're even raining from the sky."

"All kinds of flavors..."

"Which one is your favorite?"

"I luuuuuuv the turtle-flavored cucumbers..."

"Really? There are a bunch outside. Why don't you run out and catch some?"

"Okay..." she giggled. Surprisingly, she picked herself up and walked out into the imaginary turtle cucumbers. Instead, she was met with a torrent of ice-cold Rain. "Wah!" she yelped. She hurried back under the safety of the tree. "What was that all about? I was having this crazy dream and the next thing I know I'm standing in the freezing rain!"

"No clue," I said innocently. "I was fast asleep and just noticed you in the Rain. I thought you were going to take a shower or something."

"What makes you think that? Ay... Now I'm soaked to the bone." She frantically took out her camera and breathed a sigh of relief when she found it still works.

"Suck it up; we're going to be getting wet anyways," I said as I placed the strap of the pack on my shoulder and took my broom in hand.

"Hmm? Where are we going?" Aya questioned. But I was already out walking away in the Rain. "W- Wait for me!"

********

"Are we there yet?"

"No."

"You haven't even told me where we're going!"

From the ground, the Forest of Magic is much larger than it appears from the sky. After walking for hours, I felt like we were still trapped in the same area. All of the trees looked exactly the same in every direction. I wished I could just soar over the treetops and find my way out of here.

Actually, that was the least of my worries right now. My stomach growled for food. "Gosh, I'm starving. For some reason, I'm really craving a cucumber."

"Isn't that a surprise," Marisa snickered ahead of me. "Here." She reached into her little bag and pulled out a green circular object. She threw it behind her.

"What is it?" I asked, catching it. "This doesn't look like any cucumber I've ever seen."

Marisa's facepalm was so loud, I could hear it over the rain. "That's because it isn't. It's an apple. What, you haven't heard of one?"

I shook my head. "Nope. What's it like?"

"Why don't you try it and find out?"

"Because it might be one of your poisonous mushrooms."

"I assure you, there is nothing poisonous about an apple. Everything but the seeds. Don't eat those."

I didn't know whether to trust her or not, but I was starving so I took a bite anyways. Initially, its sour taste made me want to spit it out, but after a while, it became sweet. Apples were certainly an interesting fruit. I finished it, leaving behind the seeds, and tossed them on the ground. I wondered if anything would grow where I threw them, even after Gensokyo collapsed.

Marisa must've heard me crunching loudly on the apple because she took another one out of her bag and began eating it herself. She had a different way of eating. Instead of savoring each bite, she took a bite and swallowed it nearly whole. I figured she was really hungry, but couldn't she still take the time to at least taste it?

I shook my head. I didn't even know why I was studying her this closely. It's probably because I was too used to the reporter's life and its need for details.

"Are we there yet?"

"How many times are you going to ask that?" Marisa answered between two voracious bites.

"As long as it takes for you to tell me where we're going."

She pointed ahead of her. "Does that answer your question?"

In front was a rusty gate, bent over after one of its hinges were broken. It was unguarded; usually, someone stood here to watch for unwelcome guests. Through the rain, the silhouette of the once proud Scarlet Devil Mansion stood eerily like an emaciated ghost. As we walked closer, I could make out the details of the ruins. It was hardly recognizable as the mansion it used to be. Like the buildings of the Human Village, many of the walls were completely torn down or barely standing. A roof no longer existed in many places. In fact, the entire second floor of the mansion was destroyed. The section that suffered the least amount of damage was the library, due to some of the magic wards placed around it.

"Here we are, the Scarlet Devil Mansion," Marisa said. "Here, we'll stock up on some food and books. There are some books from Patchouli's library that I want to take with me before we leave Gensokyo."

"If you wanted to leave Gensokyo, then we should be heading in the other direction, towards the Sanzu River."

"Yes, but if I told you that, we never would have made it here."

"We don't really have time to be here. The Hakurei border could collapse at any minute."

"What do you mean by that?"

"Didn't I tell you before? Apparently, rain wasn't the only thing that explosion caused. Aside from causing severe damage to every house in Gensokyo, it also made the border around it severely weak. The kappas found out that it will collapse, causing Gensokyo to disappear from existence."

A brief moment of panic flashed on Marisa's face before returning back to composed. "Then we should be moving a bit faster. I'll head to the library; you go to the kitchen for food."

"Roger that!"

**********

“Hey Patchy, you there?” I called out into the darkness of the library. Using my Hakkero, I lit a candle that I found nearby. It provided a small amount of light, but much of the library remained in the dark.

Amazingly, the library only suffered structural damage. As I walked around, I noticed that most of the interior was not disturbed. Some of the books that I had wanted to take with me were gone from the shelves, suggesting that Patchy and Koakuma had already taken off with half of the library. Even the entire section containing waterproof books was gone. That was a bit of a shame, since I could’ve read them in the Rain. However, I did find a few books that interested me, and I tossed them into my pack. It was a shame that most of these books were going to waste; Patchy would’ve loved to keep them all. I found a book that I thought she would’ve liked, but didn’t take with her, and put that in my pack as well. I saved it in case I met her in the outside world, by some off chance.

I finished packing away the books I wanted as Aya came running up to me. Her hands were empty. “What, no food?”

She shook her head. “No, none at all. The kitchen is completely bare.”

Dang. Either the residents of the mansion took the food with them, wherever they went, or some thieves stole the food before we arrived. “So now what are we going to do?” Aya asked.

“Well, I have the books I want all ready to go. Since there’s no food, we can’t do anything about that but get to the Sanzu River as quickly as we can.” Shouldering my pack, I headed back out in the Rain.

*********

Tagging behind Marisa again, I left the Scarlet Devil Mansion. Not wanting to forget about the place, I pulled out my camera and took a picture of the mansion. The photo came out slightly blurry due to the rain, but the general idea of the mansion was there.

As we passed by the Misty Lake, I could hear the sound of the rain on the lake’s surface. Through the mist, I could spot two figures flying above the lake, which I assumed to be fairies. But oddly enough, they didn’t seem to be affected by the rain’s magic-absorbing properties.

“Marisa, how come the fairies can still fly?” I asked.

“Fairies just don’t seem to be affected by the Rain. It’s like their bodies have some sort of protective shielding. But it doesn’t matter much anyways. Most of them are too simple-minded to figure out what’s happening in Gensokyo anyways. The ones that survived the blast are probably going about their daily lives like they normally would. And that would include playing little pranks on each other. Just watch out and make sure you don’t get caught in a fairy’s- Ack!”

Marisa was cut off as she slipped and flew upwards. I thought for a moment that she got her flying powers back, but she was upside-down. Attached to her ankle was a rope hanging from a tree branch above. Because of gravity, her hat fell off and her skirt came up.

“Aya! Don’t take pictures!” Marisa protested.

“But why not?” I said, as the camera clicked several times. “I might never get a chance like this again.”

“J- Just get me down from here,” Marisa said, flustered. 

“Wait.” I hopped over to where Marisa was hanging. Turning the camera around, I pointed the lens at the two of us. I gave a big smile and snapped a picture. The resulting photo showed me with a wide grin next to Marisa’s upside-down angry face.

“Alright, I’m satisfied.” I untied the rope where her ankle hung and she fell into the muddy ground. She managed to land her head into her hat, so her face didn’t get dirty. But the rest of her clothing was a dark brown of mud. I couldn’t help but burst out laughing. “Wow, you’re a complete wreck.”

She glared at me. “Not. A. Word.”

“Fine, fine.” I put the camera back in my pocket. These pictures were Bunbunmaru gold. They were going to be published the minute I got to the outside world.

********

The trip to Sanzu River from the Scarlet Devil Mansion took a little more than a day. Leaving the home that I lived in for a majority of my life was difficult to do, but I kept myself optimistic by looking into the future. I wondered at what kinds of marvels would be a part of the outside world. Residents of Gensokyo, such as the kappas and Yukari, were always showing off the latest from the outside world. They ranged from boxes that talked to containers that held food without spilling. If this was really how the outside world was like, then I could just imagine what other kinds of technology they had. In fact, they might have known a great deal more about magic than Patchy, Alice, and me combined.

Even Aya was excited about the outside world. She wouldn’t stop talking about systems called television and the Internet. She claimed that they could get news across the world in a matter of minutes. I couldn’t fathom how that was possible, unless they had an incredibly fast flier to do so. They would have to fly faster than Aya could at top speed, all while delivering the news at the same time. I figured she was probably just misinformed by whoever told her these things.

As day turned into night, we camped in a cave in a hill. Behind the hill was the Sanzu River, but it would be at least another half a day before we would reach the border. Half a day until a new life and a new beginning for all of us.

Out of sheer luck, there happened to be some unused firewood in the cave. I figured someone used the cave before and left the remaining firewood here. Gratefully, I put the wood in a pile and used a little energy from the Hakkero to make a spark. The minute amount of energy that remained would be saved for emergencies only.

Aya and I sat side-by-side, looking into the flames of the fire. I tried to warm myself after today’s fall into the mud. Most of it was caked on to my clothing, so I’d have to get a change of clothes once I got to the outside world. But right now, that was the least of my thoughts. I had a more pressing matter I wanted to address.

“Aya,” I said.

“Hmm?” She looked up from the fire. The glow of the flames illuminated only half of her face, leaving the other half dark.

“What were you doing in the Human Village the other day?” She had said “top-secret tengu stuff” before, but I didn’t buy into that. There didn’t seem to be any opportunity for me to press into the matter except for now.

“Oh, that. Well, I guess it’s been long enough. I might as well tell you.” I didn’t think Aya had much to hide. She looked back towards the fire and recounted her story. “It was moments after the incident had been resolved. All of us tengu and kappa fled to the base of the mountain. We didn’t have anywhere to go and many of us were frightened. The shock from the blast killed many of our friends and family, so we didn’t know what to do. Eventually, everyone decided that it would be best if we restarted our lives at the base of the mountain.

“Things went well for a time. Two diverse communities, kappa and tengu, living together. We helped each other rebuild houses, gather food, and entertain the children. It really seemed like life would return to normal. Believe it or not, this peace only lasted a few days. When the rain started to fall, food suddenly became scarce. Many became hungry and greedy. Inevitably, the small peaceful community plunged into chaos. No one was safe anywhere. If you had food, then you were targeted by everyone. Nobody cared about order anymore; it was survival of the fittest. They even resorted to inhumane actions like mob thefts and murders just to survive another day. Before my eyes, I saw two young…” Aya started to tear up at the thought. She closed her eyes and tears streamed down her cheeks and onto her soiled skirt. I couldn’t stand to see her like this, so I tried wiping away the tears from her eyes. She gave a weak smile at me. I felt terribly guilty for making her suffer from my question. I told her to not continue, yet she still went on.

“Two young kappa stabbed by a tengu because they each had half a loaf of bread.” Aya’s voice broke through sobs. “And from there… so many more, even friends, were killed. I couldn’t take such a world anymore. So in the middle of the night, I fled. I found I couldn’t fly anymore, so I had to run from the village. I felt that if I didn’t escape as quickly as possible, I would be sucked into that horrible lifestyle. But when I met you in the village,” Aya turned to me. “I felt relieved. I knew I could trust you to not act brutally like everyone else did. And I know that we haven’t gotten to know each other much before, but throughout our journey here, being with you let me forget about what happened.”

 It wasn’t like Aya to be all soft and emotional. I even knew that before when we briefly talked to each other. Whatever happened must’ve been crazy to disturb even her that much. But even so, I knew that I had to be her comfort. If the same thing had happened to someone like Reimu or Alice, I would do the same thing with them.

I put an arm around her shoulder. “And that journey is nearly at an end,” I said. “Just think, once we get to the outside world, you can forget all about what happened here and start a brand new life. If you wanted, you can even start a newspaper company again. Maybe I’ll even help you run it.”

“That doesn’t sound like a bad idea,” Aya said in a more cheerful mood. “I can write up all the stories and you can be the delivery boy.”

“Hey, maybe I want to try and write up some stories on my own.”

“You don’t have any experience though. You don’t even read my paper now!”

“I could learn. After all, we’re going to be running this thing together. It’s only natural that we share the work. And the name, the name could be ‘Marisaya News’.”

“That’s a terrible name! And why do you get to be first?”

“Because I came up with it. And I’m a harder worker too.”

“Don’t joke around. The most work I’ve seen you do is pour sake from a bottle at Reimu’s flower viewing parties.”

“Hey, it’s better than having a fetish for undergarments.”

And so we poked at each other throughout the night, pushing away our troubles. Aya eventually fell asleep, still in my arm. I smiled at her, as if she could still see me. “We’ll make this dream a reality,” I whispered. “And we’ll never have to be sad again.”

*******

I had a terrible dream that night, despite the fun Marisa and I had. I was back in the village again, full of kappa and tengu wanting blood. The sky was completely black. Even as lightning flashed from it, no part of the sky was illuminated. It was as if someone had taken all of the stars and the moon from the night sky and replaced them with lightning bolts.

One bolt struck a nearby house and it instantly caught on fire. The flames jumped from one house to the next, and I was quickly surrounded by the orange glow. I looked for a way to escape, but there were none. The intense fire closed in, threatening to swallow me in. I started to panic, as there was no way out, nothing but the harsh flames.

I started to lose hope, but in the fire, I could see a familiar figure. It was Marisa, standing in the fire but not getting burned. She extended an arm towards me so that I could escape. I tried to run to grab her outstretched hand, but I found myself getting weaker with each step. I was only meters away from getting to her, but I couldn’t move very well. When I thought I would be able to reach her, my body gave up and I collapsed. I could no longer see Marisa, only the wall of fire closing in on me.

*********

Aya had a high fever the following day.

She seemed to be struggling in her sleep. When she finally woke up, she kept going on about a terrible nightmare she had. I tried to comfort her by saying it was only an illusion and that none of it happened. I reminded her that today was the day we were going to be free and make a name for ourselves. She seemed to be cheerful at the idea, but she was still shaken up after the dream.

I didn’t bother to put out the embers that remained after the fire, because I figured that someone else could use them if they ever passed by. I made sure I had my mini-Hakkero with me and shouldered my pack. Aya was weak from the fever, so I supported her as she walked. This would mean we would reach the border later, but we could still make it before the end of the day.

The Rain still fell as relentlessly as ever. The path to the river was uphill, so the journey up took more energy than the journey to the cave. The road, or rather what was left of it, was slippery, and so Aya would constantly fall in her weakened state. I patiently helped her up every time. But I had a sense of urgency when her falls became more and more frequent as we neared the Sanzu River.

At last, dirty and worn out, we had arrived. The river was so immense that the other side couldn’t be seen in the Rain. Its length stretched out endlessly to either side. The Rain caused waves in the water which constantly interfered with one another.

Komachi, who normally ferried the dead to Higan from this river, was nowhere to be seen, and neither was her boat. Instead, hundreds of youkai and humans lined up at the bank. Most of them weren’t dead, that much I was sure of. They seemed to be waiting for a way to get across and into the outside world. But no one found a way to do it yet. Makeshift shelters lined along the hill the river was next to as they all waited for their salvation.

Out of the many faces that stood along the bank, one was familiar to me. “Nitori!” I called out. The blue-haired kappa turned around and spotted Aya and me. She waved and bounded over to where we stood, a little ways from the edge of the river.

“Marisa! I never thought I would see you here.” She looked at the pale Aya. “You don’t look so good…”

“Thank you for pointing that out, Kappa Obvious,” Aya retorted weakly.

“Anyways,” I said, “What’s everyone standing out here for? Isn’t there a way to get to the outside world from here?”

“Oh, you’ve heard about that,” Nitori said dryly. The initial sparkle in her eyes gradually faded. “Well, if you want the truth, there is no way out. The border here is as solid as it is throughout the rest of Gensokyo.”

“But why…” I started.

“Why would we pass around such lies? Because they needed hope,” Nitori pointed at the mass of youkai and humans standing at the bank of the river. “You see, we kappa and tengu have been living together, but it has been a living hell. Some of us kappa got together to try and resolve the issue. We believed that if everyone came together for a common goal, escaping Gensokyo, then the fighting would stop. So we told them there was a break in the border by the Sanzu River. We thought that the border collapse would happen sooner and that we could all die happily together…”

“Wait, the collapsing of the Hakurei border is still real?” Aya asked.

“That is one of the few truths to our lie. Ever since Reimu perished, the Hakurei border has been extremely unstable. According to some of the kappas’ equipment, it’s threatening to collapse on Gensokyo. When, not if, that happens, anyone in the area the border takes up will instantly disappear from existence.”

“So there’s nothing we can do to save ourselves?” I asked for confirmation.

“Nothing we know of,” Nitori answered. “The only two plausible ways out of Gensokyo are through Yukari and Reimu’s temple. The temple was destroyed as a result of the blast. And Yukari was selfish enough to transport only herself and her two shikigamis out. So now we’re all stuck here with nothing to do until the end of time.”

I couldn’t believe it. All this time, we were chasing an unobtainable goal. The entire trip here was just a waste. And now here we were, hopeless and lost as we wait for the inevitable to happen.

I sighed. “Any chance one of these little shelters are open for us?”

Nitori nodded. She led us higher up to a shelter that overlooked the river. Even from this height, the other side of the river couldn’t be seen. The shelter wasn’t much more than a roof of leaves supported by a few sticks, but it kept the Rain out. I helped Aya rest against the one wall of the shelter, then put my pack down. I sat on Aya’s right. Nitori left saying she had to make sure everyone else was comfortable.

I felt Aya’s forehead again. It was much hotter than before, since we’ve been standing out in the rain for the past several hours. She also seemed much weaker and her breathing much faster.

“Don’t worry Aya,” I said in a shaky voice, to comfort her as much as comfort myself. “There has to be another way out, you’ll see. Even if I have to Master Spark it into the border.”

“It doesn’t seem like we can have our own newspaper anymore…” Aya said faintly. With each passing breath, she grew quieter.

“Now wait a minute,” I said softly. I picked up her hand and held it in mine. They were strangely cold, even though the rest of her was hot. “Who said we can’t do that? Just because you’re a tengu and I’m a human doesn’t mean…”

“It’s not that. If I let you write something, you’ll cause the whole newspaper to fall.” She gave a small smile.

“Like I said, I could learn. Why don’t you give me a few pointers?”

“What do… you want to know?”

“Anything, anything at all. Just don’t stop talking…” I gripped her hands tighter.

“Well… first thing that goes into an article… is inspiration…” She was fading away, right before my very eyes. I refused to let that happen, so long as I was here.

“Go on, go on,” I prompted her.

“And secondly… always pursue the truth… even if you have to… exaggerate it a bit…”

“Pursue the truth…” I repeated, as if I were taking notes.

“And Marisa…”

“Aya?” I looked right into her eyes. They were devoid of any strength, any sparkle that she would have if she was really covering a news piece.

“This won’t sound like a reporter… but I had so much fun… in the past couple days…”

“Aya, don’t talk like that. You’re going to make me think…” I tried to smile, but the tears streaming down my face gave my feelings away.

“And who knows… we could’ve… been more than friends…”

“Please, don’t…” I held her hands even tighter.

“Marisa… thank you…” She closed her eyes, and drew one final breath.

“Th- This can’t…” I stammered. I still held Aya’s hand, believing that warmth would flow through it again. But nothing happened. Aya’s body froze, with a final lingering smile on her lips. I had spent only a short time with her, but I felt like I was always this close to her. In the time we spent, we poked at each other and had fun, but I never knew that she would be gone so quickly. I let her hand go, letting it fall to the cold floor.

Taking her camera from her pocket, I turned it around so that the lens was facing just me. I mustered the best smile that I could and clicked the button. Snap. A replica of me came out of it. I took the photo and swapped it for the ones she had been storing in her skirt. I came across the one she took with me hanging upside-down and her wide smile next to me.

I ripped it in half.

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Author comments:
Spoiler:
I hope these don't affect my score.
The first thing I thought of when I heard Post-Apocalypse was Planetarian, except the apocalypse this time is what happens when two Last Spells come together. For those of you that have played the VN before, you'll recognize the Rain, though I added my own twist to it.
I apologize for the overuse of drama, probably due to the fact that's all the anime I watch. :derp: If you see some of the other parts, humor, action, etc., you can see that they're not written nearly as well as the dramatic scenes.
I also apologize for the apparent MarisaxAya shipping (this isn't even mainstream for all I know). Truth is, I originally thought about Marisa being alone, but figured that would be too boring. I wanted a partner for her, but didn't want another MarisaxAlice story. Aya, for some reason, was the first thing to pop in my head. I realized halfway through that the story could work just as well with Nitori, but it was too late to change it. :(
The whole reason why I introduce shipping in the first place isn't because I support it, but it helps increase the catharsis, or remorse, at the end. If that's what it did, then it did its job.
Lastly, I apologize for some parts seeming OOC. Like I said, this is my first Touhou fanfic, so I didn't know the definite personalities of each the characters. Marisa is probably not as emotional as she is, neither is Aya.
Well, this'll be all negative except for this last statement. I had a lot of fun writing this, and I hope I can improve in future WWCs.
EDIT: This wasn't based off of Sankako's story at all I swear. :V
« Last Edit: May 22, 2011, 03:14:42 AM by Yuyuko Yakumo »
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Re: Weekly Writing Challenge! - Post-Apocalyptic Setting
« Reply #783 on: May 22, 2011, 03:31:39 AM »
Right, so here's my entry. This one ended up being heavily based on the game Nier, as should be quite obvious to anyone who's played it (any to anyone who clicks on the music links, as all but one of them are for tracks from the game).
 
Also, I thought I'd give feedback on the other stories, since i want it so much, but I've been asked to hold off on posting it until after submissions have closed. I'm still writing them up as I read the stories, though, so that I won't feel intimidated if there ends up being a lot of entries, and I would suggest that anyone with similar worries do the same thing.
 
Anyways, here we go:
 
 
 
"They're coming."
 
"Of course they are," Nue said. "Damn. I hate these wastes of time."
 
"If we don't take them out, they'll reach the village. Would you rather allow them to do that?"
 
"Let someone else protect the village. I have my own priorities. You know that, Yuugi."
 
"Yeah," Yuugi said, "I know. And I can't blame you for it. But Keine's dead and Mokou's gone missing now, too. And Suika's left to look for her. So the village needs us to protect it right now. And she wouldn't want you to abandon the village, you know that."
 
"Yeah, I know. That's the only reason I'm still here."
 
"Do not feel as though you're stuck here. You may leave whenever you want."
 
Nue and Yuugi turned to face the speaker. "Aine," Yuugi said, "you know we can't do that."
 
"Yes, you can," Heida no Aine said. "And now you can do it without worrying about the village. We've found Alice and Marisa; they should be here any time-" She was interrupted by the sight of a large explosion. "Well, looks like they're here."
 
"Marisa's more likely to destroy this place than they are," Yuugi remarked.
 
"We'll make sure she only fights outside the village. Alice can handle any that get past Marisa. You don't have to stay, Nue. I understand. Everyone here understands."
 
"Do we even have a destination?" Yuugi asked. "Or are we just going to wander aimlessly some more?"
 
"That's the other thing," Aine said. "I looked into things as you asked, Nue, and I think I've found something."
 
"Excellent," Nue said. "What is it?"
 
"A location. Both the first and the last place you would expect. And well hidden, given which location we're talking about."
 
"Okay, Aine," Nue said, "I know you like your riddles, but give us a straight answer here. What 'location' are we talking about?"
 
"One that's nearby," Aine said. "The Temple of Myouren."
 
 




 
Nobody knows just what it is that happened a hundred years ago-nobody still alive, at least. All that is known is that ever since it happened, the world has been declining. Fertile land is becoming more and more scarce. Livestock yields are dropping. Disease is rampant. There is little game to hunt. And to make things worse, vicious, bloodthirsty, mindless youkai wander the land, no longer people but monsters. What people remain gather in the remaining small settlements in desperation. The end has never felt so close.


 
But I don't care.
 
The woman I love was lost five years ago, taken by a mysterious figure during a sudden attack on the village. This thing seemed to be in charge of the monsters, and was thus given the name of 'Beastmaster'. It and its beasts attacked the village, took her, and left. Since that day, I have spent my life searching for her. I know Byakuren is not dead; she cannot die, as over a thousand years ago, she found a way to make herself immortal using the dark energies of Makai. So she is not dead. But she is gone, taken by the Beastmaster, and I do not know where she is.
 
My only companion in my quest is the oni, Yuugi Hoshiguma, one of the few who managed to escape the underground when the barriers failed and the fires of the Blazing Hell incinerated the entire area. The barriers were destroyed by the beasts, and Yuugi seeks vengeance, though that is not her only motive; she also desires to prevent such things from happening again.
 
But I don't care.
 
The woman I love is out there somewhere, and I will find her. And anyone in my way must stand aside or be stricken down.
 
 
 


 
The Temple of Myouren was once a grand structure, built with the aid of gods from the basis of a flying ship. Now, it was just as ruined as everything else. Nue and Yuugi had been to the area many times before, and had found nothing. But if Aine was correct, there actually was something here. And so the pair had once again returned to the ruined temple, this time with another accompanying them.

 
"You really shouldn't expect much," Nazrin said. "I can't do much when 'something's hidden here' is all the information I have."
 
"But you have a lot more experience at this sort of thing than either of us," Nue said, "and given that we've been spending the last five years doing it, that says something. That's why you're here; even without your abilities, you're far better at this sort of thing than we are."
 
"Well, maybe."
 
"Most certainly," Nue said. "If there really is something here, then Yuugi and I have missed it. Hopefully, you can succeed where we've failed. Now come on, let's get looking."

 



 
I remember well how Byakuren and I first met. Out of fear, humans had sealed her away in Makai, where she had remained for a thousand years while her disciples were trapped underground. But then that hell-raven gained the power of Yatagarasu, and as a side-effect, they were blasted free from their seal. They began gathering the scattered fragments of a structure called the 'Soaring Vault', which were required to break the seal and release Hijiri.

 
At the time, I did not know their purpose. I knew only that they were gathering these scattered objects. That was during my more mischievous days, and I decided to have a little fun. I placed Seeds of Non-Identification on as many of them as I could. What the seeds do is change how things look to match the expectations of those who are seeing them. Byakuren's disciples knew what the fragments were, so the seeds did not affect them, but others saw different things. In particular, many saw the objects as UFOs, which I found amusing given my existing fondness for those-I've even developed a means to form and utilize them for various purposes, including battle. Anyways, curiosity drove several people to investigate, but only three made any real progress, managing to get onto the disciples' flying ship, followed, of course, by myself.
 
I did, of course, get in the way of their investigations, cooperating with the inevitably-present fairies to launch attacks more coordinated than usual. I did reward them when they defeated my assault; a game's no fun without a prize, after all. I gave them some behind-the scenes assistance in moving through the rest of the ship.
 
Anyways, to cut to the point, these three eventually reached the seal and were talked into cooperating with the effort to break the seal. And Byakuren, it turned out, was an unwaveringly kind individual who desired to aid anyone in need, human or youkai. In fact, her willingness to assist youkai was part of the reason she was sealed away; humans of that time were much more fearful and hating of us than they were by the time she was released.
 
That incident marked the beginning of a major change for me. I felt guilty for interfering with what turned out to be a benevolent effort, and even more so when Byakuren offered me assistance despite knowing of my actions. I moved into the temple as soon as it was completed and began assisting Byakuren in her efforts. It was the beginning of a relationship that would eventually become love.
 
 
 


 
"Monsters," Yuugi said. "Figures."

 
"There are always monsters," Nue said. "You should really be used to that by now."
 
"That's all well and good for you," Nazrin said, "but I'm not much good in a fight."
 
"Keep looking. Yuugi and I will handle the fighting."
 
And that's what happened. Nazrin went back to her search as Nue and Yuugi awaited the approaching monsters.
 
It was a small group, about ten or so. They were quite typical of the beasts. Their bodies had the usual dark, shadowy appearance, as did the weapons they wielded. None of them displayed any ability for danmaku or other ranged attacks; they were limited solely to melee (some of the monsters had long-range capabilities, but none of those types were among this group). And as Nue and Yuugi opened fire, they displayed no signs of pain.
 
About half of the group had been destroyed by the time they reached Nue and Yuugi, the monsters displaying their usual resistance to ranged attacks. The ones who lived long enough to get close only lasted a few seconds against the pair's close-range assault.

 



 
Nobody knows what happened.

 
It began as what appeared to be shadowy black runes appearing on people's bodies. People tried to figure out what it was, but not even Eirin Yagokoro had any success. The runes initially didn't appear to actually do anything, but many, myself and Byakuren included, were certain that there was more to it than was apparent.
 
It happened to every 'imprinted' person simultaneously. Some of them died, but most went berserk and started attacking everything in sight except each other. And as they did, their forms changed, and not in the way I can change mine. Their bodies changed from those of humans and youkai to those of the monsters that now roam the lands.
 
The attacks were devastating. Nobody expected something of that variety, so resistance was sporadic and generally ineffective, and the general chaos the attacks caused didn't help matters. The kappa village was almost completely destroyed, as was the Moriya Shrine, and the tengu village didn't do much better. Nor did the human village, and the Temple of Myouren, of course, was also destroyed. The Underground City did fairly well-its incineration only happened six years ago-largely due to the fact that oni are fighters by nature, but even it was badly damaged, and the Palace of the Earth Spirits suffered destruction as well.
 
On the surface, it was us at the temple who put up the most effective fight, although we didn't do it at the temple. We made for the human village, and are likely the only reason any of it remained intact. But there was cost. Ichirin and that new girl were killed during the battle, as was Shou. And many villagers died, but in the end, the monsters were repulsed.
 
No new cases of the black runes appeared after that point, and no remaining people turned into the monsters, yet their numbers do not seem to be dwindling-presumably, they are reproducing. Efforts to rebuild began, but continual attacks made it difficult. And then crops began to whither, and food took up more and more time.
 
The village now is much smaller than it once was, a mere shadow of its former self, and the same is true elsewhere. Byakuren and I cooperated to take charge of defending the human village, and it was during that time that we came to love each other.
 
Throughout Gensokyo, people were managing to survive, but only barely.
 
 
 


 
"Shit!"

 
The profanity was uncharacteristic of Nazrin, but quite understandable given that what appeared to be a mobile statue had just charged at her. Yuugi intercepted it and tossed it to the side. "I guess you found something."
 
"Um, yeah," Nazrin said. "There's a concealed passage here."
 
"Then this thing must be its guardian," Nue said as the statue charged again.
 
Yuugi once again intercepted the statue, ripping from its grasp and tossing aside the giant lance it wielded. "Let's do this the old-fashioned way. Come on!"
 
Yuugi's preferred style of combat was the brute-force approach: run up to the enemy and hit it until it stopped moving. Which is exactly what she did, and she was extremely strong even for an oni. And yet, the statue kept moving, taking a swing at Yuugi. The oni evaded and attacked, easily hitting but not doing much apparent damage. Which was surprising, given that Yuugi was exceptionally strong even for an oni.
 
This continued for a time, the more agile Yuugi evading the construct's blows and the construct enduring Yuugi's. But eventually, it did begin to show signs of damage, and more than just cosmetic signs. It began stumbling, flailing around. Then it jumped back, apparently deciding that a different approach was called for. It focused, gathering energy and releasing it in streams of shots.
 
"It's using the monsters' kind of magic," Nue noted. And it was. There were monster varieties that could use magic. What they used was similar to danmaku, but had a couple important differences. Unlike danmaku, this magic was quite harmful, but also unlike danmaku, it could be easily destroyed simply by striking it with weapons or magic-even danmaku was sufficient. The monsters' 'patterns' tended to be little more than continuous streams, which the monsters redirected in response to their targets' movements.
 
Yuugi, who didn't wield a weapon, countered the statue's magic with danmaku. This pinned her down, however, giving the statue time to retrieve its lance. Except that it soon found itself with a trident through its head.
 
Nue landed on the statue's head and took hold of her trident. She pulled it out, channeled her power through it, and thrust it straight down through the construct's head. She channeled a powerful blast through her weapon into the middle of its head, resulting in said head exploding.
 
As the statue collapsed, Nue pulled her trident out and leapt down from it. "Disappointing, really. You'd think the protector of the Beastmaster's lair would be able to put up more of a fight."
 
"If it is the Beastmaster's lair," Yuugi said, "then you know as well as I do that the real fight's still waiting for us."
 
"True," Nue said. "Well, then, let's go find out if we're in the right place."

 



 
I will never forget the attack of five years ago.

 
The monsters made sporadic attacks on villages frequently, but these were not truly dangerous. They were more born from the wandering of mindless creatures, and were hardly noteworthy for one as powerful as myself. But the one five years ago was different. We knew that from the start, even if we didn't know exactly how it was different.
 
It started with a swarm of the regular monster varieties. None of them were anything special, but there were a lot of them, and we couldn't cover the entire village.
 
We had the residents gather in the old school under the protection of Keine and Mokou. Aside from the two of them, there were four capable fighters in the village at the time. Byakuren and I were two of them, of course, and the other two were Yuugi, who had moved in after escaping the underground, and Suika, who had moved in after the death of Reimu and the destruction of the Hakurei Shrine (the Hakurei Barrier survived this only because of the actions of Yukari Yakumo, who put everything she had into stabilizing it and died as a result).
 
The four of us split up to cover the evacuation into the school. Yuugi and Suika both went solo, while Byakuren and I remained together, the two of us heading into the central area where the attack was strongest.
 
The monsters went down as easily as ever, but their numbers were enormous, and the battle was fierce. And, yes, there were citizen casualties, but fortunately not too many.
 
Eventually, the numbers began to thin out. Byakuren and I split up then, myself finishing off the enemy while Byakuren escorted the remaining people to the school in case there was some sort of trap. But it wasn't a trap. It was a change in strategy. The normal ones kept coming, although not in the numbers they had been. And?
 
There had been sightings of truly monstrous beasts before, beasts that truly looked like the monsters they were, their forms twisted and grotesque. They were dangerous, and thus always killed as quickly as possible. But what came that day was on a different level entirely.
 
How such a giant creature could come out of nowhere without warning I do not know, but it did. Its basic body shape was humanoid, but it was enormous, a grotesque mockery. It didn't have the usual wispy, shadowy appearance of the monsters, although it shared the black-with-some-yellow coloration. It looked as though it was composed of twisting, organic tubes that appeared to be themselves moving within the creature. It was a monster unlike anything I'd seen, and I was faced with killing it.
I formed UFOs to keep the regular monsters busy while I focused on the big one. It slammed its 'hand'-the thing was more like tentacles then a hand-into the ground where I'd been standing, but moving out of the way was easy. The shock from the impact still knocked me off-balance, though.
 
I recovered quickly and thrust my trident into the 'hand', and I did draw blood-the monsters did bleed, although this seemed to have no effect on them; I don't know if there's even a reason they have blood. Or if the stuff's actually blood in the first place. They certainly have a lot more of it than they should.
 
The creature tried several more times to crush me, but I always leapt out of the way, making sure to stay airborm long enough to avoid the shock before moving in and attacking. I began blasting it with magic-the monsters' resistance to magic only kicked in at a certain distance. Don't ask me why.
 
Eventually, I leapt on top of the 'hand' that was trying to crush me. I charged up the beast's arm, blasting it with magic the entire time, until I reached what should've been the shoulder. I thrust my trident in and channeled magic through it, blowing the arm completely off. I leapt off the arm as it fell to the ground, spinning to once more face the beast.
 
Pulsing tubes extended out from where the creature's arm had been, forming into a new one.
 
"Well, fuck."
 
With attacking the arm having failed, I took to the air and began assaulting its head. I attacked with magic as I flew around, and whenever I had the chance, I dashed in and struck the head directly. As is the stereotype for giants, the monster's movements were slow and clumsy, and I had no difficulty evading its strikes. Until it began using magic.
 
The monsters' magic may be destructible, but the shots, in addition to being more deadly than danmaku, also tended to move a lot faster. And this creature was firing a lot of them. The shots didn't have even the basic stream pattern typical of the monsters' magic; it was just a chaotic storm. With danmaku, this strategy is usually ineffective, but with these shots, and with the number the creature was firing, it was quite difficult to evade, and I did take hits. But I kept up my assault, and eventually I managed to daze it.
 
I took advantage of the opportunity to fly behind the beast, thrusting my trident into its back. As with the arm, I channeled magic through it into a powerful blast. But it didn't work as it has with the arm; the beast's head remained attached. The thing did stumble forward, eventually falling to the ground in the open 'park' area of the village. Which was good; there weren't any houses or anything there, limiting the damage our battle would do to the village.
 
I blasted the monster with everything I had, but that didn't preventing from getting up. And then it was hit in the head with the remains of a house. I looked down to see Yuugi, and landed beside her. "Looks like you could use some help," Yuugi said.
 
"No shit. Quick tip: this thing regenerates. I'm trying to take out the head, but it seems to be firmer than the arms."
 
"I'll see what I can do."
 
"If we hit it enough, that should stun it and give you an open-shit!"
 
I leapt into the air to evade as the beast directed a punch at us. Yuugi, however, stayed there and caught the punch. She was pushed back, but not harmed. She wrenched the arm back and forth, eventually tearing it off. But as before, the creature simply grew a new one. "Damn," Yuugi said, "You weren't kidding."
 
I continued my previous strategy, while Yuugi adopted her standard approach: get close and hit things. But despite there being two of us, it took longer to stun it this time. But we hoped a third time would not be necessary.
 
We went for the back of the neck again. I repeated my previous approach, thrusting my trident in. Yuugi simply thrust her arms in as deep as she could and pulled. The combination of her strength and my magic was enough to rip the thing's head off. But it didn't work. Tubes shot out to the severed head and reattached it, leaving no sign of the damage. Then what looked like a substantial chunk of a mountain landed on the thing's head.
 
Yuugi and I dashed out of the way and touched down as Suika landed beside us. "Sorry I took so long! I had to find something appropriate to hit the thing with!"
 
"You shouldn't have bothered," I remarked. "Look."
 
She did. The creature, of course, had shaken off even that blow. "Damn," Suika said, "that thing's tough."
 
"It regenerates," I said. "Even taking the head off didn't work."
 
"Come on!" Suika said. "If we keep hitting it, eventually it has to start working!" She charged at the thing.
 
I looked at Yuugi. "Is she trying to raise our morale, or is she honestly that insane?"
 
Yuugi just smiled. "Probably both. Let's go!"
 
Of course, Suika did have an advantage over the two of us. As she charged the beast, she quickly grew to match its size. "Well," I said, "maybe she can do something."
 
"Right. Come on, let's get in there!"
 
Yuugi and I took flight. Getting close to the beast was made all the more difficult by its battle with Suika, but we could still hit it with magic fairly easily, so we did. Sukia, meanwhile, just kept hitting it, barely even bothering to dodge.
 
It didn't take very long to stun the thing this time. Unlike myself and Yuugi, Suika elected not to go for the decapitation. She just kept punching the beast in the head. Then she took a drink from her gourd, which somehow allowed her to spit fire a t the thing. Then she punched it some more. Then she leapt into the air, gripped her hands together, and clubbed the thing so hard that it actually compacted to a small fraction of its height before springing back to normal.
 
As Suika returned to normal size and the three of us landed, the beast fell to the ground, and then it came apart. The arms, the legs, the head, everything just fell off. The tubes stopped moving, and then the various parts of its body faded away in the way normal for the monsters. Everything except the head.
 
No the head didn't grow a new body. Just tentacles, which it used both for movement and to attack. Although it didn't do much attacking. It lashed out at us, then sped away.
 
"That," I said, "is not good."
 
"It's heading for the school," Yuugi said.
 
"Then what the hell are we standing around here for?" Suika said.
 
We pursued the thing, but were unable to catch it before it reached the school. Fortunately, the school was not unprotected.
The beast we were pursuing was not the only one at the school; many of the regular monsters were there as well. Mokou and Keine were dealing with them, while Byakuren was facing off with the big one's head.
 
Byakuren and I broke away to assist Keine and Mokou while the two oni dealt with the creature. And they did so quickly, although the thing did recover a couple times before finally dying.
 
And then the charge came.
 
We could hardly believe how many of the monsters were coming at us, especially after how many we'd killed. But they were, and by that point, the battle had been going for well over an hour-myself having spent the majority of that time against the giant beast-and all six of us were wearing out. But we remained and fought, and we were managing to drive them back. And then Keine died.
 
The monsters were not all confined to the land; there were varieties capable of flight. These tended to fill the role of fairies: they were weak, but there were generally a lot of them. Because of this, a particular aerial figure wasn't noticed as unusual until it was too late and its spear had penetrated Keine's heart.
 
Before we could react to this, the newcomer charged Byakuren and attacked. Byakuren resisted, but this thing was completely fresh, whereas we were all worn out, and before long, the thing had knocked Byakuren unconscious.
 
The horde of monsters tried to get in my way, but I formed UFOs to blast them aside as I charged the newcomer. But I, too, was exhausted from the battle, and it was able to knock me aside. It grabbed hold of Byakuren and rose into the air.
 
This was my first clear look at the thing, and though it appeared similar to the normal monsters, there were differences. Most notably, the forms of the monsters bore no gender characteristics, whereas this one's form was quite clearly feminine. In addition, it appeared to be wearing some sort of elaborate outfit, although said outfit had the same shadowy appearance as the monsters.
This newcomer, of course, was the Beastmaster, as we soon began calling her. She 'said' something, but to us it sounded like nothing but noise; the regular monsters also made such noises. We had all thought these to be just noises, but the monsters reacted as though they had been given a discernable command and began to withdraw. The ground-based ones, at least. The aerial ones mobbed us. They were especially focused on me, as I was attempting to pursue the Beastmaster.
 
By the time we finished up the aerial monsters, the others had all withdrawn. And the Beastmaster had been given time to escape. I wanted to pursue, but I knew I was in no shape to do so. And, of course, I didn't know where the thing had gone.
 
From then on, I have been searching for Byakuren. Making the obvious deduction that where she was the Beastmaster would be, Yuugi joined me in my search. We have defended the village when needed, but aside from that, we've just been searching. We've been searching for five years, and now we've finally found something.
 
Hold on, Byakuren. I'm coming.
 
 
 


 
Nazrin returned to the village, her job done, as Nue and Yuugi entered the passage she had found.

 
The concealed passage went on for a while before opening up into?
 
"Yuugi," Nue said.
 
"Um, yes?"
 
"We're underground, right?"
 
The oni nodded. "Right."
 
"Am I going crazy?"
 
"No."
 
"Then let me ask you this: how the hell can we see the sky?"
 
"Magic?"
 
"Yeah, I guess it has to be." Nue fired a small blast upwards, and although she and Yuugi didn't see anything but sky above them, the blast did soon impact something. "Looks like it's an illusion."
 
"More than that," Yuugi said. "This sunlight feels real. Also, plants can't grow if the light's an illusion."
 
"Yeah."
 
The pair had found themselves in, of all things, a garden. A very large one, too, with a large set of double-doors at the other end. "I don't know what I expected to find," Yuugi said, "but this wasn't it."
 
The pair just stood there for a few moments. "Right," Nue said, "unexpected, but not important. Let's move on."
 
The pair crossed the garden and entered the next passage. This one didn't continue for nearly as long, and opened into a large room that looked a lot less out of place, although still not really what they had expected. "First a garden," Yuugi said, "and now some sort of ballroom or something. What the hell is with this place?"
 
"No idea. Come on."
 
They crossed the room, only to find that the doors further in were locked. "Right," Yuugi said, "like that'll keep us out." And then she ripped the doors completely off. And then she and Nue quickly leapt back as a large number of? things tumbled into the room and began firing magic.
 
Nue formed UFOs to counter the barrage. "Okay, what the hell are these things?" They had the basic black-and-some-yellow appearance of the monsters, but weren't like any the pair had ever seen. These things were spherical, each having a single large eye from which the magic was originating.
 
"Right," Yuugi said, "let's take 'em out."
 
"I've got it." Nue's UFOs were color-coded. The red ones simply left shots behind them as they moved. The blue ones fired lasers and the rainbow ones fired bullets, these being the two types she was using to counter the incoming magic barrage. And now she formed green ones, which fired penetrating beams through the onslaught and began taking out the strange creatures, which seemed to have low durability.
 
More of the things poured into the room, but these ones were behaving? differently. They all clustered into one spot and seemed to melt together into a single mass. As there was no more incoming magic, Nue unformed the blue and rainbow UFOs, but she kept the green ones ready as the mass? shifted, began to take form. It quickly solidified, its form being that of what appeared to be a very large boar.
 
"Right," Yuugi said. "That's new."
 
The pair leapt out of the way as the boar charged, noticing that it took a bit for the thing to stop. "Yuugi," Nue said, "are you thinking what I'm thinking?"
 
"Yep."
 
The pair waited as the boar turned to face them. They waited as it charged. Then they leapt aside at the last second and the boar crashed into the wall. Nue and Yuugi took advantage of the opportunity and attacked while the beast was stunned, Nue with magic and Yuugi by running up and hitting it.
 
The pair moved over to the opposite wall as the beast recovered. "Probably won't work again," Nue said, "but let's give it a try."
And Nue was right. The boar did begin to charge, but instead of running into the wall, it leapt into the air, kicked off the wall, and would've landed on Nue, but she'd gotten out of the way just in time. "Nice trick," she remarked.
 
"This isn't a normal boar," Yuugi said.
 
"Yeah, um, no shit." Nue thrust her trident into the boar's eye, then pulled it out and leapt away as Yuugi charged in and tore one of its legs off. And then she backed away as the eye regenerated and the leg grew back.
 
"Well, damn," Yuugi said. "It regenerates. You think that big one in the attack was a bunch of those ball things combined, too?"
 
Nue had her UFOs open fire, drawing the thing's attention. "Possibly," she said, having no question which attack Yuugi was referring to. "It doesn't look like that one, though. Doesn't have that looks-like-a-bunch-of-tubes thing."
 
"That, and it's not nearly as big."
 
"Maybe it's a numbers thing. That big one may have required a hell of a lot more of these things."
 
The boar charged, destroying two of the UFOs before pulling the rebound trick again and taking out the other two. As the beast turned to face Nue and Yuugi, Nue charged at it. The boar retaliated in kind, but Nue slid underneath it, charging her trident with magic and slashing it along the boar's underbelly. Then Yuugi grabbed it, slammed it into the ground, and ripped its head off.
 
"Damn it," Nue said as the head regrew, "I hate this shit."
 
"It'll die," Yuugi said. "We just have to keep hitting it."
 
"I know, but damn it, we're wasting time here."
 
"Then go. I'll handle this."
 
"Wait, what?"
 
"I'll handle this," Yuugi said.
 
"Yuugi, are you sure?"
 
The boar charged, only for Yuugi to grab it and throw it into the nearest wall. "Don't act like this is some sort of self-sacrifice. Or don't you think I can take this thing?"
 
"You're right," Nue said. "You can take it. Thank you, Yuugi."
 
"Hey, no problem. Just make sure there's some Beastmaster left when I catch up."
 
"You'd better hurry, then," Nue remarked as she ran into the next passage.
 
"Oh, this won't take long," Yuugi said. "Okay, Mr. Boar Thing, it's just you and me now. So come on!"
 
 
 


 
The passage branched off in three directions, and Nue chose the center path. It led to a set of rooms with something of a 'laboratory' feel to them. There were some of the regular monsters in the rooms, but nothing that gave Nue any trouble.

 
Nue didn't spend too long in that section, but she did take a quick look around, and was able to find what looked like a diagram of? whatever this place was. Okay, those marks have to mean that room is important somehow. Especially since no other room has them. That'll be my target. Right, so take the left path back at that branch, then right, straight, right, down the stairs, left, and then straight ahead until I'm there.
 
Nue tore the diagram off the wall. She quickly found a writing tool and made a mark at the first three-way split, which she labeled 'You Are Here'. Then she drew in the path she was going to take. She returned to the three-way split and left the diagram on the floor. There. Now Yuugi'll know which way to go. She headed down the left path.
 
 
 


 
Yuugi threw the boar into the ceiling, then leapt up, grabbed it, and did a piledriver move. She followed this up with a few punches to the head, then threw it into the wall.

 
Damn, Yuugi thought as the boar recovered, this thing can take a beating. I was expecting something a bit easier to kill than Big-and-Ugly. 'Course, I don't have a giant Suika pounding this one's head in.
 
The boar leapt into the air. Yugi quickly moved out of the way as it came down where she'd been standing. "Yeah, try that one all you want. It won't work any better than anything else you've tried."
 
The boar charged again, leaping into the air and performing the rebound strike, but Yuugi had no trouble avoiding it. The creature seemed to have a very limited number of moves, and Yuugi'd figured them all out. The boar hadn't landed a hit since the one about five seconds after Nue had continued on. And yet the thing kept coming. And it wasn't animal instincts or self-defense. No, this thing's got determination. It's going to kill me or die trying. Must mean this place is important. Definitely a good sign.
 
Right, let's wrap this up so I can catch up with Nue. "You want more?"
 
The boar charged once more.
 
 
 


 
The 'important' room turned out to be some sort of combination of a throne room and a bedroom. The 'bedroom' area was at the far left corner, and Nue could make out a figure in the bed. Recognition was immediate; the gradient hair coloration was unmistakable. "Byakuren!"

 
Nue ran towards the bed, but was interrupted when a figure stood up behind the bed and put itself in her path, walking towards her. It was unmistakably the figure of the Beastmaster. "You."
 
"Hello, Nue," the Beastmaster said. "I've been expecting you."
 
"What the- you can talk?"
 
"Of course. We all speak. You just can't understand us. An unfortunate side-effect. We can't produce speech that you can recognize-although we can understand each other just fine; part of the magic, I guess. Of course, I'm obviously an exception."
 
"Yeah," Nue said, "I figured that out. Right, so you've been expecting me. I assume you know what I'm here for, then."
 
"Of course I do." She gestured towards Byakuren. Following the gesture, Nue noticed strange black runes on Byakuren's visible arm.
 
"Oh, no," Nue said. "You're not going to turn her into one of your monsters."
 
The Beastmaster just laughed. "Oh, it's not that simple. You have no idea what this is about."
 
"Yeah? Well, guess what? I don't care."
 
"Yes, you're just here for Byakuren, aren't you? I have to say, Nue, you've changed."
 
"What the hell's it matter to you?"
 
The Beastmaster chuckled. "Oh, come now, Nue. I don't look familiar to you?"
 
Nue gave her a closer look. Actually, she does. But? "You do, actually, but I can't place it. Being a shadowy monster-thing kind of has that effect."
 
"Oh? Well, then, perhaps I should give you a clue." She reached into? well, it must have been some sort of pocket or something, but Nue couldn't make it out. All the black make it hard to distinguish details like that. But the Beastmaster reached into it and removed?
 
What the- that's the- why does- how did she- what's going on here? Nue took a closer look at the object. There was no doubt about it; that was the pagoda of Vaisravana. Nue examined the Beastmaster again, and? Shit, it does look like her. "Shou?"
 
"Indeed I am."
 
"You died."
 
"You assumed I died, I would think. But I know for a fact that you never found my body."
 
"We never found a lot of bodies."
 
"Yes, the process didn't quite work out as expected. The larger scale made a difference, I suppose."
 
"Okay," Nue said, "I've got to say it: what the fuck is going on?"
 
The Beastmaster-Shou-smiled. "Well, let's say this: you may very well have killed yourself at least once, maybe more than that."
 
"Cut the bullshit."
 
"It's not bullshit. Allow me to start from the beginning, which is, of course, the black runes. I assume you think the black runes turned people into monsters, but let me ask you this: if that's true, why did it happen to everyone at the same time, regardless of how long the runes had been present for?"
 
"This is Gensokyo. Stranger things have happened."
 
"I suppose so. But this, there is actually a reason for. The black runes are a sign, an indicator that one is infected. The effects vary from physical death to a more metaphorical death, but death of some kind is always the end result."
 
"There were no reports of anyone with the runes dying."
 
"Of course not. The infection wasn't given enough time up here. But it started in the Underground, and these effects had been observed many times down there. Infected people either die or lose their minds and become thoughtlessly violent, leaving killing them as pretty much the only realistic option. Anyone with the runes was doomed to die. Until the Komeiji sisters found a solution.
"They didn't publicize this discovery. Instead, they tested it on individual cases first, and on every case, it worked. You see, there is a way to render people immune to the infection: separating their souls from their bodies."
 
"Right," Nue said. "Didn't I say to cut the bullshit?"
 
"Oh, it's all true. The two satori soon announced their discovery and began implementing the process on anyone who volunteered for it. The process actually gave their souls corporeal form, too. The bodies were, of course, left mindless, little more than automatons. But the infection would quickly fade from the bodies, at which time the souls could be reinserted."
 
"They all thought that they'd beaten the infection, but then something happened. Everyone became infected. Every single person in the underground. And then the satori heard that the infection was spreading up here as well.
 
"I kept this a secret, but the day before your 'monsters' first appeared, the two satori came to me in secret and asked for my help." Shou indicated the pagoda. "Apparently, the nature of my connection to Vaisravana made me uniquely qualified for what they had in mind. They were going to simultaneously perform the separation process on everyone in Gensokyo, rendering everybody immune to the infection. Which, of course, would result in it dying out. They needed divine energy to amplify the effect enough to reach everyone, but apparently, not just any divine energy would do. They needed me and this pagoda."
 
"Yeah, whatever," Nue said. "That didn't happen."
 
"You're correct. It was probably something about the divine energy, but the plan didn't work as intended. To those who were infected, well, instead of the soul being removed from the body, the body simply decayed and vanished, replaced entirely by the soul.
 
"As for those who were not infected-which was still the majority of people on the surface-well, that got strange. The soul was separated as planned, although often without completely intact minds, something that I'm told did not happen when the process was done to one person at a time. Those separated souls were drawn here to gain their corporeal forms. But the bodies they left behind were not mindless. Somehow, the soul was? copied, and the copy is what remained in the body. The copy was not a new soul, and thus the bodies were still immune to the infection, but aside from that, the copies were identical. I am the only exception, presumably because I was used as the conduit for the divine energy. There was no copying; my body merged with the corporeal form of my soul. I, too, am immune to the infection, but my body and soul are one."
 
"Right," Nue said, "so I'm just a copy of the 'real' me, which is, let me guess, one of the monsters."
 
"They are only monsters because you call them such. Did any of them strike the first blow in the initial attacks? Any of them? Or did everyone just assume they were monsters?"
 
"I don't know," Nue said, "and I don't care. This 'real me' stuff? It's bullshit. I don't care if it's true, it's bullshit. I'm just as real as ever."
 
"True. But does that give you the right to condemn your original self to life without a body?"
 
"Does it give you the right to tell me I'm not allowed to exist?"
 
"Yes. The original takes priority."
 
"I have to thank you, then," Nue said. "I don't know if what you say is true or not, but I know this: you're not Shou. Shou would never say something like what you just said."
 
"Obviously, I would."
 
"If you're Shou, then you've changed. I think you are a monster, whatever you used to be. Oh, and question: what are you doing to Byakuren?"
 
"Oh, that's simple. See, the existing technique to return a soul to a body doesn't work on the bodies with soul copies. A new method was recently developed, and Byakuren is undergoing it."
 
"For five years?"
 
"Yes. Her soul has been returned, but the copy still remains, and they are both fully aware. We still do not know how to eliminate the copy, but we are working on it."
 
"Then you'd better hope they can do it without you," Nue said, "because I'm thinking you're determined to stand in my way." You did love Byakuren, although differently than I do.
 
"I am. You're not taking her away."
 
"Your love for her has been twisted, then, just like the rest of you. And all of your 'souls', too, I'd guess."
 
"Are you sure about that?"
 
"I don't care. Here's what I do care about: I'm leaving here, and I'm taking Byakuren with me. And not your 'restored' Byakuren; the one I've known for the past hundred years. The one who's truly the real Byakuren. Not the original, perhaps, but the real one."
 
"And how do you plan to do that?"
 
Nue formed her trident. "I'm thinking killing you's a good place to start. Take out the source, and all that."
 
A spear formed in Shou's hand. "Yeah, that'll do it. But I'm not going to allow that to happen, and if you try, I will have to kill you."
 
"Just try it."
 
They charged.
 
 
 


 
This time, the boar's head didn't grow back, and the creature's headless body collapsed to the ground and faded away.

 
Right, Yuugi thought, that wasn't too bad. I'd better hurry if I want a piece of the real action.
 
 
 


 
Nue dodged Shou's thrust and swung her own weapon in. Shou ducked under the swing and fired a blast of magic. Nue leapt over the blast and landed a kick in Shou's face, causing the latter to stumble back a couple steps. "Nice trick, Nue. I think you're better at this sort of thing than you used to be."

 
"A century of dealing with monsters will do that."
 
Shou went in for another strike with the spear, but Nue caught the weapon between the prongs of her trident. "But it'll end without you, won't it?"
 
"Quite the opposite, actually." Shou kicked Nue's weapon out of her hand and did a leg-sweep, knocking Nue over. At least, that was the intent.
 
Nue's legs were knocked out from under her, but she didn't fall to the ground. Instead, she actually shot upwards as though she'd leapt into the air, scoring a direct hit with a beam as she flipped over Shou and landed. "What the hell's that supposed to mean?"
"Nice move." Shou fired lasers at Nue, who waited until the last second to dodge, then immediately performed a repeat dodge back to her original position. "Also a nice move. Looks like you haven't forgotten my little tricks."
 
"Yeah, good for me." Nue released a cloud of darkness. It was a trick Shou had seen before, and she made ready to dodge the shots that would soon emerge from it. Except that none did, and when the cloud faded, Nue was still in the exact same spot.
 
"What the hell was that f-"
 
Shou was cut off as a beam impacted her directly on the back of the head. She let it knock her over, ducking beneath the beam as she spun around and returned fire, destroying the green UFO that was behind her. "Clever," she said as she turned back to Nue. "But are you really going to kill me?"
 
"As far as I'm concerned, Shou's already dead, and you're just a twisted fake. So don't think I'll have any hesitation."
 
"The consequences of my death would be severe."
 
"Then you'd better beat me, I guess."
 
The pair charged again, exchanging weapon strikes. Neither weapon was really suited to a 'sword' fight, but the weapons were supernatural, as was the norm in Gensokyo, and thus their magic was able to make up for this.
 
Two things happened at the same time. First, Yuugi made a sudden attack, throwing Shou into a wall. And second, a voice called out, "Stop!"
 
All three of them looked to the sound of the voice. It was Byakuren, on her feet and slowly approaching Nue. "You are the one, then," she said. "The one she cries out for."
 
"I am," Nue said. "Give her back, and I'll leave."
 
"You say that as though it were that simple. She wants to be with you, and you want to be with her. But I want to be with Shou, and she with me. Only one of us can have what we want, and I have to choose who. Two equal choices. All things being equal, it's only natural for me to pick the one that I want, isn't it?"
 
"Maybe so," Nue said, "but the real Byakuren would never choose herself over another. So you're not her."
 
"Even setting myself aside, it's a manner of choosing either you or Shou. She loves you, but Shou is the one I love."
 
"That's not putting yourself aside. That's still thinking of yourself."
 
"Be that as it may, I have chosen Shou over you. The only way you can have her is to kill Shou, but I will not allow you to do that. And if you kill me, you'll kill her, too."
 
Yuugi hit Shou with a flying tackle. "Nue, just hold her off! I've got this one!"
 
Byakuren moved to intervene, but then Nue was there in front of her. "Please don't make me do this."
 
Byakuren formed a weapon of her own, a simple pole. "You fight to reclaim the love you and she share. I fight to keep the love Shou and I share. Like you, I will not stand down."
 
"Fine, then." Nue charged.
 
Byakuren blocked Nue's strike and retaliated. Nue dodged and thrust her trident in, but Byakuren dodged as well. Nue blocked her next strike and attempted to land a kick, but Byakuren ducked to the side to avoid it.
 
The battle continued in that manner, the pair exchanging words between blows. "You would go this far for one person?" Byakuren said.
 
"I'm doing it, aren't I?"
 
"But do you know what you're doing?"
 
"Is this more of that 'fake people' crap?"
 
"It's true, actually. But did Shou mention the relapse cases?"
 
"What the hell's that mean?"
 
"I see. Well, it was another difference of the full-Gensokyo separation. Over time, many of the separated souls experienced mental decay, actually becoming the monsters you believed them to be. Those are the ones that mindlessly attack people."
 
They kept up the fight. "Oh, really?" Nue said. "And let me guess: it was these 'relapses' that are responsible for what happened to the underground."
 
"Correct."
 
"Well, good for them. It's not like I care."
 
"You should," Byakuren said. "you see, all of the separated souls will undergo relapse. The time it takes varies, but it will happen to all of them eventually. Except that Shou is able to prevent it."
 
"Oh, really?"
 
"Shou, herself being immune to relapse due to the merge of her body and her soul's corporeal form, is the only one who can hold it off. It's because of her connection to Vaisravana, to the divine energy that fueled the separation. Nobody else can do it. If your friend kills Shou, every soul will eventually relapse. You will have doomed everyone to death."
 
"Not everyone. Just your twisted 'soul' things. And so what if they're the originals? They're twisted now. They're not who they used to be. We are. We are still ourselves, but you 'souls' are not."
 
"No. We are the true ones."
 
"You're not."
 
"Yes, we- no! Shou!"
 
Nue leapt to the side away from Byakuren in case it was a trick, then turned to look. And it was no trick. Yuugi had literally ripped Shou's head off.
 
The three of us just stood there as Shou's body faded. Then Byakuren began to scream. And to cry. Nue ran back to her. "Give her to me."
 
Byakuren just kept up her anguished cries. Until she suddenly stopped, and Nue felt? something, something she had no idea how to describe. Then the runes faded from Byakuren's body and Nue caught her in her arms as she collapsed. "Are you all right? Byakuren? Bya-"
 
"Heads up!"
 
Nue spun around just in time to dodge the monster's attack. It didn't have time to make a second, as Yuugi charged it and ripped it apart.
 
 
 


 
Byakuren eventually awakened. "What? Nue?" She was in Nue's arms, being carried as Nue and Yuugi made their way back through the facility.

 
"Byakuren," Nue said. "I'm sorry it took so long."
 
"You? what happened to?"
 
"To that twisted you? Dead. To the twisted Shou? Also dead."
 
"You? killed them?"
 
"Well, I did," Yuugi said, "but we both fought."
 
"I? I?"
 
"How much do you remember?" Nue asked.
 
"Fragments. Broad strokes. Little that's specific. Maybe I'll remember more once I have a chance to? recover? from this? I feel exhausted."
 
"Then let's get you home," Nue said. "Let's get you home."
 
 
 
A note: You know what I described the monsters' magic as? Enemy magic in Nier actually works that way. Yes. They put bullet-hell into a hack-and-slash.

Re: Weekly Writing Challenge! - Post-Apocalyptic Setting
« Reply #784 on: May 22, 2011, 02:58:36 PM »
note 1) I'm not copying Rou in the idea of a flooded Gensokyo. No really. *looks left and right* HONESTLY!
note 2) This is obviously a crossover. Included uni/multiverses may include those used by T-A-C.
note 3) I don't know many Japanese names. I might end up using placeholders/lazily ripped names from other places etc.
To be edit-completed

Crimson Cycle

"Man is the measure of all things"

This one line succinctly captures the essence of the struggle of objectivity in measurement in many fields. Another oft-quoted line can be paraphrased as "If Rome had not fallen, we might have measured units of length in terms of Caesar's little finger." By the time sciences develop far enough to find seemingly "universal" quantities, the old way of measuring is so ingrained that few things can change.

However, as guilty may the physical sciences and their offshoots (such as engineering) are of this, the human sciences and history are even more. Perhaps guilty is too strong a word, as the study of people could do worse than to use people as measuring sticks.

For two millennia, a certain "West" counted years from the day of the birth of their God upon this world.

For longer than memory, a certain "East" counted years from the changing of emperors.

In this forgotten wonderland, days are counted from calamity.
======

Marisa swam through the red water at an unhurried pace. The white hardsuit made it impossible to go any faster under her  own power.
Ordinarily, being sealed in a glorified flexible airtight container in some of the most dangerous substance known to Gensokyo would have been worrying.

However, to Marisa, this was just another monthly ritual. Even eschewing the protective wards that would supposedly repel anything left alive in the water ("radiates too much magic. Besides, it's not as if some trees are going to mob me"), a proper fuel source ("that's literally burning money") and a tether ("can't get tied down"), she was considerably more secure than most other divers.

Know thyself and know thy foe. I am myself, my enemy is the world.

Behind her was the ship that brought her here. The hull was a matte black with the occasional outcropping of red crystal. The gentle curves of the hull flowed into the superstructure; from this angle, deck and superstructure seemed to flow into each other. Two large cankers rose out of the wood; one Marisa knew to be Rikako's turret. The other was a three by two array of octagons. The gaps between the octagons were filled with square rods; the edges with triangular prisms. Small glimmers of metal hinted at the attendant cooling system that mirrored the Trigram Reactor that powered the ship.

The gleam of the hardsuit loading and decontamination rig was hidden by the bulk of the superstructure, which at a distance looked like a continuous sheet of blackened iron but at closer inspection revealed the seams of overlapping leaves. The sharp angles seemed out of place in the living flow of the ship. In a way, this was intentional. If not for continuous cauterization of the surrounding wood (made convenient by large sweeps of aluminum heat pipes connected directly to the central reactor), the loading area would have long been overgrown;

Just as the organic components of the ship overshadowed the little metal available, so too did the surrounding panorama overshadow the ship. A near-boundless expanse of red stretched around the ship; though only ten meters deep and devoid of sediment, the water took on the hue and opacity of just-dried blood. Behind the boat loomed a pair of mountains. Opposite of them were two circles over a small island. One was a rainbow perpendicular to the surface of the water which almost completed a full circle, beginning and ending at the small, shining point in the middle of the shrine. The other was a halo of light, quashed into an oval by the eye of the beholder.

Hakurei, huh. I wonder if that girl has anything to do with it.

For a few moments, Marisa was lost in thought. The blue sky and red sea, still as ever, seemed pregnant with possibility.

Oh, well. I'll ask her next time

In the 118th day of the 8th year following the Great Purge, Marisa slipped beneath the surface of the Cinnabar Sea.
======
"We've been betrayed!"
Grandmother Hakurei shouted with as much panic as she could muster. After so many years, she had almost come to suspect such an outcome. However, she doubted that the later generations would have reacted to anything less than a complete break of her composure.

After all, there was no real warning beforehand.

When the god of the shrine began whispering of a renewal of the contract established between their ancestor and him (her? it?), Grandmother (her own name was overshadowed by either her seniority in her family or her name outside; she had become accustomed to answering to her title) was less than enthusiastic. No precedent had been set for such a visitation; experience taught her that a certain Youkai Sage of the Eight Clouds was not above whispering in the ears of the pious and credulous.

Nonetheless, when the voice visited her, she could detect no obvious foul play. As only the God of Hakurei could, the presence made the charms of dedication to Hakurei glow while dimming the magic within the few artifacts of foreign gods housed at the shrine. The field of purification was so strong that the few bodies the youkai hunters brought to the shrine for identification (a rarer and rarer event as relations were established with youkai communities) were burnt to a crisp; the hunters themselves reported uncleaned weapons and stained clothes glowing and becoming hot to the touch.

Grandmother Hakurei took such an overt display of divine power as a silent admonishment of her lack of faith and decided to follow the instructions, which were simple enough: build another shrine at the peak of the Youkai Mountain, furnish it with one Hakurei Yin-Yang orb, and then, at the original shrine, charge the other orb with the spiritual energy of the entire Hakurei clan.

The second shrine was surprisingly easy to make; the designated spot was reasonably far from the Youkai settlement and was easily reachable by flying. A few overzealous novices almost started a tussle with the guardians of the mountain, but tempers cooled after the exchange of a few words among the more senior members of both parties. The Kappa went as far as to provide free wood, not wanting to waste some woodland lying above a planned artificial lake. After a few months, some wheedling, a protection racket and a monthly payment contract, the new shrine was finished and provided with running water for ablutions (courtesy of some kappa curious about human culture).

For some reason, news about the final part of the instructions spread like wildfire and drew the most attention. The Sage of Eight Clouds broached the topic over a visit.
"You know, on the other side of the world, gods demand the blood of innocents as tribute. What about yours...."
An evil spirit in a blue robe was more direct; she made numerous attempts on the Yin-Yang orb, delaying the ritual by a matter of months.
======
Makes me think of a womb.

In a way, the small patch of the sea floor was one; a number of Saigyou-Yagokoro saplings bordered a nursery. The intense pressure and lack of sunlight made these grow very slowly compared to those growing in air. While some of the trees floated at the surface by the Kawashiro Water Reclamation Initiative had grown to the point that some Tengu considered making new roosts in them, deep-sea trees of comparable age had only reached nine meters; the oldest just barely pierced the surface of the water.

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Re: Weekly Writing Challenge! - Post-Apocalyptic Setting
« Reply #785 on: May 23, 2011, 05:14:51 PM »
(Alright, I think this goes on too long, and it barely fits the theme, and everything just kind of spiraled out of control, and goddamn it argh but here's my submission.)


 Reimu stared silently at the cup of tea she rotated in her hands. She hadn?t even begun to drink it, and now it had stopped steaming entirely.

 Yuyuko shifted in her seat across the table, finally breaking the silence. ??where is Marisa??

 ?Looking to see who survived,? Reimu said flatly, not once looking up. Then, before the ghost could continue, she added, ?Alice didn?t.?

 ??I see.?

 Silence again. Something howled off in the distance outside.

 ?I understand she was a good friend of yours, as well. Yukari.? Yuyuko set down her empty teacup on the table, looking out the window at the skyscraper that had crushed the Moriya Shrine and was now sticking out of Youkai Mountain like a stake through Gensokyo?s heart.

 Reimu suddenly stopped playing with her cup. ??what about it??

 ?She spoke often and very highly of you.? The ghost turned to look at Reimu, wearing a sweet, if sad, smile on her face. ?You were one of the few humans in the world who really impressed her from the moment she met you. That is something to be proud of, at lea-?

 She was interrupted by the sudden shattering of Reimu?s cup in her clenched fist. The shrine maiden leaned forward over the table, her bangs obscuring her eyes from view. A couple of drops of tears fell onto the table, mixing with the blood from the clay shards in her hand.

 ??stupid cup,? she hissed through clenched teeth before pushing herself up and storming off to another room in the shrine.

 Yuyuko simply stared at the spot where Reimu had been a moment before. Finally, with a sigh, she floated up to a standing position and moved through the front door.

 ---------------

 Youmu stood in the middle of the gate of the Hakurei Shrine, eyes straight ahead with a hand on the hilt of her blade. Her phantom half lazily snaked through the air around her, but her human body was as still as a statue.

 From here, one had a good view of what was once Gensokyo. The skyscraper smashed through Youkai Mountain, the cracks in the sickly gray sky, the Holy Palanquin floating in the air once more, the airplane that had sliced through the clock tower and the Eastern wing of the Scarlet Devil Mansion and which was now lying in a burning heap at the opposite shore of the Misty Lake, the blazing inferno of what was the Bamboo Forest of the Lost, the tentacled, insectoid behemoth stomping through the human village with its lesser ilk, the swirling black void where the Forest of Magic used to be, and everywhere else that was swarming with unknown things or the places that simply weren?t there anymore.

 ?It?s hard to believe even she had this much power, isn?t it??

 A voice from behind Youmu broke her concentration. The half-ghost quickly turned to see Yuyuko standing behind her, floating placidly in place as usual. ?Ah, Yuyuko-sama. Please don?t sneak up on me like that.?

 Yuyuko giggled gently as she floated over to Youmu?s side. ?My apologies. I sometimes forget how focused you become when on watch.? She laid a hand on Youmu?s shoulder, looking out at the ruins of Gensokyo. A crack opened in the side of Youkai Mountain, and from it emerged a large, eye-encrusted arm that slowly pulled the rest of its hideous body out into the new world.

 Yuyuko and Youmu stood there silently for a while. Something in the airplane at the Misty Lake caught fire, and the rear of the vessel violently exploded.

 ??yes, it is hard to believe,? Youmu finally answered, staring out at the landscape. ?I only ever knew her as your friend. I rarely saw her put her abilities to much use, except for the usual pranks or fast transportation. But this??

 ?Hey! Youmu! We found some people, help us out.?
 
 The gardener suddenly snapped to attention, looking up to see Marisa and Suika flying toward the shrine with several other familiar faces in tow. Youmu quickly flew up to meet them, escorting the group through the last few yards to the Hakurei Shrine.

---------------

 Finally, Reimu came around the corner, emerging from her bedroom in the shrine and entering the main room. What she was met with, however, was not what she left.

 The room was now filled with several people she would rather not have seen at that time. Satori from the underground sat silently at the table, eyeing Kanako with no hidden contempt as she sat with Sanae and Suwako. Reisen and Tewi stood in a corner, the taller rabbit laying a consoling hand on the smaller one?s head. Aya leaned against the wall, arms crossed and head solemnly bowed. Hatate sat beside her with a vacant look in her eyes, her knees pulled up to her chest and her arms wrapped around her legs. Yuuka stood speaking quietly with Yuyuko with both hands on her umbrella as the tip rested on the floor. They all looked like they had already experienced their fair share of strife, whether emotional, physical, or both, some worse than others.

 The moment Reimu entered the room, all eyes turned toward her. The shrine maiden paused, leaning an arm against the wall wearily. While her outfit looked like it had seen no hardships, her face held a dead expression. It was as if all the joy and life had been sucked out of her soul, and all that was left was a shell of her former self, shambling around aimlessly.

 Marisa, Suika, and Youmu finally walked in from outside and broke the awkward silence. Suika placed herself between Satori and Kanako, looking uncharacteristically tired. Youmu moved to her mistress?s side, giving a polite nod to Yuuka before standing at attention. Only Marisa moved to speak with Reimu.

 ?Is this it,? the shrine maiden asked without bothering with a greeting.

 ?Yeah.? Marisa sighed, removing her hat and letting it hang loosely in her hand. Her face was grim, an expression Reimu hadn?t seen in years. ?Remi was badly injured and couldn?t travel, so the rest of the mansion decided to hole up with her. The Myouren Temple?s up in the air again, so we didn?t bother trying to reach them. Mokou and Kaguya won?t stop fighting. The fairies are too scared to come out, and we couldn?t find Komachi or Shiki.? A pause as Marisa?s eyes locked with Reimu?s own. ?Everyone else is missing or dead, at this point.?

 ?Right?and what about your pare-?

 ?Dead,? Marisa quickly interrupted, turning back to everyone in the room. ?Alright,? she began, quickly forgetting the discussion as she addressed everyone in the room, ?you guys are all we have left, apparently. For those of you that don?t know, Yukari?s lost control of her powers somehow. We?ve?well, we?ve still got no idea how the heck that happened, but you?ve seen the result of it. Gensokyo?s pretty much finished unless we can figure out how to stop this.?

 Sanae shakily raised a hand, speaking once Marisa nodded to her. The green-haired shrine maiden cleared her throat and rested her hands in her lap. ?Forgive me for suggesting this, but?what evidence do we have that Yakumo-sama actually lost control of her powers? What if she did this intentionally-?

 ?Shut the hell up.? Reimu?s voice shot through Sanae?s words instantly as she leaned on her side against the wall. The red-white glared with contempt at the other shrine maiden, not even bothering to give her the grace of turning her head to face her. ?You shouldn?t talk about people you don?t even know. Say something about her again and I swear-?
 
 Kanako quickly got to her feet, pointing a threatening finger at Reimu as she returned the glare in equal force. ?Hey, don?t you dare talk to Sanae like that. Just because you can?t handle the possibility that your friend might have-?

 A sudden crash of glass and a laser shooting up from the floor silenced the two of them instantly. Marisa suddenly lifted her hands at Reimu and Kanako, giving them both a stern look as the smoke from her spell bottle slowly cleared. ?Both of you,? she hissed through her teeth. ?Save it.?

 After a moment of tense silence, Kanako finally sat down once more. Reimu just let out a sneering ?tch?, and Sanae stared silently at Reimu in hurt shock for a second before dropping her head to look at her hands in her lap.

 ?If I can explain,? Yuyuko finally chimed in, ?Yukari loved Gensokyo more than any of us. She was the one to help create the border and seal Gensokyo off from the outside world, after all. I would like to think I knew her very well after all these years, and the Yukari I know would never do something like this intentionally. While your input is appreciated, Kochiya-san, it is sadly misinformed.?

 Sanae remained silent. She refused to look up again.

 Satori suddenly broke the silence, standing up with a terse exhalation. Her arms hid in her sleeves as they hung loosely at her sides, and her eyes remained closed as she addressed the room. ?I apologize, but I have important matters I must attend to myself. Okuu, my dear pet, has destroyed the entire underground, partially thanks to the power the Moriya Shrine has helpfully bestowed on her.? The small girl shot a cold, hateful glare at Kanako, who refused to meet her gaze. ?In any case, I do not have the time to idly sit here and argue about these matters while she is grieving the loss of everything she has. If you will excuse me.?

 With a polite bow, Satori stood and quietly crossed to the front door. Once there, however, she paused and turned to Reimu, lifting a hand to beckon her over. ?Reimu. Just for a moment, if you would.?

 Reimu scoffed in annoyance, but reluctantly pushed herself off the wall and followed Satori out the door. She kept her head down and refused to look at anyone on her way out.

 The two of them walked in silence toward the gate for a while. The air was filled now with the distant, merged sounds destruction, fires and crumbling ruins and wailing beasts all merging their voices into a single mournful song of finality that formed the words of Gensokyo?s epitaph.

 Reimu finally stopped at the gate with her gaze still firmly fixed on the ground. ?I know you didn?t just want me to walk you to the gate. What do you want??

 Satori stood a bit ahead of the shrine maiden, staring out at the landscape. When she spoke, her voice was level and emotionless, as it usually was these days. ?The reason Utsuho destroyed the underground is because one of your friend?s portals opened and let some monster into my home. I was unable to stop it before it killed??

 Her voice broke. She held a sleeve to her mouth and tried to collect herself again. ??my Orin. It knocked me unconscious as Yuugi came to the palace to see what was going on. I assume she must have carried me to safety before trying to take it on herself, because the next thing I knew I was outside the geyser, on the surface. The last thing I read from Okuu before I lost consciousness was?an overwhelming agony. She feels her life has been shattered, that she has nothing left to live for. I have to show her that I?m alright, or else she will finally give in and destroy everything. You understand.?

 ??why are you telling me all of this?? Reimu finally turned her head to look at Satori. The smaller youkai was looking in the other direction, but her third eye was staring straight into Reimu?s own, boring into her very soul.

 ?I am not certain if Okuu is beyond recovery or not,? Satori continued, ignoring Reimu?s question. ?It is possible that she will not recognize me in her grief and madness. If that is the case I will?I will have to??

 The words wouldn?t come out this time. Satori lifted a sleeve to hide her face again. After an even longer pause, she spoke once more. ?Forgive me. Please understand, Reimu, that you are not the only one who has lost something in this tragedy.?

 She finally turned around to meet Reimu?s gaze directly, letting her arm fall to her side once more. ?I have lost my home and the few people in the world who did not hate me for what I am. Marisa?s home does not exist anymore, and neither does the puppeteer she was closest to. The rabbits? mistress has finally lost control of herself and engaged in an endless fight with Mokou that destroyed their home and Eirin. Hatate is in shock, the tengu?s home is destroyed, and, as much as I resent them, the only thing the Moriya Shrine has anymore is each other.?

 Reimu?s face began to harden and she opened her mouth to speak. Before she could respond, Satori spoke again. ??So what, you want me to go easy on them, is that it?? Yes, Reimu, that is what you should do. They have all come to you for guidance. You, whom they all know and trust, even if your history has been tremulous. And in turn, they can provide support for you. Marisa, Youmu, Yuyuko, Yuuka, Aya, all your friends who have been with you all this time.?

 The shrine maiden stared at her in silence. Satori could hear a whirlwind of thoughts going through Reimu?s mind, but the red-white finally chose one thought to voice.

 ?Alright. If you have so much advice you want to give me, then what are they going to support me through? What am I supposed to do to fix this?? Her voice rose in frustration, her fists clenching tightly at her sides. ?How the hell am I supposed to save Gensokyo this time? What the hell do I do now?!?

 Satori simply stared flat-eyed at Reimu. They both knew that Reimu viewed Yukari as one of her best friends in Gensokyo. They both knew that Yukari, if she was still cognitive, must be feeling emotional agony as she watched herself destroy the place she loved the most. Therefore, Satori only needed to say one thing to Reimu.

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 Reimu landed softly in front of the Yakumo household. She had not told anyone where she was going. Soon after Satori went on her way to try to save Utsuho, Reimu herself flew off to Yukari?s house. She knew what to do now.

 The shrine maiden took a deep breath, then walked up to the front door. She laid her hand on the handle for a moment to consider if this really was the right thing to do. She thought of Sanae?s words, and Yuyuko?s, and Satori?s.

 This is just another Incident, she finally thought. I just need to go in, beat someone in a spellcard battle, and then everything will be fine.

 She shoved the door open and was greeted by a gargantuan black void. The entire space in front of her was filled with sheer nothingness. Then we?ll all sit down and have tea at the Shrine. We?ll help each other rebuild all our homes.

 Reimu kicked off the edge of the doorframe and flew into the gaping space. A sense of foreboding hit her like a lump of lead to her face. Everything will be fine. We?ll fix everything. Somehow.

 A shape gradually appeared in the distance. As Reimu got closer, it steadily became more and more familiar, yet simultaneously appeared completely alien. The shrine maiden finally stopped in front of Yukari, or at least what she assumed to be Yukari. As she gazed on the being, it felt as if chunks of ice were pushing up against the inside of her skin, yet she began to sweat heavily.

 ??what happened??

 In front of Reimu floated a titanic, humanoid form. It seemed to have Yukari?s body, though the skin and hair was a sickly gray. In place of facial features, she had five sets of eyes with purple irises and black scleras stacked on her face. Her hair flowed around her, various staring eyes appearing among the waving locks. Her slender arms and bony fingers were crossed over her chest with the hands hanging loosely down. Behind her, six huge fissures spread out like a set of wings, opening into some kind of eerie cosmos. In place of legs, her body tapered to a tail like a spinal column at the waist, with arms emerging from the sides of each vertebra in place of ribs.

 The ten eyes on her face all looked down at Reimu simultaneously. A voice sounded from all directions. Yukari?s voice. Oh, Reimu. I thought you would never get here.

 ?Yukari???

 Yeah, this is my true form. I must not look so bad if you can still recognize me like this.

 ??you look like an old hag, actually. I guess you forgot to get your beauty sleep today.?

 A cheerful laugh. Aw, that?s not nice. You know I?m only seventeen, Reimu.

 ?Ran told me those are the last two digits.? A pause. ?Where is she, anyway? And Chen, too??

 Well?I guess they?re not here anymore. A lot of people out there are like that now, right? Another moment of silence. I am?very sorry, Reimu. I?m not quite sure how this all happened, myself. But I guess if you?ve come here, you know what you?ll have to do now.

 ??I was hoping I was mistaken.?

 I?m afraid not. But you can think of it as doing me a favor. I can?t seem to control myself anymore, and I can?t bear to see myself doing this, so you can help me out by making me stop seeing it, right? And maybe it?ll stop anything worse from happening. Kill two birds with one stone, if you don?t mind the expression.

 ?You?re not helping, you know.? Reimu tried her best not to break down right there. Her friend needed her strength, after all. This was as hard for Yukari as it was for her. As she took one last deep breath, Reimu began drawing glowing patterns in the air with her gohei. ?I guess this is goodbye, then??

 Yep. You won?t mind sending my regards to Yuyuko, will you? And everyone else, too. You?ve all made life really interesting, you know that?

 ??yeah. You too.?

 As the last few symbols of the seal formed in the air, Satori?s last words to Reimu echoed in her head one more time.

?The most important part of loving something is knowing when to let go and end the pain.?

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 Marisa sighed and shoved open the front door of the shrine, letting the fresh sunlight pour in from behind her. She tossed her broom on the ground before taking a seat at Reimu?s table, leaning her elbows on the surface as she regarded Reimu on the other side. The shrine maiden silently pushed a cup of tea over to Marisa, gently sipping her own tea in the process. ?So how?s the rebuilding going,? she finally asked after Marisa had a chance to recover.

 ?Good, ze. We managed to clear out all the weird things that came through the gaps. Reisen did some tricks and got Kaguya and Mokou to calm down. They?re letting the forest burn itself out now before they try to put anything back. Sanae and the gods on the mountain got together and flipped that building over, so now the tengu that are left and the Moriya group have a new home. The mansion made it through alright, and Sakuya even got the fairy maids to actually help out and get that thing out of the lake. The Myouren Temple is helping to transport materials everywhere, and Youmu, Yuyuko, and Suika are helping out where they can.?

 Reimu nodded briefly. After a moment, she set down her cup and looked at Marisa. ??I?m sorry about Alice.?

 Marisa?s gaze fell to her cup. She swirled its contents around. ??yeah. I?ll miss her, even if she was a pain sometimes. She made some damn good cupcakes, you know.?

 The witch sniffed and rubbed away the tears forming in her eyes. ?Anyway,? she said, standing up and chugging down what was left of her tea, ?I?d better go help people out. I?ll see you around.?

 ?Yeah. See you. Come back whenever you want a break.?

 As Marisa picked up her broom and left, she nearly ran into Satori on her way. With a brief ?sorry?, the witch scooted around the smaller youkai and took off into the air, leaving her to attend to her business with Reimu.

 The shrine maiden looked up at Satori, narrowing her eyes at the girl. ?You look horrible. What happened??

 Satori calmly entered the shrine, holding an abnormally large, sleeping raven in her arms. Her clothes were charred, cut, and frayed, but her face was peaceful as she sat across the table from Reimu. ?My dear Okuu took some convincing to assure her that I was who I said I was. That is all over with, now.? Satori gently pet Utsuho on the head, and the raven cooed softly in her sleep. ?I came to place a request, however. Considering that my home has been destroyed and the entire underground is a sea of fire, I thought I could come and ask for some temporary sanctuary until I find another place for us to live.?

 Reimu just shrugged, sipping her tea again. ?Sure. I?ll get some blankets and stuff for you two tonight. Just make sure your bird doesn?t go blowing stuff up again.?

 ?I will do my best to control her, of course. She?s been through quite a lot in the last day, however, so I do not see her being her rowdy self for a while.? Satori stood and bowed politely to Reimu, clutching Utsuho to make sure the raven didn?t fall out of her hands. ?In any case, thank you. We will go outside for now.?

 The small youkai turned and started out the door, but Reimu?s voice made her stop. ?Hey, Satori.?

 Satori turned and looked at Reimu, still wearing her usual flat-eyed expression. ?Yes??

 ??thanks.?

 Satori allowed herself a small smile, but didn?t say any more. She walked out the door and sat on the sunny porch, humming quietly to Utsuho as she watched the rebuilding of Gensokyo.
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Re: Weekly Writing Challenge! - Post-Apocalyptic Setting
« Reply #786 on: May 23, 2011, 05:40:31 PM »
Damnit, was hoping for an actual apocalypse to happen before having to read the rush of fics right before deadline.

Sakana, Mystery Judge #3, get to reading! We've got a judgment to pass!

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Re: Weekly Writing Challenge! - Post-Apocalyptic Setting
« Reply #787 on: May 23, 2011, 08:13:32 PM »
Well, too bad. May 21st has come and gone, and the world's still here. Guess you'll just have to wait for the next end-of-the-world date.

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Re: Weekly Writing Challenge! - Post-Apocalyptic Setting
« Reply #788 on: May 25, 2011, 02:39:30 AM »
Right, so now that the deadline has passed (and I've finally gotten around to reading the last couple entries), feedback time! Also, I think that after the results have been announced, the judges should post their thoughts on the various entries (since, you know, they're the ones judging the stories, and thus would presumably have well-thought-out things to say about them). Anyways:


andrewv42: Way too short. There's some potential there, but not enough time for much of anything to really happen. Definitely could use expanding upon.

The NEET Colossal: Touhou SMT, huh? Were you working off of any particular game in the series (I wouldn't necessarily know; the only main-series SMT game I've played is Strange Journey)? Anyways, I'm not really a big fan of Renko and Maribel, but I think they're quite appropriate for this story. Sanae's appearance was, if you ask me, far too brief, but it was awesome. Also, Remilia's a bitch.

Rou: ...Well, there goes any chance of winning I had. Holy shit, dude. That was just... well, I've liked all your stuff enough that I'm really running out of things to say about it. So I'll just say that of your various short stories, this one's easily my favorite. I don't like how people reacted to the Moriya Shrine, though-and yes, I know that's how people would probably act in reality (although I'd expect the Myouren Temple bunch, especially Byakuren, to know better than to act that way), but I don't like that sort of thing in real life, either. It wasn't just Sanae's fault; from the way you described it, it sounds like everyone had a role in it, although Sanae's was the largest. That's not a complaint about the story, though; it's more of a complaint about humanity in general, and as for your story, that's really the way you should've gone as far as I'm concerned. But yeah, great stuff. And as much as I'd hate to distract you from DRK, I think I want to see this turned into a full-length story. Also, I enjoyed all the little references to your old stuff, although it does raise the question of just what happened to Sango.

Sankako: You got hit hard by some unfortunate timing. Your story and Rou's both involve flooded worlds, but Rou's was first, and, well, yours looks like shit in comparison. Putting that aside, yours isn't at all bad-it just seems that way to me in comparison to Rou's. On its own, your story isn't at all bad, although it doesn't really stand out to me in any way. I did like your portrayal of Yuugi, though, and the general chaos following the theft was also pretty amusing.

Iced Fairy: First of all, you lose some points for not really saying anything about whatever happened. Leaving it ambiguous is fine, but I think you should at least address it. And you used Renko and Maribel, too, although as with NEET?s story, they seemed to fit in well. And you had Wriggle and Utsuho, too, which is a plus. Utsuho's ass-kicking scene was awesome, and the explanation for still having her powers works well, too. I guess that means all the gods would still have theirs, too, right (and Sanae as well)?

Himiko: You didn't address what happened, either. Or why being outside in the rain or at night is such a bad idea. Yeah, you had the poisoned river, but the rest seemed... well, like it was just put there for the sake of plot tension. The writing's good, though.
 
Yuyuko: You lose points for having the story take place during the apocalypse instead of after it, since these stories are supposed to have a post-apocalyptic setting. iIteresting apocalypse idea, though. Although I'm not sure why antimana would show up as a result of a mana shortage; doesn't make sense that the reaction to insufficient mana would be producing stuff that absorbs what little is left.

LogosOfJ: Kinda hard to comment on this one, seeing as how it doesn't seem that you managed to finish it.
 
Squidtentacle: ...What. I'm not sure what the hell that was, except freaky. I have no idea what to make of your Yukari. Anyways, you also lose points for setting the story during the apocalypse, but you get points simply because of sheer WTF. Can't say I like the chiched 'please kill me' thing, though. Also, I would've liked to see the stuff that happened with Utsuho.
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Re: Weekly Writing Challenge! - Post-Apocalyptic Setting
« Reply #789 on: May 25, 2011, 03:26:49 AM »
Squidtentacle: ...What. I'm not sure what the hell that was, except freaky. I have no idea what to make of your Yukari. Anyways, you also lose points for setting the story during the apocalypse, but you get points simply because of sheer WTF. Can't say I like the chiched 'please kill me' thing, though. Also, I would've liked to see the stuff that happened with Utsuho.

Yeah, I don't really like how it all came out. If I had given myself more time to flesh everything out, it probably could've been better, but geh. It all just went fucking everywhere.

And I was really considering adding the stuff with Utsuho, but I thought it would be too big of a perspective change for such a short story. Also time.

Bleh. Maybe on day I'll go back to it and fix it up.
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Re: Weekly Writing Challenge! - Post-Apocalyptic Setting
« Reply #790 on: May 25, 2011, 01:55:47 PM »
andrewv42:
 I'd say that the ambiance is absolutely fantastic. Not only is there the lovingly detailed End, but there is the concrete and chilling feeling of inevitability, hopelessness, and finality. Perfect for an aftermath. As noted above, there isn't much else. Still, it manages to stand on its own. (More than what can be said about mine, anyhow)

The NEET(Magical) Colossal:
Great crossover idea. I'll like to nick that, if that's fine with you.
Anyways, the beginning is a bit flat but the middle moves at a nice clip (feels a lot like the translated dialogue of earlier SMT games). I almost found myself trying to use my laptop's arrow keys to pick dialogue options. The end is also a bit disappointing. Maybe ending with a choice (between Chaos, Neutral and Law)? The start also feels incomplete. I suggest you flesh out the backstory more or let it "leak" through the rest of the action, as it seems unimpressive when just sitting at the top. Still, its really good.

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Yeah. Pretty much. Only possible complaint is that its going to be somewhat difficult to put this up to literary analysis. I mean, besides the near-universality of the blame game (noted by GuyYouMetOnline), there is just the whole flood -> ablution/cleansing -> purging/extremism theme with which to run away. Still, it feels a bit too (similar? stylistically predictable?)... something....uh.... envy inducing but not yet mind-blowing?

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Putting that aside, yours isn't at all bad-it just seems that way to me in comparison to Rou's. On its own, your story isn't at all bad, although it doesn't really stand out to me in any way.
This entry and the previous one were great when read but left a bit of an empty feeling afterwards. Again, not bad, but something seems missing...

Iced Fairy:
Ah, the fun of obvious crossovers. The blanks get filled in by existing cannon. Even then, backstory can be fun to read....
Memorable (plot is still stuck in my head) but some degree of forgetting afterwards. Come to think of it, most stuff doesn't quite stick but just draws you back.... Solid but not exactly outstanding...

Himiko:
Good management of tension. The minimalist backstory invites reader inference and invention.

Yuyuko Yakumo:
Aside from the above comments by Guy, there's the anticlimactic disappointment regarding the relatively casual treatment of the "death of Gensokyo". I guess I like symbolism a bit too much, but it seems like a great place for guesses about the metaphysics of the place. The tone resignation at the end is nice but a bit heavy-handed...

GuyYouMetOnline:
Great action and pacing. Seriously great. Your choice of crossover seems to spill into your narrative structure, too. It feels like reading an actual FF game (as opposed to a synopsis). Still, you could have gotten more out of the whole issue of who is real/fake.....

Squidtentacle:
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Squidtentacle: ...What. I'm not sure what the hell that was, except freaky. I have no idea what to make of your Yukari. Anyways, you also lose points for setting the story during the apocalypse, but you get points simply because of sheer WTF. Can't say I like the chiched 'please kill me' thing, though. Also, I would've liked to see the stuff that happened with Utsuho.

Yeah, I don't really like how it all came out. If I had given myself more time to flesh everything out, it probably could've been better, but geh. It all just went fucking everywhere.

And I was really considering adding the stuff with Utsuho, but I thought it would be too big of a perspective change for such a short story. Also time.

Bleh. Maybe on day I'll go back to it and fix it up.
Eldritch Abomination Yukari gets Mercy Killed by Reimu.....
Great premise, great execution, but could be better (No idea how though. Maybe more character focus?)

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LogosOfJ: Kinda hard to comment on this one, seeing as how it doesn't seem that you managed to finish it.

Yeah... I'll need to start finishing what I start. ....... Maybe, just maybe, I'll continue off of this

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Re: Weekly Writing Challenge! - Post-Apocalyptic Setting
« Reply #791 on: May 25, 2011, 07:50:56 PM »
Okay guys, I think we have to clear up something:

First, please don't make lists like that before the proper judgement for the current challenge is even in. It's making things very awkward to have some pseudo-judgements already floating around by participants themselves.

Second, it's fine to support works you like by commentary, but cracking down your judgement on works you don't like is counter-productive. It can easily discourage people from posting an entry at all if they have to expect getting their entry bashed in one of those lists.
So if you want to point out works that you like, feel free to, but if you only have criticism, bring it up with the author in PM. It's more polite that way.


Those terms are not open to discussion.

My apologies if that sounds restrictive, but it's to keep the WWC a place where everyone can enter without having to fear anything. Thank your for understanding.


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Re: Weekly Writing Challenge! - Post-Apocalyptic Setting
« Reply #793 on: May 25, 2011, 10:09:34 PM »
'Kay, I'll wait until after the judgement to post my feedback next time (Rurouni only asked me to wait until after the submission deadline).

Also, yes, praising what was done well is a good thing, but nobody benefits if the bad stuff is just ignored. I'd rather be told if someone doesn't like something in one of my stories; how am I supposed to fix a problem if I never know about it? I agree that just saying 'hey, this story sucks' isn't helpful, but well-thought-out criticism is. And it's also very hard to get, I've found. So yeah.

Re: Weekly Writing Challenge! - Post-Apocalyptic Setting
« Reply #794 on: May 25, 2011, 11:10:17 PM »
^Aya Sakameimaru

Thanks for the warning.

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Re: Weekly Writing Challenge! - Post-Apocalyptic Setting
« Reply #795 on: May 31, 2011, 11:33:09 PM »
Is judgement forthcoming?

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Re: Weekly Writing Challenge! - Post-Apocalyptic Setting
« Reply #796 on: June 01, 2011, 04:59:35 AM »
I sent mine to Ruro, so it should be coming today, yeah.

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Re: Weekly Writing Challenge! - Post-Apocalyptic Setting
« Reply #797 on: June 02, 2011, 03:59:35 AM »
As soon as Mystery Judge #3 is done with their judgment, then you can expect a formal end. :P

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Re: Weekly Writing Challenge! - Calm Before the Storm
« Reply #798 on: June 06, 2011, 03:47:03 AM »
God damn this took forever and a half. As usual, I'm buried under a pile of work (though I did read them all), but at least Mystery Judge #3-- by now I should just say it's Matsuri and call it a day because that's too much of a pain to type every time-- did me the favour of providing the critique this time.

andrewv42:
You hit the nail on the head when you said it was "excessively descriptive and has never been introduced to the concept of plot". Your vocabulary and ability to illustrate detailed scenery with your words is astounding-- very much so. However, without a plot, the picture you painted in my mind remained just that-- a still frame, up until the very last moment, when Utsuho was introduced into the story. To be honest, I'd like to see more of what you'd have to say about a story involving her in this setting. Overall, however, it's excellent writing-- it just needs to go somewhere.
Ruro's note: For post-apocalyptic stories, I like a bit of rambling.

TAC:
It's quite nice, but do watch your pacing. It felt as if you were jumping from one scenario to the next with very little transition, making it seem as if some scenes ended abruptly. I do like the variety, however, and the action scenes were nice, as well. I admit, I'd have liked to have had more detail about Yumemi's Youkai Summoning Program and how Marisa ended up having Kikuri as a youkai companion, but that's just me being picky. It's nicely done.
Ruro's note: If it's a post-apocalyptic story, not everything has to have an explanation at hand. I liked this.

Rou:
A fantastic piece of work. You've got a knack for covering a ton of detail without being long-winded or redundant about it, as well as considering multiple backstories and perspectives all within a short story-- all while managing to keep the story flowing and entertaining at the same time. I honestly can't find anything in this to be nitpicky about. Excellent work.
Ruro's note: I love world building this detailed! That said... (err, this isn't going to sound very nice) the water theme and yet another aquatic-youkai OC are stretching your fetishes to the point where I can't take some of your story elements seriously anymore.

Sankako:
You're improving in terms of character focus. However, the anti-climactic ending, while leaving the reader to predict what happens next, feels as if the story itself was left unfinished; incomplete. There are also some errors that stand out in terms of word choice, as well. I'd suggest proofreading after you finish writing. Overall, keep it up!
Ruro's note: Agreed with Matsy. I do like the feel of this, though, it's much more of a classic adventure story you'd see in a kid's show in the style of Digimon, and visualizing your story this way is *wonderful*.

Iced:
Hahaha, that was excellent-- and beyond my own curiosity of wondering what happened to cause the apocalypse in your story, I can't think of anything else to be picky about. It was very well done, and the music (as well as the Fist of the North Star reference) were very nice touches. Great job. :D
Ruro's note: It reminded me of The Book of Eli, which was a very good thing. And god damn, mad scientist Yumemi and Chiyuri rocking out to AC/DC remain the best offscreen characters ever.

Himiko:
An interesting setting, as well as an interesting choice of characters. As you mentioned, the ending did feel sort of abrupt, but that didn't stop this entry from being enjoyable-- sort of a look into the everyday life of the world post-apocalypse.
Ruro's note: Have I mentioned how much I like unexplained things in post-apocalyptic stories? Because I do. Most all the other works had some kind of explanation for the chaos, but this one just accepted it and ran with it, which was great-- more of an 'everyday' feel. The addition of Yoshika was also a nice touch.

Yuyuko:
Wow, this was really impressive. Interesting concept, interesting setting, and a twist ending. I have to admit that the constantly-switching perspectives was kind of annoying until I got used to it, but beyond that, I found your entry to be very well done. I also liked how you wrote Aya into the story, from beginning to end, showing sides of her you wouldn't normally see in fanon. Excellent work.
Ruro's note: I love your Aya ;___; Good stuff overall, and if it hadn't been for some of the other entries I would have gladly named you the winner of the contest. As it stands, this is the honorary mention in my heart.

Guy:
A solid entry with an interesting theme and concept. I must admit, though, as entertaining as the battles and action scenes were, some of them felt long-winded, and drowned out the plot progress, also occasionally losing my attention. That aside, it was well-written, and definitely enjoyable.
Ruro's note: Fight scenes should be shorter and faster-- in a well-crafted fight, "the pair exchanging words between blows" doesn't happen. Nue's dialogue with Shou made my head spin; I'm assuming that explanation is from NieR, whatever that is. I felt that you let the plot get dragged down in the little technicalities of how souls work too much. And heroic!Nue is a bit hard to swallow when canonically, she's a bit of a coward (her very last spellcard aside), though I can accept that love makes you do some crazy things sometimes. Catchy music, by the way.

LogosOfJ:
Your writing is very, very nice, but I have to admit that I'm having a hard time detecting a plot or any sort of indication of where the story is going, or ending, for that matter.
Ruro's note: I liked the observations on history at the beginning! But it feels unfinished. It feels like scraps of notes pasted together more than a story.

Squid:
...wow, that was heavy. I don't think I'll ever look at Yukari the same way again. While the competition's topic was 'post-apocalyptic', I have to say I rather liked getting an illustration of what happened before people started the recovery process, assessing the damage, and rebuilding their world, as well as whole new lifestyle. Your Satori was also very, very well written, as well. I really liked this one.
Ruro's note: Never fear, it fits the theme just enough. Also Matsy fanboys over Satori too much, but he's right, you wrote her well. The story was really delicious. Poor Yukari.

Right then, majority vote wins. Gogo little fairy.
Iced Fairy! Your skill with short stories shows, believe me. You're still amazing at getting across so many concepts in such a short amount of space.

Honorary mention (fun fact: this is the first time my vote has ever diverged from both of the other judges') is definitely Yuyuko Yakumo. Please please tell me you're going to do more. Seeing Aya not act like a complete jerk was great, even if it took an enormous disaster to do so. And the ending hurt, albeit in a good way.

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Normally I would announce the next contest right now, but... unique circumstances are making me delay that. For now, folks, just sit tight and chill in the library. We'll have a new prompt up for you shortly, and it promises to be quite interesting. :3c

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Re: Weekly Writing Challenge! - Calm Before the Storm
« Reply #799 on: June 06, 2011, 04:27:22 AM »
While everyone who actually has matters in real life has to attend to them, I do believe I will step in here with a miniature challenge of my own.

This one will be a bit different from the normal weekly writing challenge, as I'm only going to take the first five entries, and there won't be a Spechul Membuh tag awarded for winning, unless the other judges - who won't be asked or obligated to take part of this - agree that a specific story was so well written that it deserves rewarding.

Behind the Scenes: A Day in the Life of...
We've all read stories about Marisa and Reimu resolving incidents in their own fashion, but what about their days off?
It doesn't have to be Reimu or Marisa. If you want to write about Tokiko or Nitori or Lyrica Prismriver or Socrates, write about 'em.

There is a limitation to these stories; I want them short. I'm going to be the only one judging them, and I will admit I have been having a hard time to dredge up the motivation to read. I'm not about to dive back into the deep end and start with The Odyssey: Touhou Edition. I'm not going to pin down an exact number - use your judgment. If your story is on the long end, hope for your sake that it is good, because I'm going to be vicious to anyone who rambles.

If there isn't a return of five entries, Friday is the deadline so I can get them all read and organize my judgments, and posted by Saturday so regular WWC prompting can continue on Sunday.

Don't rush your story just to be one of the first five; that'll just sabotage the entire challenge, because your entry will be rushed, and anyone else who is interested will have to rush as well to make sure they're one of the five accepted prompts. Rushing isn't everyone's strong point, so please don't try to force it on everyone else just because you want to be the first entry posted.

GuyYouMetOnline

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Re: Weekly Writing Challenge! - Calm Before the Storm
« Reply #800 on: June 06, 2011, 05:01:31 AM »
Okay, um, Iced's story was just fine, but still, I have to wonder just how the hell Rou didn't win this one. I guess the judges had different opinions, but as far as I'm concerned, you got robbed, Rou. Still, Iced's entry was good, so congratulations, Iced.

Anyways, now that the floor's open for feedback (sorry for going early with mine), I'd especially like people's thoughts on my fight scenes. I never feel that I do a good job with fight scenes, and my entry had a lot of them, including what may be my longest fight scene ever and is certainly my longest continuous fight scene (this, of course, being the battle against the giant monster five years previous). I'd especially like to hear what people think of that particular scene, since it's my first time doing an extended continuous fight scene.

Oh, and Ruro: Yes, that's pretty much what happens in NieR, except that the game doesn't really explain anything (although the extra scenes in a New Game + take the idea and run with it and really do everything possible to make the player feel like a complete dick). It basically says 'hey, these things are the real humans' and then you're in the next fight. If you want any sort of explanation, you have to go to the outside reference material, namely the companion volume 'Grimoire Nier', of which an English translation does exist online. And yes, NieR's got some really good music.

MatsuriSakuragi

Re: Weekly Writing Challenge! - Calm Before the Storm
« Reply #801 on: June 06, 2011, 05:05:36 AM »
Okay, um, Iced's story was just fine, but still, I have to wonder just how the hell Rou didn't win this one. I guess the judges had different opinions, but as far as I'm concerned, you got robbed, Rou. Still, Iced's entry was good, so congratulations, Iced.

You have no idea how much I want to respond with a Kanye West image macro here.

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Re: Weekly Writing Challenge! - Calm Before the Storm
« Reply #802 on: June 06, 2011, 06:12:47 AM »
Congrats Iced for the win! Thanks to the judges for... err, judging. I'm glad to have the honorary mention for my first WWC entry. I'll definitely brush up on my skills some more for future entries.

The reason why my Aya isn't like others is probably due to the fact that I've never read fanon Aya before. :derp: That and the fact that I dislike characters that act as jerks. Though I'll have to do that sooner or later if I'm writing Touhou...

brb writing next story
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Re: Weekly Writing Challenge! - Calm Before the Storm
« Reply #803 on: June 06, 2011, 06:33:09 AM »
Okay, um, Iced's story was just fine, but still, I have to wonder just how the hell Rou didn't win this one. I guess the judges had different opinions, but as far as I'm concerned, you got robbed, Rou.
Best be careful about second-guessing judgements and not being able to accept fair results-- opinions are one thing, even strong ones, but demands about who has to win are not tolerated-- and repeatedly posting thinly veiled insults of other people's work when you were asked at least twice not to, 'cause you're treadin' on some thin ice here.

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Re: Weekly Writing Challenge! - Calm Before the Storm
« Reply #804 on: June 06, 2011, 06:34:27 AM »
The reason why my Aya isn't like others is probably due to the fact that I've never read fanon Aya before. :derp:
Keep it that way, as fanon Aya is an annoying self-centered bitch. Aya is just a little bit ruthless in canon, but not the outright jerkass fanon promotes. Her scenario in SWR should teach you that she's actually quite the playful sort.

@Esi: If the contestants in your contest do well enough, I will honour them with a Wordsmith title, no problem.

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Re: Weekly Writing Challenge! - Calm Before the Storm
« Reply #805 on: June 06, 2011, 06:44:48 AM »
I was admittedly wanting to mention Yuyuko as well. There's admittedly a few places where the story needed polishing - the constant jumping of perspectives was confusing, and the ending was a little abrupt - but in general I think it really stood out to me, especially since it was a first entry. I hope you keep writing.

Congrats to Iced for another win.

And I guess this is my cue to lay off the water for a while. :V

GuyYouMetOnline

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Re: Weekly Writing Challenge! - Calm Before the Storm
« Reply #806 on: June 06, 2011, 06:56:38 AM »
Best be careful about second-guessing judgements and not being able to accept fair results-- opinions are one thing, even strong ones, but demands about who has to win are not tolerated-- and repeatedly posting thinly veiled insults of other people's work when you were asked at least twice not to, 'cause you're treadin' on some thin ice here.

Okay, first, what insults? Saying that story A is good but story B is better is not an insult. And I'm not sure how I'm second-guessing the judgement, either; I just don't agree with it. I'm not saying that Rou's entry had to win; I'm just saying I'm very surprised that it didn't. And I don't see what made you think I'm not accepting fair results, either, especially since I specifically said that hey, the judges clearly have different opinions than I do.
Keep it that way, as fanon Aya is an annoying self-centered bitch. Aya is just a little bit ruthless in canon, but not the outright jerkass fanon promotes. Her scenario in SWR should teach you that she's actually quite the playful sort.

My Aya (as seen in Orphan) is basically Glenn Beck (complete with chalkboards and Nazi comparisons).

Re: Weekly Writing Challenge! - Calm Before the Storm
« Reply #807 on: June 06, 2011, 07:36:24 AM »
Congratulations, Iced!

I also appreciate the feedback from the judges. If you would be able to continue it, I would be quite happy.

That said, I think I'll take a break from Esi's challenge. While it'd probably be one of the easiest things I've written, I don't think I have the state of mind to write anything soon.

EDIT: asgreufhuhg fuck I just realized I forgot to add the italics in my last entry during the Yukari conversation. Bleh.
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Re: Weekly Writing Challenge! - Calm Before the Storm
« Reply #808 on: June 06, 2011, 02:50:55 PM »
Finally! My inability to write for extended periods of time or properly manage drama will no longer be liabilities ;->
I should be doing CAS reflections. I should be counting this as C. Ah, whatever.
Both questions were directly ripped out of Art of Problem Solving vol.1. Fun times *sincerity mode*
Will add diagram for their solving method later. The text will not be edited after initial post

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Sanae was bored. To be more precise, she was finally coming down from the alternating outbursts of wonder and adrenaline highs of fear that had assaulted her since her goddesses decided to move to Gensokyo.

She eyed the guttering candle flame on the desk. Sanae counted out seven markings and concluded that sixty to seventy minutes had passed since it became too dark to read without additional light.

I miss clocks. It's like time here doesn't move until a new incident passes along

The possibility of wheedling Iku into sitting around all night keeping a predictable, fine-tuned AC current flowing into the shrine seemed vanishingly small. The Kappa might have been a help, if it were not for the fact that they used jo-kan instead of Joules. Sanae's first attempt to explain a Volt to Nitori left both of them with headaches.

Out of habit, she fidgeted with her hair. She cursed her forgetfulness when she remembered the layer of fine powder on her hands.
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 She felt so clever, when she attempted to wheedle out of doing this by claiming that the graphite in her pencils might be actually quite valuable in Gensokyo, considering its applications in alchemical (chemical, corrected Sanae) research and relative rarity. Kanako and Suwako agreed, and the entire supply was sold out within a week. A certain puppeteer bought a 40% share, with a certain purple-haired magician accounting for another 35%.  Unsurprisingly, a black-white lured by the thrill of experiment snapped up the remainder. Some difficulties in payment arose and were settled with surprising civility; it seemed that Kirisame's kleptomania was more carefully crafted legend than fact

She realized her mistake when she found a small pile of coal and a pile of paper on her desk the week after Marisa's final payment. A blackboard leaned against the leg of the desk, supported by a box of chalk. Some feathers stood in a cup next to an antiquarian inkwell of western design. The scene was completed by a note from the two gods of the shrine:

We still expect you to do your best <3
-Suwako and Kanako

On the same page was a quadrilateral, two lines, and a question:
Prove that the quadrilateral formed by connecting the orthocenters of the four triangles is a parallelogram.
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Since then, Sanae had been doing her homework. Homework personally assigned to her by gods. She wondered if turning in late would count as blasphemy. Deadlines were loose, but had a habit of creeping up whenever Sanae decided to party with the Tengu (also divinely approved), introduce the Metric system to some Kappa (DIVINELY APPROVED), or work with the Village in expanding their irrigation system (SUWAKO APPROVED! but not by Kanako. I wonder)

She had nothing against math. It was very useful. Calculus was her favorite class and she silently thanked leaving the textbook at home the day before the shrine was spirited away. After all, it made science a lot easier and was the basis for computer programming.

Still, she was at least partially annoyed by the influx of geometry challenges. These things had so far served little practical use except nudging her into seriously contemplating creating a [Frustration Sign] line of spells to complement those handed to her by her deities. Sanae wondered how Archimedes felt about his contemporaries' insistence that the empirical real world was in some ways inferior to the infamous "world of reason" that produced Aristotle's insistence that heavier things fell faster than lighter things and that things fall at constant speed.

I bet the other Miko doesn't have to put up with this
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9 identical Yin-Yang orbs are packed inside a cube. One sphere is in the center of the cube and touches all the other spheres, which all touch three walls of the cube. If the cube has a length of one jo, what is the radius of each sphere?

One of the few things that persistently annoyed Reimu was the fact that the previous priests and priestesses of Hakurei, for some arcane reason, used geometric riddles as seals on most of their records. Apparently, it was very pious to do so.

Or so Reimu had gathered from the scrolls she had been capable of opening. She grudgingly admired the idea of "staged learning" when it applied to the mathematics alone; the riddles sealing new mathematical techniques were complex, but were ultimately applications of what had been taught before. It made the entire venture exciting, neither boringly repetitious or overwhelmingly novel.

What seemed ridiculous was the fact that the sealing questions for other scrolls were seemingly chosen at random.

Take this scroll. Reimu found it in a pantry. It might be something as inconsequential as some head priestesses' favorite recipe for tofu. It might be some secret technique for exorcising disease spirits from grain. It might be a forbidden combat Kata imported from the brief time Gensokyo was the capital of extermination. Reimu had no clue, as the markings on the outside had faded with time.

"I'm here!" announced a witch, strolling in through the front door of the shrine. She carried a number of pegs in one hand and a broomstick in another. Coils of rope were draped across the broomstick.

"Yeah. I'll be out in a moment." Reimu sat up and began walking out. Marisa followed. They stopped at a relatively flat piece of ground and began their work.
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"Hey, Marisa."

Marisa looked up from the scratches in the ground she had made during calculation. "Perfect timing," she replied.

"I've got the solution."
"I've got the solution."

The two eyed each other for a moment.

"The usual?"
"The usual."

Marisa began by measuring out two 1-jo lengths perpendicular to each other, using a peg to scratch the lines into the earth.
Reimu drew a line from the endpoints that did not touch each other, completing an isosceles right triangle. She then measured out a 1-jo line from an endpoint of the long side, then connected the other end of this line to the other end of the longer side, forming another right triangle.
Marisa measured out a 3-jo line from the endpoint of this new hypotenuse, bisected it, and drew out a circle of 3/2 jo.
Reimu concluded by measuring out the distance between the endpoint of the longest hypotenuse and transferring it to a piece of paper. She pricked her thumb with a ceremonial dagger and drew a line of the same length on the scroll.

The seal faded. The scroll unrolled, revealing instructions on how to boil rice in rusty helmets. Marisa and Reimu were silent, scrambling for thought.

"What? They even record that? That was an easy puzzle, but seriously?" Marisa was the first to voice her opinion.

Yuyuko Yakumo

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Re: Weekly Writing Challenge! - Calm Before the Storm
« Reply #809 on: June 06, 2011, 08:11:19 PM »
^How I wish they made textbooks like this.
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